Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Very beautiful poem and it says a lot. People grows mentally and sometimes we outgrow the very person we thought is the right one and meant so much to us. It is in my opinion better to let go and move on in the case where two people don't have the respect for each other anymore. It's not worth trying to find something that has been lost along the way,

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015

Thank you Sandra. That is a healthy point of view,

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I think sometimes the person didn't really change, it just took us a while to really get to know them. Nevertheless, I admired your message and alternating rhymes. I am glad you had a better experience the second time around! Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015

Thank you Joan. Yes, better the second time.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Have I ever been bewildered? I ve been constantly amazed by that very thing. Nice little sonnet but "dealted?" Are we once again divided by a common language? The other thing that bewilders me is why a woman will fall in love with you and then once she has you in her grasp try to change you into something you are not and when she finds she cant ... well thats when she changes into something she wasn't before.
Jeez but it gets complicated.
The formal progression of your sonnet is a damn site more reliable than the progression of a marriage or similar arrangement. The couplet might have beeern stronger had you kicked her out!

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015

Thank you Pantygynt. I used a bit of license on dealted, but liked its feel and flow. Seems i struck cord with the theme. I considered saying "you must go" , but elected to keep it at "i".

reply by Pantygynt on 06-Jul-2015

Ever the generous one aren't you?

reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015

Ok, since I've been getting so much flack on my word "dealted" ! I changed the line.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this sonnet about the way changes that take place after the prize is gained can blow one's mind. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest. I llove the last line.

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 Comment Written 06-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015

Thank you sweetwoodjax. I appreciate the encouragement.

Comment from Sam Bates

Excellent

Hi, a wonderful Sonnet, thank you for being poetic without having me scratching my head in bewilderment. I think many of us have been tricked by the "honeymoon phase"! :/....I love the idea of a "soul without a stitch" it embodies the soul so to speak.

One word tripped me up a bit "demon-dealted, as dealt is already past tense. I don't know if that's something....regardless, I love Sonnets and this surely did not disappoint. Lovely piece! Enjoy the day...Sam

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 Comment Written 06-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015

Thank you Sam. Indeed, soell check didn't like it either, but i thought it added a touch of flair.