Act of Endurance
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Comment from prettybluebirds
Good. This is quite hard to read. It all runs in together and is difficult to follow. The plot is very good and I do understand that this is a nightmare. It took much thought on your part to put this together as you did. It is very good just hard for me to follow without having to back up several times.
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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Good. This is quite hard to read. It all runs in together and is difficult to follow. The plot is very good and I do understand that this is a nightmare. It took much thought on your part to put this together as you did. It is very good just hard for me to follow without having to back up several times.
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Comment Written 31-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from papa55mike
Awesome job, I love how the poem turns on a dime.
I wasn't a big "Nightmare" fan, Aliens did it for me.
Have a great weekend and God bless, mike.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Awesome job, I love how the poem turns on a dime.
I wasn't a big "Nightmare" fan, Aliens did it for me.
Have a great weekend and God bless, mike.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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See I got lucky twice by your encouragements, again finding myself appreciating your statements. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
An apparition or a ghost? Well one of those scary dreams that stuck to the mind for long. Though a free verse poem, it has a very good flow and tell a story in a vivid manner.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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An apparition or a ghost? Well one of those scary dreams that stuck to the mind for long. Though a free verse poem, it has a very good flow and tell a story in a vivid manner.
ola thomas
Comment Written 22-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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I like the way you write. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, then you had a premonition of sorts, TPAC, and a very frightening one at that, I would imagine.
You've used good alliteration in several places throughout this poetic narrative; "air all alone", "emotions enlighten", and "Grass growth", just to mention a few.
Well done, eerie stuff! ~Dean
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Well, then you had a premonition of sorts, TPAC, and a very frightening one at that, I would imagine.
You've used good alliteration in several places throughout this poetic narrative; "air all alone", "emotions enlighten", and "Grass growth", just to mention a few.
Well done, eerie stuff! ~Dean
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Glad you found interest, the nightmare was the extremes happiness and safety to fear Thanking you for generous rate with encouraging comments
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You're welcome, TPAC.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"Dreams" in your notes should be "Dream". "above I" should be "above me". Freddie Krugor strikes again in this well written Horror story. May have been better to separate it into stanzas some how but good story any way. Sure the dream scared the world out of you. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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"Dreams" in your notes should be "Dream". "above I" should be "above me". Freddie Krugor strikes again in this well written Horror story. May have been better to separate it into stanzas some how but good story any way. Sure the dream scared the world out of you. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Surprise me yet opened other consideration for me, thanks for the heads up about pits but mostly for encouraging comment
Comment from petalangela
The inner self has an aware of past of present and too my horror it senses future. Sometimes the inner self shares this with the conscious mind. Pictures can be random the can be clear or flashes on a second in time . Your abstract dreaming has been a warning all your life . I can explain this further - have not the Soave here.
Not how your heart beat races when you attempt to re construct this in your waking hours.. You mins is taking protective control
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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The inner self has an aware of past of present and too my horror it senses future. Sometimes the inner self shares this with the conscious mind. Pictures can be random the can be clear or flashes on a second in time . Your abstract dreaming has been a warning all your life . I can explain this further - have not the Soave here.
Not how your heart beat races when you attempt to re construct this in your waking hours.. You mins is taking protective control
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
You're right losing fight for protecting too, I thank GOD for His chosen God, and his Holy Script _I stand armed warrior indeed to the last cry, as for protection I hope to grab one of them and allow all flesh to behold them as I, things will be moving then, truly evolving. I am speck less about your rate, but treasure your comments loudly
Comment from Amy Greta
How terrifying! My heart actually beat faster and faster as I read your story. It took a turn for the scary with, "I thought this man had been long watching". And, your instincts locking upon uncertainty, I know that feeling, and that's an excellent way to explain it. I like how you referred to the movie in the last line. I really enjoyed your work!
~Amy
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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How terrifying! My heart actually beat faster and faster as I read your story. It took a turn for the scary with, "I thought this man had been long watching". And, your instincts locking upon uncertainty, I know that feeling, and that's an excellent way to explain it. I like how you referred to the movie in the last line. I really enjoyed your work!
~Amy
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Comment Written 14-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
I am overwhelmed with your acceptance of this work, delighted you took the journey and came out thrilled, your statements make this work pleasing Thanking you for all
