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Stories of the Dreamtime

Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "The Ghost Cave"
Aboriginal myths and legends.

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Comment from aryr
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I really enjoyed the last few chapters where the people asked the animal permission for taking its life and releasing its spirit. Our belief was to take only a animals life for food, that we prayed for the spirit and gave thanks for it giving up its life. We also used everything, the meat, the bones, the skin, the bladder- all of the animal were used. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
    Yes indeed, nothing was wasted. The bladder for carrying water, bones for implements, skin for warmth and so on. Much the same as your mob. XXK.
reply by aryr on 22-Aug-2018
    waste not want not is a good moto
Comment from TPAC
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Made me feel at home, writer inviting expression are smooth read for the reader, loving these stories from the bush, raw direct contact with nature -I think I might be soft

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
    Welcome to Fanstory fellow Aussie. Glad you enjoyed the bush. I try to write about our history and give the Americans a bird's eye view of our beautiful land. Best wishes Orange man. :-) Kay.
Comment from Alan K Pease
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It would appear that Wandi is considered adult but his "coming of age" was the lessons he learned from Nunundiri, the keeper of the cave. Lovely story that you have penned, Kay - full of the folklore of the aboriginal tribes delving into their relationship with nature and tribal customs. The Brolga bird sounds like a flamingo. This story is one of the best you have written. Take care - Alan

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
    Hello Uncle Alan, How are you? Thanks so much for your kind review. I too thought it the best in the series so far. Love, Kay. XX
Comment from Nosha17
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That was a lovely story, Kay. The characters were so likeable, the story line strong and it read really well. I was fascinated by your descriptions of the Aboriginal way of life, especially the kangaroo that spoke to them, I love all animals. Two wee things, Para 1, winter's morning, Para 5, its life. Most enjoyable. faye

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
    Thanks so much Faye. XX
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
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Hello there to my friend Kay.
I think you should write a book and I think your county historians should be honored to publish it. They owe a great deal to you for keeping these things alive. My best to you, Loyd

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
    Thank you Loyd, I have written 13 chapters and still going! XX
reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 24-Jun-2015
    You go girl!
    You are very welcome, I was my pleasure, Loyd
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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What a nice story Kay. I think this is wonderful!
You can keep the spirit of the Australian Aborigine
tribes alive and well. I love the lore and the simple
goodness of the people who depended on one another
just to survive in the harsh environment.
Well done! Nancy

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
    Thanks so much Nancy, this is my thirteenth chapter and still going! Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Writingfundimension
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It's so good to see another tale from from your series, Kay. I, especially, enjoyed the way the two spirits came to help the children. It seems that the young man had to learn the hard way that physical strength alone does not make a man. Very well done!

:) Bev

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
    Hello Bev, Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed. Love, Kay.
reply by Writingfundimension on 24-Jun-2015
    Sure did, and you're very welcome, Kay. XX Bev
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Kay, that was such a wonderful story. This book will be a treasure to people to read and understand the tales of your wonderful country's history. These Stories of Dreamtime give a wonderful insight to the legends of your ancient past. I love that the animals talked to the people back then. I wish I could talk to animals, I wonder what they would have to say about us human animals. These stories always have a moral in the telling, and this one is really good, listen and obey your parents. Well done, my friend. A delight to read. xsx sandra

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
    Bless you Possum. I enjoy sharing our past with everyone. Love, Kay.
Comment from Eigle Rull
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Wow! When you come up with a great story, you really shine, my friend. This story was very well written in easy to read and understand words. I enjoyed the smooth flow of the story as the children ran off and got lost. Thank God for the Ghost Nunundiri. This was a very interesting story and it held my attention extremely well. It was the perfect story, my friend. I loved it. Best wishes to you.

Always with respect,

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
    Hello my dear friend, So pleased you liked it, makes it worthwhile for me to write, my hands are dreadful with arthritis. Love, Kay XX
Comment from walbc
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Wow, I just love love love this story. It held my attention from beginning to end. You are so knowledgeable in the ways of the Aboriginal people. I loved the fantasy part about the guardian of the ghost cave. Your descriptive writing is done with great skill and talent! I love the way you started your story with sister moon and brother sun.

All in all, Fay, you are a true blue Aussie and you have written a most original and fascinating story. I can find no fault with it.

Warmest regards, Wendy.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
    Howdy Neighbour! So pleased you enjoyed, takes me ages to type now; arthritis is very bad. I am up to my 13th chapter of Stories of the Dreamtime - my grandmother was aboriginal. Love, KAY! XX
reply by walbc on 23-Jun-2015
    Sorry Kay, I've got a memory like a sieve sometimes! Hugs, Wendy xo