As I Dance
Seeing the newness of color in me41 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
You have written an absolutely beautiful poem.
It is a very clever idea to use each individual color to describe hope, grace and newness.
The rainbow is the window into the future
What better shawl, gown or cape to pull around you than a rainbow
And dance, for that is what a rainbow is, a colors dancing in the sky.
The rainbow is what comes after the storm, a new beginning.
Beautifully penned and deserving of every vote it received and more.
Well done.
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You have written an absolutely beautiful poem.
It is a very clever idea to use each individual color to describe hope, grace and newness.
The rainbow is the window into the future
What better shawl, gown or cape to pull around you than a rainbow
And dance, for that is what a rainbow is, a colors dancing in the sky.
The rainbow is what comes after the storm, a new beginning.
Beautifully penned and deserving of every vote it received and more.
Well done.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
Comment from inside echo
Your poem is as beautiful as the artwork you selected. It is written and has a clear message which match your authors notes. Very well done. I am glad God has brought these colours back into your life and that you can feel them enough to express them so vividly. Good luck in your contest. Thank you for sharing.
tgc
echo
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Your poem is as beautiful as the artwork you selected. It is written and has a clear message which match your authors notes. Very well done. I am glad God has brought these colours back into your life and that you can feel them enough to express them so vividly. Good luck in your contest. Thank you for sharing.
tgc
echo
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Lovely and kind words to read...and they have made my day! Thanks so very very much.
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You are most welcome. I am glad. (:
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, I have very little color in my own world, but I certainly appreciate those who have been able to attain some modicum of it.
Your lovely, well composed free verse clearly demonstrates your faith in God, and how thankful you are for having weathered your personal storms, and come through the other side a much stronger person for having endured them.
Best of luck to you in the contest, Anonymous Poet.
~Dean
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Well, I have very little color in my own world, but I certainly appreciate those who have been able to attain some modicum of it.
Your lovely, well composed free verse clearly demonstrates your faith in God, and how thankful you are for having weathered your personal storms, and come through the other side a much stronger person for having endured them.
Best of luck to you in the contest, Anonymous Poet.
~Dean
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Hello, my friend...It has been a while as the winter of my discontent wore on at nauseum...Just to read your warm comments brought great joy. Thanks so much.
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You're more than welcome, my friend. :)
~Dean
Comment from MissMerri
This is such a nice way to look at life! I liked the similes you used and especially enjoyed the idea of "pulling the ribbons around me as I dance." What a wonderful metaphor and you've written a great poem for this rainbow writing prompt. Definitely, no shades of black or grey for you.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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This is such a nice way to look at life! I liked the similes you used and especially enjoyed the idea of "pulling the ribbons around me as I dance." What a wonderful metaphor and you've written a great poem for this rainbow writing prompt. Definitely, no shades of black or grey for you.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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I am still smiling from reading what you wrote. Your words meant a great deal to me....and I send my thanks...
Comment from petalangela
The has managed to write about a rainbow with doing the normal generalisation of the word.
Each colour having a reason to bebthere
Each colour highlighted with loving care
A entry for the competition
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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The has managed to write about a rainbow with doing the normal generalisation of the word.
Each colour having a reason to bebthere
Each colour highlighted with loving care
A entry for the competition
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Such kind and supportive words help someone want to write again...thank you.
Comment from Emily George
"And I pull the ribbons around during me as I dance" beautiful word imagery throughout.
The use of the rainbow and all its colors to express the passages of your feelings and life was inspirational and clever
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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"And I pull the ribbons around during me as I dance" beautiful word imagery throughout.
The use of the rainbow and all its colors to express the passages of your feelings and life was inspirational and clever
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Blessings to you and my honest thank you!
Comment from Michael Wahl
I like your imagery of colors as a part of your life, and how the ultimate color comes through for your salvation - well done.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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I like your imagery of colors as a part of your life, and how the ultimate color comes through for your salvation - well done.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your kind words and your note of insight. My thanks!
Comment from Mark Valentine
So glad to see you're posting again. This one is magnificent - it reads like a prayer of petition and a prayer of gratitude at the same time. The content of the poem fits the metaphor of a rainbow perfectly - promise of better times after the flood. I loved the line "For I lived in that world of black" and then listing the colors that you needed in the subsequent lines. Love the words "As I dance" bookending the poem. Truly, one of the best poems I've ever read on this site.
I read the other entries and nothing comes remotely close. This one goes on the shelf.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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So glad to see you're posting again. This one is magnificent - it reads like a prayer of petition and a prayer of gratitude at the same time. The content of the poem fits the metaphor of a rainbow perfectly - promise of better times after the flood. I loved the line "For I lived in that world of black" and then listing the colors that you needed in the subsequent lines. Love the words "As I dance" bookending the poem. Truly, one of the best poems I've ever read on this site.
I read the other entries and nothing comes remotely close. This one goes on the shelf.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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When I read that you would be putting it on the shelf, I grew an inch taller.(I'm 5'1"). Blessings, my friend.
Comment from Jackarrie
this is a lovely poem, a well written free verse about a rainbow. I love the last lines and I pull the ribbons around me
as I dance.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Mary
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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this is a lovely poem, a well written free verse about a rainbow. I love the last lines and I pull the ribbons around me
as I dance.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Mary
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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My dear Mary...you brought me joy. Thank you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This rainbow poem, As I Dance, finds a great deal of joy in the imaginings and the romantic aspects of the rainbow. One can feel excited just reading. Nice.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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This rainbow poem, As I Dance, finds a great deal of joy in the imaginings and the romantic aspects of the rainbow. One can feel excited just reading. Nice.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Bill. You make me want to keep dancing....
