Love Songs For Every Heart
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Comment from Alaskastory
"Perdina" is a marvelous addition to the book "Love Songs For Every Heart". Truly, it has a lot to say about a young person's struggle and actually projects a solution for her dilemma. Beautifully told, MissM.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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"Perdina" is a marvelous addition to the book "Love Songs For Every Heart". Truly, it has a lot to say about a young person's struggle and actually projects a solution for her dilemma. Beautifully told, MissM.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Thank you for another golden star, and for reading this long poem when it was worth only two cents. You are a true friend! loved what you said about Perdina. It is a poem born of love for someone wandering lost.
Comment from gypsymoth
If only this could be the happy ending for all those who left a
family who loved them much more than realized. Rebellion is part of the growth process, almost all experience it and wonder to where they think the grass is greener. Sadly, we know, all don't come home.
Beautiful story, skillfully told . I'm out of 'sixes'.
Gypsymoth
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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If only this could be the happy ending for all those who left a
family who loved them much more than realized. Rebellion is part of the growth process, almost all experience it and wonder to where they think the grass is greener. Sadly, we know, all don't come home.
Beautiful story, skillfully told . I'm out of 'sixes'.
Gypsymoth
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your kind review Gypsymoth. I am honored that you'd want to give it six stars, and thank you for telling me. That means so much. MM
Comment from Dean Kuch
Published novelist and famed poet extraordinaire, Heather Graham, once told me after she'd read one of my darker poems (Reiny Daze, I think it was), "Dear Dean, when it comes to poetry, please try and remember that shorter is always better." But of course, I begged to differ, and I feel the same way in the case of this epic piece, Adonna. Sometimes it takes more than just the customary four, perhaps five, stanzas to tell a complete story.
Not only is this poem long, but it's also well rhymed and flows very smoothly, and the melancholy yet inspirational story it tells is an excellent one at that.
Heather is the NYT and USA Today bestselling author of over two hundred novels including suspense, paranormal, historical, and mainstream fare, but that doesn't mean she's an expert. Okay, maybe it does, but length is all a matter of perception, isn't it? I very much enjoyed your rather lengthy poem about a young girl who gets lost in the woods, and perhaps lost a bit in her own life as well, and finds the generosity of kind strangers during her travels.
Excellent work. ~Dean
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Published novelist and famed poet extraordinaire, Heather Graham, once told me after she'd read one of my darker poems (Reiny Daze, I think it was), "Dear Dean, when it comes to poetry, please try and remember that shorter is always better." But of course, I begged to differ, and I feel the same way in the case of this epic piece, Adonna. Sometimes it takes more than just the customary four, perhaps five, stanzas to tell a complete story.
Not only is this poem long, but it's also well rhymed and flows very smoothly, and the melancholy yet inspirational story it tells is an excellent one at that.
Heather is the NYT and USA Today bestselling author of over two hundred novels including suspense, paranormal, historical, and mainstream fare, but that doesn't mean she's an expert. Okay, maybe it does, but length is all a matter of perception, isn't it? I very much enjoyed your rather lengthy poem about a young girl who gets lost in the woods, and perhaps lost a bit in her own life as well, and finds the generosity of kind strangers during her travels.
Excellent work. ~Dean
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Hi Dean. I'm impressed that you are acquainted with Heather Graham. Are you from Florida? She is such a popular writer.
Thank you for your most generous and supportive comments. I'm very pleased to know you enjoyed my story. Thank you for all that you said. You are one person I tend to listen to seriously. :p
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You're very welcome, MM...
She contacted me by email after I'd submitted my work to a contest she was helping to judge. She was very gracious.
~Dean
Comment from Showboat
You are such a talented poet, Miss Merri, that I'm always amazed at the work you share with us.
Excellent use of imagery, wonderful word choices! Excellent all around,
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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You are such a talented poet, Miss Merri, that I'm always amazed at the work you share with us.
Excellent use of imagery, wonderful word choices! Excellent all around,
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Gayle, you are so kind to say that! Thank you for this exceptional rating and for the many generous words of support. I'm very grateful. MM
Comment from Just2Write
A beautiful allegory, Adonna - How wonderful that Perdina found her way. The cabin represented a place of salvation to me, such as a church or sanctuary, and the people in the home represented charity and benevolence, who proffered the sustenance required for the body and soul to heal.
I pray that all that lose their way find such a place of healing. We all need a place to stop and assess who we are, and then if we choose to, the hope of returning to a place or time in our lives where we can find security.
I loved that she returned to the cabin with her son. It provided her with the chance to let him see that same kindness for himself - and perhaps one day to pay it forward.
Great write, m'dear. Yes, a little long - but well worth the read.
Sorry - nary a six left.
Rose.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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A beautiful allegory, Adonna - How wonderful that Perdina found her way. The cabin represented a place of salvation to me, such as a church or sanctuary, and the people in the home represented charity and benevolence, who proffered the sustenance required for the body and soul to heal.
I pray that all that lose their way find such a place of healing. We all need a place to stop and assess who we are, and then if we choose to, the hope of returning to a place or time in our lives where we can find security.
I loved that she returned to the cabin with her son. It provided her with the chance to let him see that same kindness for himself - and perhaps one day to pay it forward.
Great write, m'dear. Yes, a little long - but well worth the read.
Sorry - nary a six left.
Rose.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thank you kind Rose. This is a lovely review from a lovely lady. I appreciate your words of praise and loved your interpretation of the allegory. Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts. MM
Comment from write hand blue
The story was well told. I was hooked by the story's great visual.
You could feel the woman's emotions through the poem.
An excellent write was a pleasure to read.
I enjoy stories that have a happy ending.
Thanks for sharing.
:) Mel.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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The story was well told. I was hooked by the story's great visual.
You could feel the woman's emotions through the poem.
An excellent write was a pleasure to read.
I enjoy stories that have a happy ending.
Thanks for sharing.
:) Mel.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading this long poem, Mel. I am so glad to know you were 'hooked.' Your words meant so much to me.
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My pleasure...
Comment from Sis Cat
This is an excellent story poem that reminded me of the parables of the Prodigal Son and the Good Samaritan. This poem is vivid. Your descriptions sucked me into this story about Perdina's encounter with angels of mercy. You created a narrative arc that went from loss to found. Your close of the mother and son looking up at the house that sheltered her touched me. thank you for sharing this exceptional poem.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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This is an excellent story poem that reminded me of the parables of the Prodigal Son and the Good Samaritan. This poem is vivid. Your descriptions sucked me into this story about Perdina's encounter with angels of mercy. You created a narrative arc that went from loss to found. Your close of the mother and son looking up at the house that sheltered her touched me. thank you for sharing this exceptional poem.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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I'm so glad you liked this poem and thank you so much for reading it, and for your kind words of encouragement to me. I'm very glad you felt the emotion in the story. Hugs, MM
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It was a great story poem. Thanks.
Comment from Alan K Pease
This is a very fine poem full of allegory - a story in a poem. It has a sweet perfume of the tale of the Good Samaritan, a moral and uplifting tale of goodness and the gift of one reborn. Excellent poetics - rhyme, rhythm, imagery - a very good read.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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This is a very fine poem full of allegory - a story in a poem. It has a sweet perfume of the tale of the Good Samaritan, a moral and uplifting tale of goodness and the gift of one reborn. Excellent poetics - rhyme, rhythm, imagery - a very good read.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much Alan. I'm delighted to have your thoughts on this story and I'm honored with the six star review too. You are always welcome in this corner. :p
Comment from Deborah Marie
Could this be a start of a poetic book about Perdina? I think so and I'd use this poem as the introductory chapter... You could add so much, much more about "Perdina..." Beautifully penned with wonderful use of artwork. Thanks for sharing and keep 'em coming. Let me know if you decide to turn this into a book of poems about "Perdina...," Deb
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Could this be a start of a poetic book about Perdina? I think so and I'd use this poem as the introductory chapter... You could add so much, much more about "Perdina..." Beautifully penned with wonderful use of artwork. Thanks for sharing and keep 'em coming. Let me know if you decide to turn this into a book of poems about "Perdina...," Deb
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Well, Deborah Marie... you have a good idea here, and I appreciate the thought so much. I also appreciate your generous rating and kind words about the poem. Thank you very much. MM
Comment from heyjude
Miss Merri, you did a terrific job of writing this
story poem. It held me captive all the way through.
There was no way I could stop reading it.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Miss Merri, you did a terrific job of writing this
story poem. It held me captive all the way through.
There was no way I could stop reading it.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thank you Jude. I'm honored by your words and the exceptional rating, and want you to know how glad I am that this held your interest, even though quite long. Thanks for all that you said. MM
