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Viewing comments for Chapter 111 "I Need to Show"Personal poems
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Comment from I am Cat
Most kids (especially young boys and unfortunate older ones) need to 'show' something to their mothers/sisters/strangers... be happy it's not resting in the toilet or inside his pants. That's all I have to say about that.
:P
lolol (oh lord, did I just say that out loud?)
lol
;)
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Most kids (especially young boys and unfortunate older ones) need to 'show' something to their mothers/sisters/strangers... be happy it's not resting in the toilet or inside his pants. That's all I have to say about that.
:P
lolol (oh lord, did I just say that out loud?)
lol
;)
Comment Written 22-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Thank you Cat. I must say that I sure agree with that.
Comment from rod007
Another masterly poem that highlights what we kids did to enjoy the affection of our mother. Yeah, we liked being cherished and fussed over like little chicks just hatched out of the egg. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Another masterly poem that highlights what we kids did to enjoy the affection of our mother. Yeah, we liked being cherished and fussed over like little chicks just hatched out of the egg. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Thank you rod, good analogy.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A touching personal poem and beautiful image which captures the value and gift of a mother's love.
The Octogram format suits the subject well and the repeated lines are fitting.
Similar scenarios have played out with my own children over the years and always a kiss helped to take the pain away.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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A touching personal poem and beautiful image which captures the value and gift of a mother's love.
The Octogram format suits the subject well and the repeated lines are fitting.
Similar scenarios have played out with my own children over the years and always a kiss helped to take the pain away.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Thank you Shirley. I figured any mom can identify with this.
Comment from Pantygynt
You have caught the little boy's psychology brilliantly. I can actually remember going there on several occasions as a child. The form you have chosen with its repeated lines is just so right for the theme of the poem. It captures the pleading nature of the piece beautifully.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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You have caught the little boy's psychology brilliantly. I can actually remember going there on several occasions as a child. The form you have chosen with its repeated lines is just so right for the theme of the poem. It captures the pleading nature of the piece beautifully.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Nothing better than mum kissing your booboos, eh.
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Well there wasn't back then, but now ....
Comment from Joan E.
Yes, I remember and I need my mommy to kiss and make my booboo better--I was walking out of an underground parking garage from darkness into bright sunlight and didn't notice the speed bump, which I tripped on and down I went. The worst bruise is on my buttock, but she would have kissed my elbow! Arnica ointment has helped to make them better. Thanks for your timely Octogram and its appealing rhymes. Best wishes to grandson Isaac and your daughter- Joan
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Yes, I remember and I need my mommy to kiss and make my booboo better--I was walking out of an underground parking garage from darkness into bright sunlight and didn't notice the speed bump, which I tripped on and down I went. The worst bruise is on my buttock, but she would have kissed my elbow! Arnica ointment has helped to make them better. Thanks for your timely Octogram and its appealing rhymes. Best wishes to grandson Isaac and your daughter- Joan
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Thank you Joan, the elbow would be better place. Hooe your booboo is all better niw.
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It's been a two weeks and the color of the bruises is fading and the soreness is relenting. It takes longer to heal when we are older! Smiles- Joan
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Yep, it rhymes on time. Amusing and makes a good poem with the picture. A bo bo on his knee, he must stay out of the trees, please. So many types of poems, thanks for describing the Octogram. This one was a slam, oh -- _am! Count your doubloon (money)I always say... wackydo, done went coo coo..
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Yep, it rhymes on time. Amusing and makes a good poem with the picture. A bo bo on his knee, he must stay out of the trees, please. So many types of poems, thanks for describing the Octogram. This one was a slam, oh -- _am! Count your doubloon (money)I always say... wackydo, done went coo coo..
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Thank you Wackydo. You bet!
Comment from flamingstar
Gosh, you did a fantastic job with this one. I give it a six because I think you absolutely nailed the form and used it to its full advantage. Each of your lines fits the scheme and pattern perfectly to paint an adorable picture.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Gosh, you did a fantastic job with this one. I give it a six because I think you absolutely nailed the form and used it to its full advantage. Each of your lines fits the scheme and pattern perfectly to paint an adorable picture.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much flamingstar for the enthusiasm and the stars
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A great poem, thank you for sharing your grandson. They're always bring joy to us. Thank you introducing also another interesting form of poem
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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A great poem, thank you for sharing your grandson. They're always bring joy to us. Thank you introducing also another interesting form of poem
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Thank you Sandra for this nice review.
