Love Songs For Every Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "The Power of Silence"Love poems
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Comment from RGstar
Lovely write. All the entries should receive 6 stars, alas, I have none left. Yet still, let us not be sidetracked from the beautiful sentiments and reason behind them.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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Lovely write. All the entries should receive 6 stars, alas, I have none left. Yet still, let us not be sidetracked from the beautiful sentiments and reason behind them.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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Thank you so much for this wonderfully supportive and encouraging review. I just happened to read a poem of yours, and loved it! MM
Comment from I am Cat
A lovely entry into this contest, Miss Merri! I'm happy to read it
and enjoy all the lovely alliteration and wonderful uses and movement of the words in it.
I enjoyed your poem and wish you all the luck in the contest and congratulations on your nomination as well!
Cat
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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A lovely entry into this contest, Miss Merri! I'm happy to read it
and enjoy all the lovely alliteration and wonderful uses and movement of the words in it.
I enjoyed your poem and wish you all the luck in the contest and congratulations on your nomination as well!
Cat
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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Thank you for this Cat... I'm so glad you liked the poem, and thank you for the good wishes. I am not hoping for a miracle at this point, (lol) but happy to have the many readers this nomination has provided. MM
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a neat little sonnet on the subject of love rather than , as is more often found, the object of it. The first two stanzas have us nodding in agreement, and this is continued into the first two lines of the third. The Volta kicks in at line 11 and was well worth the extra lines waiting for it, because it is a swing of 180 degrees now praising silence, and its sentiments are continued into the couplet which also serves to round of the whole. I fear its subtlety may be lost on some!
I'd wish you luck in the contest but since I am also a nominee I am not going to bring destruction down on my own head!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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This is a neat little sonnet on the subject of love rather than , as is more often found, the object of it. The first two stanzas have us nodding in agreement, and this is continued into the first two lines of the third. The Volta kicks in at line 11 and was well worth the extra lines waiting for it, because it is a swing of 180 degrees now praising silence, and its sentiments are continued into the couplet which also serves to round of the whole. I fear its subtlety may be lost on some!
I'd wish you luck in the contest but since I am also a nominee I am not going to bring destruction down on my own head!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the nice things you said about my sonnet. I don't think luck is going to help, so I'm not worried about that part. It is just nice to know that more people have now read and reviewed this submission because of its nomination. I'm delighted, and wouldn't expect to win anyway, so can't be disappointed. :p
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It was a lovely piece and somebody (who nominated it) must have seen that. People vlike sonnets you could well be in with a chance.
Comment from Writingfundimension
What a truly superb poem, MissMerri. I'm not at all surprised to see it receive a POM nomination. I, particularly, love the following:
'It is with words we sing a song of joy
or seek to woo a lover to our side.
When trouble lurks, it's language we employ,
for words can heal... or hinder and divide.'
Great meter and rhyme throughout along with a strong spiritual message.
:) Bev
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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What a truly superb poem, MissMerri. I'm not at all surprised to see it receive a POM nomination. I, particularly, love the following:
'It is with words we sing a song of joy
or seek to woo a lover to our side.
When trouble lurks, it's language we employ,
for words can heal... or hinder and divide.'
Great meter and rhyme throughout along with a strong spiritual message.
:) Bev
Comment Written 24-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you for your truly thoughtful and kind message of support, Bev. I'm glad you liked the poem and also glad for the exceptional rating. Hugs, MM
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You're very welcome, MissMerri. :) Bev
Comment from lightink
What an absolutely perfect beauty! This is a very beautiful sonnet inside and out! I love the flow and the rhymes, the way it gets deeper and deeper. This poem takes us from the world of chitchat, to the world of profound talks, then, invites us into the sacred silence of the soul! Thank you for sharing it!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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What an absolutely perfect beauty! This is a very beautiful sonnet inside and out! I love the flow and the rhymes, the way it gets deeper and deeper. This poem takes us from the world of chitchat, to the world of profound talks, then, invites us into the sacred silence of the soul! Thank you for sharing it!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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I absolutely LOVE the way you wrote this review. I think you have give my poem a beautiful summary here, and I can tell I would like to read more of your writing, just from these words. Thank you so much for awarding the extra star, and thank you for visiting my portfolio. I am anxious to visit yours as well. MM
Comment from TPAC
You go, I find myself speck less, swing that blade, writers gives so many delights in this work, nicely selected fruits which blossoms greatness within the readers heart
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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You go, I find myself speck less, swing that blade, writers gives so many delights in this work, nicely selected fruits which blossoms greatness within the readers heart
Comment Written 23-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you so much for this touching review TPAC. I'm so glad you liked my writing poem. MM
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Afternoon, Adonna,
Congratulations for this poem being nominated for the POM! How on Earth did I miss this gem when you posted it? I'm so glad to have found it today.
I admire the sentiment of this poem and how beautifully it reflects your own values. Indeed, the power of words and the deafening sound of silence.
Your Shakespearean Sonnet is in perfect form. The iambic pentameter is spot-on and flows beautifully with your skillful use of enjambment. The end rhymes are strong and true. The turn in stanza 3 is effect and subtle. I like how it does not slap the reader in the face.
May I offer a few things for you to consider? The rhyme pattern in the couplet is AA and not GG. You might want to tweak it or place a note that you're penning a modified Shakespearean sonnet--rhyme pattern.
I[i]n many little ways
Beautifully crafted.
Best wishes to you in the voting booth!
Ray
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Good Afternoon, Adonna,
Congratulations for this poem being nominated for the POM! How on Earth did I miss this gem when you posted it? I'm so glad to have found it today.
I admire the sentiment of this poem and how beautifully it reflects your own values. Indeed, the power of words and the deafening sound of silence.
Your Shakespearean Sonnet is in perfect form. The iambic pentameter is spot-on and flows beautifully with your skillful use of enjambment. The end rhymes are strong and true. The turn in stanza 3 is effect and subtle. I like how it does not slap the reader in the face.
May I offer a few things for you to consider? The rhyme pattern in the couplet is AA and not GG. You might want to tweak it or place a note that you're penning a modified Shakespearean sonnet--rhyme pattern.
I[i]n many little ways
Beautifully crafted.
Best wishes to you in the voting booth!
Ray
Comment Written 23-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you for reviewing this poem and for the suggestions, which I thought were wonderful, and both have already been implemented. You are so generous with your rating, and for that I am also grateful. Once again, you have helped make my work better. I'm forever in your debt. :p
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You are very welcome, my friend,
ca
ray
Comment from Alaskastory
"The Power of Silence" really shows up in the picture that seems to have a big story to tell. It also is beautifully portrayed in your words. However, the word "profundity" was a new one for me. I had to look it up. Thanks for the vocab lesson, MissM.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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"The Power of Silence" really shows up in the picture that seems to have a big story to tell. It also is beautifully portrayed in your words. However, the word "profundity" was a new one for me. I had to look it up. Thanks for the vocab lesson, MissM.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Well Miss A... you appear and suddenly I have three sets of golden stars. What's with that? Are you trying to tell me something? Just kidding. I so appreciate your supportive comments and generous rating. I miss you so much around here, and hope you will be back soon. Love... MissM
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day MM. This is another beautifully rhymed and flowing little poem my friend. Words are very powerful things and as writers we know it, they can kill and they can cure, amazing isn't it. Well done, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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G'day MM. This is another beautifully rhymed and flowing little poem my friend. Words are very powerful things and as writers we know it, they can kill and they can cure, amazing isn't it. Well done, cheers Fez
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Thanks Fez. You are so nice to read and review my poetry. I appreciate this very much.
Comment from Joan E.
What a wonderful picture you chose to portray such an inviting environment! I admired the way you described the power of words and silences in your rhymed sonnet. Your alliteration of "s's" added to the intensity of the message. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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What a wonderful picture you chose to portray such an inviting environment! I admired the way you described the power of words and silences in your rhymed sonnet. Your alliteration of "s's" added to the intensity of the message. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 09-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind words, Joan. I'm glad you liked the picture too.
