Act of Endurance
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Comment from William Ross
very good, the only time I know is day or night, it really means nothing to me as it passes me by. time is a trap we put ourselves in. have a good day
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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very good, the only time I know is day or night, it really means nothing to me as it passes me by. time is a trap we put ourselves in. have a good day
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Interesting way to view its aspect, according to the Text God formation of Day and Night made time: unlike taught they are not pertained to our Sun. Not the first day of creation. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating conveyances.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Very well-written thoughts about our relationship with time and all the different meanings it brings to mind with the beloved three armed face telling the time.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Very well-written thoughts about our relationship with time and all the different meanings it brings to mind with the beloved three armed face telling the time.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Glad aspects of this write found interests. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from MSJVClarke
This was an intriguing and exciting poem. Your words prompted me to read it quickly, they were well written and your topic was simple but very well presented. I love the pace and I especially liked the ending and the use of the "tick". I wonder if you might want to add a comma after the word "friend" in your ending. "You my friend, are time."
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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This was an intriguing and exciting poem. Your words prompted me to read it quickly, they were well written and your topic was simple but very well presented. I love the pace and I especially liked the ending and the use of the "tick". I wonder if you might want to add a comma after the word "friend" in your ending. "You my friend, are time."
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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Get heads up glad some response bad or good was presented -you are alive. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating thoughts.
Comment from Neonewman
We never in our dismay see,
throughout our living years,
your face sadden yielding a frown.
Incredibly touching statement, Maybe piercing would be a better way of saying it! I enjoyed this well crafted piece immensely. Thank you for sharing!
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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We never in our dismay see,
throughout our living years,
your face sadden yielding a frown.
Incredibly touching statement, Maybe piercing would be a better way of saying it! I enjoyed this well crafted piece immensely. Thank you for sharing!
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 04-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2015
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I opened for suggestion and will consider all given input. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from Nosha17
I guess, time is of the essence in all things we do in all walks of life. It is something around which the whole world revolves. We as human beings must use it wisely. Nice imagery and well chosen words. Couple of things, line 1, lives' activities. Line 30, a deliverer (noun), Line 51, are they. Enjoyable read. faye
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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I guess, time is of the essence in all things we do in all walks of life. It is something around which the whole world revolves. We as human beings must use it wisely. Nice imagery and well chosen words. Couple of things, line 1, lives' activities. Line 30, a deliverer (noun), Line 51, are they. Enjoyable read. faye
Comment Written 31-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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Comment from TAB_that's me
I like you form here and the Bible verses that are worked into this free-flowing free verse poem. Nice creation:)
teresa
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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I like you form here and the Bible verses that are worked into this free-flowing free verse poem. Nice creation:)
teresa
Comment Written 31-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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Comment from robina1978
Excellent artwork that complements your poem perfectly. O joy to read, sounds good too. You mention time as the keeper of all good. I thought you were also referring to God. A nice poem, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Excellent artwork that complements your poem perfectly. O joy to read, sounds good too. You mention time as the keeper of all good. I thought you were also referring to God. A nice poem, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Thanking you for this generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from poetadeu
The gift of time is our greatest treasure which
you have clearly defined here. How we use the gift
will invariably be passed to others yet to receive
our gifts, whatever they may be. We are like that
of molecules always spinning and actively keeping
life's blood flowing. Time...Great read from a
gifted writer. Thank you!
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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The gift of time is our greatest treasure which
you have clearly defined here. How we use the gift
will invariably be passed to others yet to receive
our gifts, whatever they may be. We are like that
of molecules always spinning and actively keeping
life's blood flowing. Time...Great read from a
gifted writer. Thank you!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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More like insane writer who still appreciates generous rate and captivating thoughts about this work.
Comment from Gloria ....
TPAC, this is great. A poem about time, which some people don't think has real substance, but it does indeed.
Couple of points:
a guide as a Shepard, (Shepherd)
You deliver us,
presenting us to doors, - Oh yes, oh so correct. And, from there we have the choice.
You rule our world populist, (populace)
Excellent, I really enjoyed this.
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2015
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TPAC, this is great. A poem about time, which some people don't think has real substance, but it does indeed.
Couple of points:
a guide as a Shepard, (Shepherd)
You deliver us,
presenting us to doors, - Oh yes, oh so correct. And, from there we have the choice.
You rule our world populist, (populace)
Excellent, I really enjoyed this.
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2015
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Thanking you for all stated will revise also I appreciates generous rate.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Passing Moments
A chapter in the book Endurance
Time
by TPAC
I thought you were writing about God so it was a surprise at the end when I found out you were writing about time. This is an interesting poem, good job!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2015
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Passing Moments
A chapter in the book Endurance
Time
by TPAC
I thought you were writing about God so it was a surprise at the end when I found out you were writing about time. This is an interesting poem, good job!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2015
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I hear someone else capture a similar thought about this work. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
