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Dawn of Chaos

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Comment from Debbie Pope
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Wait now. You periodically have had Elm Street nightmares? How horrid. That means something you know. Must be where your poetic notions come from. I knew that they had to be inspired from somewhere. Your poems are always so creative and unusual--in vast contrast to mine. Keep dreaming and inspiring me.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
    Its means I'm on my last leg. I wouldn't trade it for all the riches in the world. Know, there is nothing new under the sun. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This seems like a very frightening experience indeed, I feel for you, and your write explains how you have felt. I have never seen the movie, I don't like horror movies, too much horror in life! Good luck with your write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
    Hope I get a chance to live. At 63, I wonder how long this grave will contain me . It's not a rock to thr head to make me think this way. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views.
Comment from Wabigoon
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TPAC--
Why is Freddy out there in the "wilderness?" Freddy is an "urban nightmare," at least in the film manifestations of him I have seen. I am curious why you encounter him in this setting?

Are you "hiding" as a buck, meaning deer? Does Freddy come to bring you back to humanity? Yeah, he's scary enough to drive you-us into animal hood. Curious as to what your thoughts are?

Wabigoon/Jeff

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
    Freddie is a fallen angel. They seek my silence and demise. Not to state I'm better. Thanking you for your interests and generous rate with comforting comments.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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I thought this was very creative. I enjoy how you told a story with your poem. I could picture this all in my head. Great job.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015
    Think I might have slipped and got one right. I hope. More than just a dream. I fear a reality of fleshly life. Thanking you for your considerations and generous rate.
Comment from Neonewman
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As one who loves to dabble in the Macabre, I find this quite intriguing. I have had many dreams throughout my life that have presented a little deja vu! The Elm street nightmares (Freddie) scared the daylights out of me when I was younger.
Well crafted piece my friend.
God bless!
Steve

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2015


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
    Try it as fact. What a rush and many aspects beyond. Glad subject projected held interests. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
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Hi TPAC...Hmm...This was a bit difficult to get through. It wasn't that the poem was wordy, I felt that there just wasn't enough actually. As I read it out loud, I felt myself sounding like a broken record. The flow and the tune were off. Now, you do have an excellent premise to make this so much more. Why do you think he was after you? This is the center of the conflict of the story poem that the reader would like to hear. Wish I could read more about this dream. You spiked my interest. Cheers.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2015


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2015
    I will take into deep considerations your comments. Question is why is it after us? Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
reply by Benjamin Valencia on 10-Sep-2015
    Hi, yes..Why is it after us? I'm not sure if your asking me..Only you know why its after you...I know its after us because there are people with a higher divine blood level than others made possible from the lineage of the angels who intermixed themselves millions of years ago..We are their progeny and for us to mate with another person having a similar level of divine blood or higher means that the progeny can become god like after all, humans are continuously evolving. I have a question for you...Have you ever awoken from your sleep and you're paralyzed, you can't move and you know you're awake, you're not dreaming and then the pain...You might have even seen some wild images that you're afraid to talk about because people would call you, nuts! Anyways, that's the subject matter that comes out in my own novel, "Meeting Lucifer, the story of us." if you're open to it, I'm two chapters away from completing the novel right here on Fan Story. Cheers!
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello TPAC

How interesting dreams you are writing about your dream which is a very colorful and vivid imagery..
end up as a horror thriller dream.

Gert

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2015


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
    Life is but a dream maybe why all want to go to heaven. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating thoughts.
reply by Gert sherwood on 05-Sep-2015
    You are welcome TPAC
    Gert
Comment from misscookie
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Wow, this is why I don't watch those kind of show.
And for you to dream this before a movie it out.
Wow.
I'm sorry this nightmare/dream keeps reappearing in you life.
Take care.
Cookie

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2015


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
    Wisdom to life is acknowledging death what throne rules. Thanking you for generous rate and thoughts.
Comment from anabellapongasi
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What an intriguing dream. Filled with amazing imagery. It all sounded so real. A ninja? Must be real scary for a child to have such a dream. Probably a product of a super active imagination? I enjoyed reading this. The short lines helped to make it a fast-paced thrilling read. Well done.
Blessings,
Anabella

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2015


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
    The event was when I was an adult more than one with assaults -such fun. I feel love. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from TAB_that's me
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I like your style of writing but I wondered if they could be tightened up (thus shortened as well). Being free verse, sometimes less is better.

A couple of suggestions to see if this would fit your style and it could be used throughout:

swinging free in nature
having joyous enlightenment's,(swinging free
nature's enlightenment)

a prisoner caught and
held in my happiness.
(prisoner of my happiness)

Teresa

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2015


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
    Sound advise from wonderful friend will advise and seek ways to shorten. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating thoughts.