Jaime
A tale of a summer friendship57 total reviews
Comment from Zue65
This poem reminded of the memories of the youth and the sweet blossoming of friendly relationships. The nostalgia in the message was really warm and felt by the readers . The poem was effective in sending the said message. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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This poem reminded of the memories of the youth and the sweet blossoming of friendly relationships. The nostalgia in the message was really warm and felt by the readers . The poem was effective in sending the said message. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Nassus, I am thrilled that you enjoyed "Jaime" so much and am especially pleased it brought back sweet memories of your own youth/ Thank you so much for the exceptional rating and kind praise. Rod
Comment from RGstar
Beautiful writing, Rob. Reminiscing hurts little, and beauty in thought. The inspiration for the write shows how aware of the niceties of life you are.
Lovely ambiance surrounds the work.
I wish you well in the competition.
My best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Beautiful writing, Rob. Reminiscing hurts little, and beauty in thought. The inspiration for the write shows how aware of the niceties of life you are.
Lovely ambiance surrounds the work.
I wish you well in the competition.
My best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for sharing "Jaime" and for your kind praise and best wishes. Rod
Comment from Dean Kuch
And a beautifully composed, well rhymed coming-of-age poem it is too, Rod. I really loved the story it shares. It's a bit melancholy, a little bittersweet...but that's what makes it so very appealing, at least for me.
Wonderfully written, Rod. I wish you all the luck in the contest with this sweet, sad story.
~Dean
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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And a beautifully composed, well rhymed coming-of-age poem it is too, Rod. I really loved the story it shares. It's a bit melancholy, a little bittersweet...but that's what makes it so very appealing, at least for me.
Wonderfully written, Rod. I wish you all the luck in the contest with this sweet, sad story.
~Dean
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Hi Dean. Always pleased to receive your reviews. Thanks for sharing "Jaime" and for your very kind praise and best wishes. Rod
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The pleasure was all mine, my friend.
~Dean
Comment from Alan K Pease
Lovely story in a poem full of an affair of the heart that could have been more than friendship but was only a gift of one summer. Excellent abcb rhyme, rhythm - an easy read. I have a similar history
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Lovely story in a poem full of an affair of the heart that could have been more than friendship but was only a gift of one summer. Excellent abcb rhyme, rhythm - an easy read. I have a similar history
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Alan, for making this a memorable morning! I really appreciate your sharing "Jaime" and your exceptional review and rating. Also delighted you could relate to the experience. Rod
Comment from Joy Graham
I really enjoyed this story poem entry :) I think it'd be a contender, but what do I know about the judging lol! You described a lovely time from your past. Jaime sounds like a good friend to remember with blushes and wishes that it could have turned out different. If only... I felt like I was there seeing the whole friendship develop. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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I really enjoyed this story poem entry :) I think it'd be a contender, but what do I know about the judging lol! You described a lovely time from your past. Jaime sounds like a good friend to remember with blushes and wishes that it could have turned out different. If only... I felt like I was there seeing the whole friendship develop. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Joy, for sharing "Jaime" and your most encouraging review and high praise. I am especially pleased you felt a kinship with the characters. Rod
Comment from Megalips
What an adorable poem! I love the rhyme and the flow, perfect cadence, and of course the story you tell. I think we all have a thing for childhood innocence and you portray that so beautifully here, along with the little hint of something more when we had the 'kiss scene'...then, we went back to 'peas and carrots'. I love the touch of the lure she left behind. You're a seasoned poet...I love the words you choose and descriptions. Very nice!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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What an adorable poem! I love the rhyme and the flow, perfect cadence, and of course the story you tell. I think we all have a thing for childhood innocence and you portray that so beautifully here, along with the little hint of something more when we had the 'kiss scene'...then, we went back to 'peas and carrots'. I love the touch of the lure she left behind. You're a seasoned poet...I love the words you choose and descriptions. Very nice!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, Megalips, for your wonderful response to "Jaime." I am very flattered you enjoy my use of language and descriptions so much. This poem was so much fun to write, I hope to write a sequel soon. Rod
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and I very much look forward to reading it!
Comment from Janet7053
this is the best tale I've read in a long while. Sweet, innocent...reminds me of the movie My Girl with Macauley Caulkin. Friendship can be as you describe. I saw no spag and wish you the best.
This is tremendous conversation-
"You got a suit? The lake's real warm.
I'm guessing you can swim.
I know a spot where there's a rope
that's dangling from a limb.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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this is the best tale I've read in a long while. Sweet, innocent...reminds me of the movie My Girl with Macauley Caulkin. Friendship can be as you describe. I saw no spag and wish you the best.
This is tremendous conversation-
"You got a suit? The lake's real warm.
I'm guessing you can swim.
I know a spot where there's a rope
that's dangling from a limb.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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I truly appreciate your response to "Jaime," especially my use of dialog. Thank you for sharing, Janet, and your very kind praise. Rod
Comment from Sis Cat
This is an exceptional story poem. I enjoyed the ease of your rhyme and your engaging dialogue and descriptions. You kept the story moving forward. It was touching and eloquent and made me think of my own summer friends. thank you for sharing this exceptional poem. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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This is an exceptional story poem. I enjoyed the ease of your rhyme and your engaging dialogue and descriptions. You kept the story moving forward. It was touching and eloquent and made me think of my own summer friends. thank you for sharing this exceptional poem. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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I am delighted to share poems like "Jaime" with readers like you, Sis Cat, who enjoy my work so much. Thank you for your high praise and best wishes. Rod
Comment from Amy Greta
Your poem is OUTSTANDING! It's so much more than a poem, it's a story, and I didn't want it to end, especially with Jaime gone! I got an ache in my heart reading that part, but how touching she left you her lure, kind of like she wants you to "fish" or look for her. You rhymed the entire piece so well, and I loved the conversations, as they seem so authentic. Even if she was still there the next summer, it may not have been able to top that one when you were 14. Love it!
~Amy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Your poem is OUTSTANDING! It's so much more than a poem, it's a story, and I didn't want it to end, especially with Jaime gone! I got an ache in my heart reading that part, but how touching she left you her lure, kind of like she wants you to "fish" or look for her. You rhymed the entire piece so well, and I loved the conversations, as they seem so authentic. Even if she was still there the next summer, it may not have been able to top that one when you were 14. Love it!
~Amy
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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"Outstanding!" is not a word I hear too often, so I am thrilled that you enjoyed "Jaime" that much, Amy. It was a fun poem to write, and even more fun to share with readers like you. Rod
Comment from write hand blue
I think this is excellent.
I enjoyed reading this smoothly flowing story/poem.
Memories of a bygone age. An unusual love story.
Thank you for sharing.
:) Mel.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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I think this is excellent.
I enjoyed reading this smoothly flowing story/poem.
Memories of a bygone age. An unusual love story.
Thank you for sharing.
:) Mel.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Indeed it is a memory of a bygone age, Mel. I'd hate to tell you how long ago this happened. Thank you so much for sharing. Rod
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I wouldn't be surprised, I have one that although has different circumstances, goes back 50 years... Mel.
