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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the sonnet poetry contest. I like -A Shakespearean Sonnet -
Bewildering Change. It is melancholic and beautiful. Good job!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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Excellent entry for the sonnet poetry contest. I like -A Shakespearean Sonnet -
Bewildering Change. It is melancholic and beautiful. Good job!
Comment Written 09-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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Thank you Gypsy Blue Rose.
Comment from tfawcus
Your use of archaic language here enhances the lofty tone of the sonnet as she used to be written. I was prompted to search for 'nary' on the internet as I have never seen it written without being followed by 'a' or 'an' and was amused to find an alternative meaning in the Urban Dictionary, somewhat lascivious and not altogether inappropriate!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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Your use of archaic language here enhances the lofty tone of the sonnet as she used to be written. I was prompted to search for 'nary' on the internet as I have never seen it written without being followed by 'a' or 'an' and was amused to find an alternative meaning in the Urban Dictionary, somewhat lascivious and not altogether inappropriate!
Comment Written 09-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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thank you Tony. I'll have to check that out.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I am glad you said your first wife, Tom, I thought for a moment that you were divorcing your wife! You are right though, people do change, and change into people we don't like. So sad, really. I enjoyed your poem, but I'm pleased you are still happily married to your second wife! :) Sandra.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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I am glad you said your first wife, Tom, I thought for a moment that you were divorcing your wife! You are right though, people do change, and change into people we don't like. So sad, really. I enjoyed your poem, but I'm pleased you are still happily married to your second wife! :) Sandra.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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Thank you Sandra, me too.
Comment from artemis53
I'm not a strict believer that once the ring is on there's an instant change. I believe it's more insidious than that. I've found that success can be as toxic as failure if the two can't function as equals.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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I'm not a strict believer that once the ring is on there's an instant change. I believe it's more insidious than that. I've found that success can be as toxic as failure if the two can't function as equals.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Thank you Artemis. You are fortunate not have experienced it.
Comment from rod007
A true and vivid portrayal of the pain of broken relationships which as you know I'm too familiar with. The purple color should be lighted up as it makes it difficult to read the words. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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A true and vivid portrayal of the pain of broken relationships which as you know I'm too familiar with. The purple color should be lighted up as it makes it difficult to read the words. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Thanks rod, I'll take a look at that.
Comment from I am Cat
Ah yes, i'm sure we've all come to 'know' someone... albeit, perhaps a bit too late.
It's why time heals all wounds, so too... it can heal the other things which may inflict themselves upon us...
Love
Lust
enchantment
;)
and just plain immaturity
I enjoyed your poem... it shows a certain amount of experience fraught with knowledge born of.... yeah, Life's nicks and hard knocks ;)
Well done.
Cat
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Ah yes, i'm sure we've all come to 'know' someone... albeit, perhaps a bit too late.
It's why time heals all wounds, so too... it can heal the other things which may inflict themselves upon us...
Love
Lust
enchantment
;)
and just plain immaturity
I enjoyed your poem... it shows a certain amount of experience fraught with knowledge born of.... yeah, Life's nicks and hard knocks ;)
Well done.
Cat
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thank you Cat. Yup, those knicks and hard knocks. That was my school.
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Oh I know it well... but since I got in on a scholarship, I feel pretty blessed ;)
Comment from Nosha17
I have heard that from a lot of people how some partners change after the wedding is over, that must be tough to deal with. Excellent rhyming and sentiment to convey your thoughts. As this is a contest, in verse 1, line 4, the verb is to deal-past tense is dealt (only one syllable). Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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I have heard that from a lot of people how some partners change after the wedding is over, that must be tough to deal with. Excellent rhyming and sentiment to convey your thoughts. As this is a contest, in verse 1, line 4, the verb is to deal-past tense is dealt (only one syllable). Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thank you Nosha, i made the change.
Comment from robina1978
Great artwork by you that complements this Sonnet perfectly. This one is easier for me. You wrote about how your first wife changed for the worse. A twist, proper rhyme and concluding couplets.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Great artwork by you that complements this Sonnet perfectly. This one is easier for me. You wrote about how your first wife changed for the worse. A twist, proper rhyme and concluding couplets.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thank you Ine. Yes, this is a bit more traditional.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a wonderful poem and I loved the picture. Life changes as the world moves around. I like the concept of the poem and how it tells of the changes. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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This is a wonderful poem and I loved the picture. Life changes as the world moves around. I like the concept of the poem and how it tells of the changes. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thank you Darlene. I appreciate you well wishes.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Multi-talented I see. A great image and well suited to the Sonnet.
Yes, I have to agree change often occurs after committing to another, and sometimes quite rapidly.
I guess relationships grow and change to accommodate this or fall apart.
I really felt the concept you chose was focused and written with clarity.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Multi-talented I see. A great image and well suited to the Sonnet.
Yes, I have to agree change often occurs after committing to another, and sometimes quite rapidly.
I guess relationships grow and change to accommodate this or fall apart.
I really felt the concept you chose was focused and written with clarity.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thank you Shirley. I certainly seems that way. Glad you liked my poem.
