Act of Endurance
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Comment from angela1434
Is the poem refering to time itself? The poem brings me to the questions...What IS time? A way of measuring change creating within the mind to keep everything from happening all at once? Or an illusion to the truth we seek...?
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2015
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Is the poem refering to time itself? The poem brings me to the questions...What IS time? A way of measuring change creating within the mind to keep everything from happening all at once? Or an illusion to the truth we seek...?
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Comment Written 20-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2015
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Time as all other aspects of life something we come to define in our perception of God statement. Thanking you for generous rate and pondered comments, making me think.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
What I like most about this work is that while reading (even though the subject was time) I envisioned The All Mighty. This poem is spiritual as well as very secular. This work is also very indepth, it is not a passive read that will handfeed the viewer. I found nothing to tweak or adjust. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2015
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What I like most about this work is that while reading (even though the subject was time) I envisioned The All Mighty. This poem is spiritual as well as very secular. This work is also very indepth, it is not a passive read that will handfeed the viewer. I found nothing to tweak or adjust. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2015
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The work as most my works have pits but I am glad beyond those faults you found interests. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from harleyangelbrat
Your poem is written well and is very beautiful. It is descriptive and expressive. I really enjoyed reading this very much. It is an excellent read. God bless you!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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Your poem is written well and is very beautiful. It is descriptive and expressive. I really enjoyed reading this very much. It is an excellent read. God bless you!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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Same to you, thanking you for generous rate and thoughts about this work.
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You are very welcome. I hope you have a blessed day. Marilyn
Comment from anabellapongasi
A very well written tribute to.... TIME! that was a surprise! :) I thought it was about someone! So, you did a very good job of personification of time, made time sound like a person. Well done.
Anabella
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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A very well written tribute to.... TIME! that was a surprise! :) I thought it was about someone! So, you did a very good job of personification of time, made time sound like a person. Well done.
Anabella
Comment Written 13-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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Thanking you for generous rate and captivating thoughts glad you found delight
Comment from BeasPeas
Bravo! This is a super write that I enjoyed reading. You touched upon something important that all of us must adhere to--time. There are two places I suggest editing for smoother read of those lines:
First line: "conscious" (consciousness)
13th line: "Everyone awoke do (awake does) follow and obey you"
Whether you think my suggestion is valid or not, your poem is excellent. Marilyn/BeasPeas
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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Bravo! This is a super write that I enjoyed reading. You touched upon something important that all of us must adhere to--time. There are two places I suggest editing for smoother read of those lines:
First line: "conscious" (consciousness)
13th line: "Everyone awoke do (awake does) follow and obey you"
Whether you think my suggestion is valid or not, your poem is excellent. Marilyn/BeasPeas
Comment Written 13-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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Too generous, although I am pleased certain aspects touched with someone else as within me
Comment from Dawny53
Time can be such a difficult thing to write about.. all of it's many facets and tricks it plays on us.. I used to think it would be a simple thing to do until I tried it for myself! You did well here.. I haven't read the poems that went before.. but that's ok, I enjoyed this one.. and admire you for trying to capture the essence of time..
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Time can be such a difficult thing to write about.. all of it's many facets and tricks it plays on us.. I used to think it would be a simple thing to do until I tried it for myself! You did well here.. I haven't read the poems that went before.. but that's ok, I enjoyed this one.. and admire you for trying to capture the essence of time..
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Thank you and yes time gave many avenues of interest I could have employed I thank you for generous rate and comments
Comment from lalajovanoski
Flows very smoothly and is nicely composed.
You are such an amazing poet! I truly enjoyed reading this as you are so very talented! Thank you so very much for sharing this as I truly enjoyed reading
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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Flows very smoothly and is nicely composed.
You are such an amazing poet! I truly enjoyed reading this as you are so very talented! Thank you so very much for sharing this as I truly enjoyed reading
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Glad you enjoyed both works and again that you for comments and rate
