Jaime
A tale of a summer friendship57 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Well, this has to be the best poem
I've read for a long time, Rod -
the words, rhythm and rhyme not only
flow smoothly throughout, you tell
a grand tale so naturally. All in all,
most impressive and had I a six it would
be yours.
I can wish you good luck in the contest though.
Margaret
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Well, this has to be the best poem
I've read for a long time, Rod -
the words, rhythm and rhyme not only
flow smoothly throughout, you tell
a grand tale so naturally. All in all,
most impressive and had I a six it would
be yours.
I can wish you good luck in the contest though.
Margaret
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Wow! That is some tribute, Margaret. I am both thrilled and flattered by your response and effusive praise. Thank you so much. Rod
Comment from thee-name
Excellent poem. I enjoyed reading this writing.
I saw a pretty face today
with specks of cinnamon
A mint of mirth in clear blue eyes,
two impish lips that smiled.
She grabbed my shirt and pulled me close,
then gave me one sweet kiss.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Excellent poem. I enjoyed reading this writing.
I saw a pretty face today
with specks of cinnamon
A mint of mirth in clear blue eyes,
two impish lips that smiled.
She grabbed my shirt and pulled me close,
then gave me one sweet kiss.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for sharing "Jaime" and pointing out the specific passages you enjoyed the most. Rod
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thank you!
Comment from skye
The story of young love never gets old. You captured both inside this beautifully written poem of childhood and love, loss and growth.
I loved it.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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The story of young love never gets old. You captured both inside this beautifully written poem of childhood and love, loss and growth.
I loved it.
Excellent.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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You're absolute right, skye. This kind of young love story never gets old. I am delighted you enjoyed "Jaime" so much. Thanks for sharing. Rod
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is quite a comprehensive poem from the author. I read your biography and I admire the fact that you were a teacher. Well done and I loved the poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is quite a comprehensive poem from the author. I read your biography and I admire the fact that you were a teacher. Well done and I loved the poem.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you for both sharing "Jaime" and your comments about my being a teacher. So pleased you enjoyed the poem. Rod
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My pleasure
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, how I wish I had a six for this most marvelous story-in-a-poem! The rhyme and meter are flawless, the story so tender, so innocently romantic and so very evocative, I pictured everything. I hope you win the contest - this poem has everything!
***********************OUTSTANDING*************************!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Oh, how I wish I had a six for this most marvelous story-in-a-poem! The rhyme and meter are flawless, the story so tender, so innocently romantic and so very evocative, I pictured everything. I hope you win the contest - this poem has everything!
***********************OUTSTANDING*************************!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your most effusive praise of "Jaime." I am delighted you enjoyed the poem and could picture the action easily. I also appreciate the vote of confidence! Rod
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Very much my pleasure!
Comment from BellaSpirit
Memories of a sweet summer crush that perhaps could have been more. This is an endearing poem, one which most of us can relate. You brought this story poem to life and added a personal touch by giving such a descriptive visual. Very creative contest entry.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Memories of a sweet summer crush that perhaps could have been more. This is an endearing poem, one which most of us can relate. You brought this story poem to life and added a personal touch by giving such a descriptive visual. Very creative contest entry.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for sharing "Jaime," BellaSpirit. I am delighted you found the story endearing and easy to relate to. Rod
Comment from robina1978
Nice photo of this pretty girl. You met and bonded during the summer holidays. The next year she is gone, Granddad said, her parents split up and he did not know where she'd gone. I can relate to this. At first I only had holiday friends. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Nice photo of this pretty girl. You met and bonded during the summer holidays. The next year she is gone, Granddad said, her parents split up and he did not know where she'd gone. I can relate to this. At first I only had holiday friends. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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I searched and searched for a photo that was similar to Jaime and fortunately found one. Thank you so much for sharing my story and I am delighted you could relate to it. Rod
Comment from SueZen
BEAUTIFUL in every way, fills me with sweet memories of my own teenage years and a few, like yours, enchanting, blissful encounters. Indeed, how much has changed since then. Relived when my own children were teenagers and every day when I observe the young, so free in one way, with each other, FORTUNATELY, because many are burdened, "suffer" from personal family situations and more. Poem touches, moves me so deeply that I find it hard to find adequate words to describe, but share same feelings towards the young and the young at heart and meander along with what expressed so tenderly throughout the whole poem. In last four verses, hoping, wishing and then, finally wondering "what if"...
No wonder RECOGNIZED as believe we all can identify with the memories, feelings expressed in this exquisite poem. Thank you so much for sharing. Reminds me too to remain "forever" young at heart, which do, for continue to engage with the young.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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BEAUTIFUL in every way, fills me with sweet memories of my own teenage years and a few, like yours, enchanting, blissful encounters. Indeed, how much has changed since then. Relived when my own children were teenagers and every day when I observe the young, so free in one way, with each other, FORTUNATELY, because many are burdened, "suffer" from personal family situations and more. Poem touches, moves me so deeply that I find it hard to find adequate words to describe, but share same feelings towards the young and the young at heart and meander along with what expressed so tenderly throughout the whole poem. In last four verses, hoping, wishing and then, finally wondering "what if"...
No wonder RECOGNIZED as believe we all can identify with the memories, feelings expressed in this exquisite poem. Thank you so much for sharing. Reminds me too to remain "forever" young at heart, which do, for continue to engage with the young.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Wow! I am very excited about your response to "Jaime." I am especially pleased it brought back sweet memories of your own teenage years and that you found it so touching. Thank you so much for sharing and all those stars. Rod
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From my heart to yours, touched by your response (thank you !) and sweet memories, love for the young, poetry, etc. shared. Blessings and Love Sue xxx
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I really enjoyed this piece.
The short rhythmic verses provided a good pace to the piece.
This brought back memories for me too. Every year we went to the coast for the holidays. Two different sets of friends.
Of course, it is so much easier for kids these days to keep in touch than it was for us.
Well written and engaging piece.
Good luck in the competition.
GMG
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Hi there,
I really enjoyed this piece.
The short rhythmic verses provided a good pace to the piece.
This brought back memories for me too. Every year we went to the coast for the holidays. Two different sets of friends.
Of course, it is so much easier for kids these days to keep in touch than it was for us.
Well written and engaging piece.
Good luck in the competition.
GMG
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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I am delighted you enjoyed "Jaime," and could relate to the story. I truly appreciate your praise. Thank for sharing, GMG, and for your best wishes. Rod
Comment from WrightSavvy
This was very precious and tender to me. I'm glad you held onto this memory to write down. In the beginning, some lines were a little forced, but only a tad. I appreciate the photos. When you compared her freckles to cinnamon, your intelligence and poetic nature truly showed.
Marvelous.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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This was very precious and tender to me. I'm glad you held onto this memory to write down. In the beginning, some lines were a little forced, but only a tad. I appreciate the photos. When you compared her freckles to cinnamon, your intelligence and poetic nature truly showed.
Marvelous.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Well, a lot of years have passed under the bridge, but this memory begged to be recalled in poetic form. Thanks so much for sharing "Jaime" and for your very kind praise. Rod
