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Comment from amanda98653
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This is an amazing poem, Michael!

"choreographed wings my soul
eye-witness departure
ritual one breathes... "

I love the usage of the word " choreographed". Very artistic.

"surrounds wind cousins
uniformed chaos calls the wild wife"

"Surrounds wind cousins" is a very unique phrase, highlighting the connection between the motions of the birds and the movements of the wind.

A fascinating poem

Amanda

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
    Ive just spent time reading your latest releases.....you young Lady....are writers writer. Amazing the wisdom youve gathered in so few years. your story of your Father brought myself and another to tears....your strength is as apparent as China's vastness. Keep writing Amanda, it is surely your gift....to us. -smile-....love Michael
Comment from jlsavell
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Okay Michael!

How are you today?

I have so many reviews to catch up on. Back on my turf and resting from the long week.

First I would love to comment on the song and how it has influences your work.
The song begins with, I am learning, so I'm leaving
And even though I am grieving
I am trying to find the meaning Let loss reveal it

The song goes on to speak of St Jude, the patron St. Of Lost causes.

One understands the storm and emotional turmoil in life, especially in romantic relationships. The songs say quite a bit, for in it, two are in the same place but can't seem to get to the same understanding as the storm swirls around them.
Where is St. Jude's blessing because it appears as if her presence causes much more devastation than a mutual understanding and it becomes a lost cause.


This is where your beautiful poem comes into play.. and hoping to not embarrass you or reveal too much of personal and private issues,

It is one in which I can relate and it touches me greatly. So, I am putting it out here.
I am going to break down your free verse bit by bit.

The first
"bird swarm drawn
intellect succumbs to instinct
sudden raptures interest"

Most interesting metaphor
How can such a tiny creature
Have such intellect? But it isn't intellect, it is instinct which drives them to survival. However, we as humans, when in the throws of hurt or even survival, ignore our logic, our intellect, and let our imperfect will take the helm. Words and hurts fly, caught up in the whirlwind of debris, both lost hearts caught up in a rapturous but daunting flight of ill fate. Where is St Jude?

She rushes in for the lost cause, but the battle ensues and there is never a winner, never. So who cares who fired the gun? Heh?

"choreographed wings my soul
eye-witness departure
ritual one breathes...

catch and release perfect life
surrounds wind cousins
uniformed chaos calls the"

Perfectly place words. Perhaps one is always swirling or dancing in this chaos and know not one thing different except begging for peace of mind and solitude. An island of serenity where upon the daily ritual could be self-exploration and finding oneself without another.

You and I have been there, haven't we? The Latin term is called Ceteris paribus. I call it logical reduction, human relations, the driving force of relationships whether romantic or friendship can sometimes be a potent flammable product of anguish and of hurt.

Just as we have discussed, not only I, but you, need time away, solitude to find you again and to decide what kind of life you want to create at this moment in your life. Me too. I am at a point of peace and reveling in my solitude. I have, also found, a great friend, one in you.. in which I will be forever grateful to God. It took a few twist and turns to get there and let go of crazy Cinderella dreams, and now I love it!

I love your term, "uniformed chaos calls the wild life" Birds in flight are actually uniformed chaos and perfectly synchronized, but it is not that way with relationships. Despite how pretty you wrap it up, or let's say someone else wraps it up to her friends, it is beneath the surface chaos. Both parties become wild and gnashing.

Look, I told your friend, how much you love her as a great friend, but you need time to find you! To find you! Romance is the last bastion of creation you want to think about at this moment.

Your friend doesn't get it, because as the song say, lost before it even started.
Hurt and devastation are powerful persuasions of solitude and self- discovery. Loss reveals it.

I do hope wisdom and loving kindness enters your friends psyche and she realizes a romantic interests, or trying for one, or demanding one, is or can destroy a priceless friendship.

I, for one, understand. I want your friendship. I value your friendship. You take that sabbatical and find you. Let St. Jude live up to her name and fill you with hope and a new day for a brighter future and when this happens, you just might find that special someone. Tell HER, it's time to quit dreaming and hating
And let go... Just Breathe..

"betrothed since inception first experienced
Saint Jude's blessing
forehead kissed heartbeat freed"

now that is food for thought! another exceptional write my friend!!!

Hope you take me up on my invitation to come sailing in July. You will love it. Oh, and do not worry, I will find someone for you to dance with on the boat, cuz I have a dancing partner already, okay?

Love you dear friend. Jimi


 Comment Written 13-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
    Saint Jude's a He...thought be to cousin of Jesus. perhaps one of the "Twelve" certainly one of the seventy"...but I suppose anyone feeding from the power of Jeasus, he or she...could be someones lost cause savior.........-smile- ahh Jimi.....you are my friend, i miss our back and forth sometimes. Sailing....-smile-....while you dance with someone else....sounds dangerous...what the hell hiost anchor....love Michael
reply by jlsavell on 13-Jun-2015
    well St Jude in the song is a girl!!! Dammit a girl!!!!
    one of the twelve.. was not that Judas?

    anchors away.. you do not want me to be the anchor watch, one glass of wine and I am liable to fall overboard, forever adrift in the sea of confusion.

    Well maybe when we are dancing with our partners we can dosey -do, change our partners to and fro! You know I use to square dance? yepp sirreee.. I am Texan you know, but I also took ballet as a child so I did the tippee toe square dance.. quite difficult..
Comment from Dawny53
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Wow.. the imagery here is fantastic.. loved reading it. Wonderful simplicity.. yet gives me so much to think about and none of it exactly simple! Hope that makes sense to you! I really enjoyed reading it.. three times!

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
    smile-....hi Dawny...yes yes actually it does. I've been living in the Elton john album cover "Captain Fantastic" o for the last at least two years now...I'm ...I'm the brown dirt cowboy...-smile- a poetic wild card, quick draw after all, poised on a stallion prince who answers only to lightening...so please....don't worry about it....love Michael
Comment from TAB_that's me
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Each line condensed to minimal words but the descriptive wording pack a powerful punch. choreographed wing my soul is my favorite.
Teresa

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
    Hello Teresa ...-smile- how are you pretty Lady....ah well thanks so much...glad yo enjoyed....love Michael
Comment from His Grayness
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Nice work Michael and so sorry to be out of sixes for this great delivery of deep thought and wisdom. Love your work! Vance

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
    Vance....-smile-.............my work ...my expression comes from within experienced...each of us has theses...ah sculpting sesseions ....i write of the whole expireince....not just what I think everybody...needs....or wants to hear. Truthfully it is the release...the giving it life...not its reception that pushes the button. happy you enjoyed....love Michael
reply by His Grayness on 13-Jun-2015
    Hi Michael and glad to see you are still doing great stuff. I will stay in touch! All the best! Vance
Comment from Jumbo J
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Hi Michael,
yeah, my Brother when I come to feast at this table... I know I'm going to get unique quantity of quality in the delight I am about to digest... lost in the thought of 'lost causes' and random chaos that presents the formula to allowing yourself to fly regardless... as always my most talented and original friend... your word combinations stir emotion that leaves one lingering in the middle of our masters air... Outstanding!

With our thoughts we create,
natural order,
James.

******Stars!!!!!!

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
    Hi James....-smile-...O heck yea man...c'mon in....help your self there's all kind of stuff in the kitchen......my God did you hear what said...give him the remote...no no...i trust him...James...you control the remote now...-headnod-.i like you guy...-headshake-...alright......love michael
Comment from Pili Pubul
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Hey my soul friend, I enjoy very much always the choreography of your
soul wings, keep flying and dancing your ethereal soul.
Interesting and unique , that is you. Love... Pili

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
    My whole being soars in excitement upon seeing your type...Pili....My Spanish Rose....you've been punishing me. I miss my noni noni....-smile- you're feeling better I pray. you know I love you michael
reply by Pili Pubul on 13-Jun-2015
    I know, smiles to you my sweet...since my last hospitalization my motivation is gone, I hope will be back.. Big fat hugs...
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
    alright....but you checkin....noni noni
Comment from Healing
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As always you deliver an enjoyable read.
I like the style very much
I read so much in to these pieces
Just wonderful
Thanks for sharing your talent

Ky

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
    well as always you throw kindling on the fire...-smile- thank you for enjoying....love Michael
Comment from RGstar
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My friend. No mistaking the form. Your cryptic, report style has an air of invincibility about it, which causes the reader to read at least twice, for, my friend...its well worth reading. Formidable, as usual. I am learning your code, and understanding it as if I was writing it myself.
Bravo.
RG

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
    Hello Poet...-smile- thanks Star...you are....no shit.....you know I can talk like you..hm hmm -headshake-....providing know ones looking at me.....I dont know if I can hold it live audiance...but I'm willing to give it a shot...-smile-....lol..ahh love you Bro....Michael
Comment from Kingsland
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This is a very creative piece of poetic writing. I liked everything about this stellar thought process. Even your formatting was just right for the thoughts in your poem presented here. This was a very enjoyable piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
    Alright thank you Brother john...enter as friend...theres beer and wine in the back...so how ya been...go to see ya kid...good to see ya....love Michael