Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

The internal rhyme and alliteration are what makes this reverse cinquain stand out. It is another example o how effectively minimalistic writing can portray not only the pracical aspectsa of a scene but also the feeling that lies behind it.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015

Thank you Pantygynt. Haven't seen you reviewing in a while.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Oh, how familiar this is (and what fun - NOT. LOL) Fishing is a sport I enjoy very much, and your poem reminds me of those times so well - I want to see that bobber plunge, though! LOL. As a northerner, I had my secret spots so I didn't have to share a shoreline - much better. :)

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015

Thank you Dawn. Glad to provide vicarious sport.

reply by Dawn Munro on 26-Jun-2015

You're welcome - yes, I enjoyed!

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

I like this... especially the alliteration in it... and I can
see the bobs bobbing... (we had fried catfish tonight)
He fried the one carp he caught too... (not a good fish) bleh
lol
But the rest were very good. Not bad for a week's work. lol
We had our best friends over (after all, it's THEIR dock) :)

'Shoreline sharing, fishline staring,
Bobbers bobbing in time,
With baited hooks.
So Fine! '

(of course, I"m a sucker for rhyme... any time!)
;)
well done
Cat

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015

Thank you Cat. Carp is better smoked. Glad you liked the poem. Your Neal sounds ideal.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thanks for sharing more of your Father's Day with your son-in-law and grandson and a description of what makes fishing a joy. I enjoyed another of your rhymed cinquains and the added use of alliteration.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015

Thank you Joan. You are always so supportive. I appreciate it.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

Beautiful poem again. Your work is excellent and your explanation of the poems are informative and very helpful. I did some according to your guidelines, I would like to try a few each week and see how it goes. Thank you

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015

Thank you Sandra. It pkease me to help fire your enthusiasm.

Comment from ProjectBluebook

Excellent

I love fishing and I love this poem. Picture is great for this type of poem. Thanks for explaining the reverse cinquain in the author notes. yep, that looks like a species of Drum in his hand. Also called a gasper goo in the south. They pull hard for their size. What you call junk fish when you throw lines and nets. Takes me back to fishing. Thank you very much. great poem. wackydo

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015

Than you Wackydo. We cal the sheep head here, but they are junk fish. We throw them back. They do fight wel though.