When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "A Violent Encounter "A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Shari.
You have been there for your mother and should never feel any kind of guilt. The stress and worry opened the floodgates to a heated and elevated confrontation.
I've been in a similar situation, and it's amazing how fast anger rises and tempers fly. Cruel words are spoken in haste and out of fear.
Your dialogue is excellent and really shows the intensity of that moment.
Bye
Rosalyne
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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Hi, Shari.
You have been there for your mother and should never feel any kind of guilt. The stress and worry opened the floodgates to a heated and elevated confrontation.
I've been in a similar situation, and it's amazing how fast anger rises and tempers fly. Cruel words are spoken in haste and out of fear.
Your dialogue is excellent and really shows the intensity of that moment.
Bye
Rosalyne
Comment Written 05-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Rosalyne for going so far back to read, a pivotal chapter. I appreciate the exceptional rating.
God Bless,
Shari
Comment from I am Cat
Wow.
I need to catch up! lol
I had to come in here (the booth) to see all the nominees for Book of the mOnth... Congrats! I was happy as a clam to see you were here and this was the book! But dayum! I need to catch up... this is really exciting!
wow. Well done, girlfriend.
I mean... shame on you! LOL
hell, I can't even tell you how many times i've been in a manic state and said that. LOL
I am impressed with the change in writing, as well... by the way... I mean, it's not huge, but it's impressive... well done.
And a nomination well deserved... I need to read all the nominees, but it's going to be hard for them to pull me away from this one. ;)
Cat
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Wow.
I need to catch up! lol
I had to come in here (the booth) to see all the nominees for Book of the mOnth... Congrats! I was happy as a clam to see you were here and this was the book! But dayum! I need to catch up... this is really exciting!
wow. Well done, girlfriend.
I mean... shame on you! LOL
hell, I can't even tell you how many times i've been in a manic state and said that. LOL
I am impressed with the change in writing, as well... by the way... I mean, it's not huge, but it's impressive... well done.
And a nomination well deserved... I need to read all the nominees, but it's going to be hard for them to pull me away from this one. ;)
Cat
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Thanks for the six, Cat. And what a great way to start my week.
I'm off to write chapter 51 today and post tomorrow.
Hugs,
Shari
Comment from w.j.debi
This is excellent story telling, Shari. You really get the emotions boiling. The dialog is snappy and realistic.
You aunt certainly has her nerve painting herself as a saint and you as the bad guy.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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This is excellent story telling, Shari. You really get the emotions boiling. The dialog is snappy and realistic.
You aunt certainly has her nerve painting herself as a saint and you as the bad guy.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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Your critique of my writing skills means a lot, Debi. Thank you so much.
Comment from Donya Quijote
Wow! Family relationships are tough. You did your best. Anne is not the big sister I had wished for most of life. As to aunts, I haven't know many of in my family, even before I somehow became the black sheep. Is there a reason for your aunts deep seeded resentment of you besides the original living arrangements your mother made when she moved in with you. You built a mother-in-law edition to the house. I've seen of couple of such houses around here, as I am looking to buy my first. Vet benefits are working for me. And what of Anne. Did you two ever get along well? She seems to stabbing you in the back whenever she gets a chance. I don't remember why she didn't take in your mother? She is a bit of a free spirit, if I remember right? Is she Bobby's mother? I need to right your family tree to remind me of things, especially when I miss a few posts.
Did you really say the f-word in public, in earshot of real people? Such an ugly but in rare cases an appropriate word. At least saying does have the effect of relieving the stress, the anger, etc. temporarily.
Seems the staff also knew better to deal with you than the angry one, your aunt. Is your mom's sister not considered immediate family?
Good, emotionally charged episode.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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Wow! Family relationships are tough. You did your best. Anne is not the big sister I had wished for most of life. As to aunts, I haven't know many of in my family, even before I somehow became the black sheep. Is there a reason for your aunts deep seeded resentment of you besides the original living arrangements your mother made when she moved in with you. You built a mother-in-law edition to the house. I've seen of couple of such houses around here, as I am looking to buy my first. Vet benefits are working for me. And what of Anne. Did you two ever get along well? She seems to stabbing you in the back whenever she gets a chance. I don't remember why she didn't take in your mother? She is a bit of a free spirit, if I remember right? Is she Bobby's mother? I need to right your family tree to remind me of things, especially when I miss a few posts.
Did you really say the f-word in public, in earshot of real people? Such an ugly but in rare cases an appropriate word. At least saying does have the effect of relieving the stress, the anger, etc. temporarily.
Seems the staff also knew better to deal with you than the angry one, your aunt. Is your mom's sister not considered immediate family?
Good, emotionally charged episode.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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I don't think Dee liked anyone except herself and her son Bobby. She was a bitter person for reasons I can only guess. Lack of money would be home. Several failed relationships another. But she was a wonderful story teller and astrologer too. Striking to look at when young and slender.
Anne and I got along, but I didn't see much of her. She lived too far away. My mother didn't want to live with her at all!
She had a high IQ same as my sister Barb. Anne always put people down by proving she knew more.
Fortunately, when I used the F word, only the volunteer worker and my aunt heard me.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Shari. I have a question for you. How did you feel inside when you wrote this chapter? This is such a powerful insight into Dee's mind which sometimes seems slightly out of focus to me. Great work and and excellent addition to your story. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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G'day Shari. I have a question for you. How did you feel inside when you wrote this chapter? This is such a powerful insight into Dee's mind which sometimes seems slightly out of focus to me. Great work and and excellent addition to your story. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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When I wrote this and the wedding scene, I felt sick to my stomach as in acid indigestion. I like to think my aunt was afraid of losing her sister, the last one left in her immediate family. I didn't blame her, just Anne.
Comment from Muffins
You had every right to explode. It was about time. I was beginning to think you were applying for sainthood. Your Aunt had no right to charge at you that way.
This chapter is written with such heat and action;even though, no blows were thrown and no one went anywhere. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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You had every right to explode. It was about time. I was beginning to think you were applying for sainthood. Your Aunt had no right to charge at you that way.
This chapter is written with such heat and action;even though, no blows were thrown and no one went anywhere. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much for the exceptional rating ratings. LOL I love the remark about sainthood. I'm working on it.
Comment from Louise Michelle
I think Dee should have given you the benefit of the doubt. I'd like to smack that smirk off her face.
Now I'm getting even more aggravated. Of course you and Frank were entitled to the cruise. Her health wasn't that bad at the time.
Reading this just makes me glad I moved out of state some 30 years ago. However, I don't think I would have had to deal with all that crap. My sister and I have had our problems, but we're not that vicious.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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I think Dee should have given you the benefit of the doubt. I'd like to smack that smirk off her face.
Now I'm getting even more aggravated. Of course you and Frank were entitled to the cruise. Her health wasn't that bad at the time.
Reading this just makes me glad I moved out of state some 30 years ago. However, I don't think I would have had to deal with all that crap. My sister and I have had our problems, but we're not that vicious.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Uh oh, it's going to really get mean between Barbara and me.
Comment from His Grayness
Excellent writing skills exhibited here (as usual for this gifted author). The story is upsetting of course but the delivery of the situation and the emotions is well achieved and the reader is fully gripped all the way through! Great Work HIS GRAYNESS
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Excellent writing skills exhibited here (as usual for this gifted author). The story is upsetting of course but the delivery of the situation and the emotions is well achieved and the reader is fully gripped all the way through! Great Work HIS GRAYNESS
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Vance, as always for your compliments.
HUGS,
Shari
Comment from meggie13
I read your story and it is quite interesting . I have not read the preceding chapters so my comments are on this particular read. Your aunt is a very angry and jealous person. She says all the lies because she really wants to test you to the limit. She gets angrier when you do not confront her the way she wants you to. Like they say kill with kindness. At least you will keep your sanity. Keep doing what you are doing. I do admire your patience. There is a good message here , family members will always have arguments but the winner is the one who preserves the peace.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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I read your story and it is quite interesting . I have not read the preceding chapters so my comments are on this particular read. Your aunt is a very angry and jealous person. She says all the lies because she really wants to test you to the limit. She gets angrier when you do not confront her the way she wants you to. Like they say kill with kindness. At least you will keep your sanity. Keep doing what you are doing. I do admire your patience. There is a good message here , family members will always have arguments but the winner is the one who preserves the peace.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Interesting to get a review from someone new to the story. You saw Dee's character for sure. Kill with kindness is what I do to the bitter end even with hubby telling me to get even. Thanks ever so much for the exceptional rating.
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You are welcome, Spitfire. Thank you for telling me that I saw Dee's character. You deserved the exceptional rating. meggie :))
Comment from IndianaIrish
Wow, Shari! I was glued to every word. I sure don't blame you for leaving Your aunt standing there and dropping the f-bomb on her. I honestly don't know how you kept from pulling her hair out. She sure knows how to twist words to make her sound like an angel and you the devil. People sure can be spiteful. Intense chapter.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Wow, Shari! I was glued to every word. I sure don't blame you for leaving Your aunt standing there and dropping the f-bomb on her. I honestly don't know how you kept from pulling her hair out. She sure knows how to twist words to make her sound like an angel and you the devil. People sure can be spiteful. Intense chapter.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Thanks. Karyn. More coming that continues to test my patience.
