If I Could Be...
I've always wanted to fly.44 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
An eagle can dive so fast that if it misjudge its target, it can be killed hitting earth. This is very well written and the reader can feel a closeness to God. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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An eagle can dive so fast that if it misjudge its target, it can be killed hitting earth. This is very well written and the reader can feel a closeness to God. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, Charlie, and for the good luck wishes! :) xx
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You're welcome.
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You're welcome
Comment from Glasstruth
An eagle is such a proud bird. You picked a good creature you'd like to be. Freedom is in the skies. Something we'll never know. Great flow throughout. Reads smoothly. Good luck with the contest. Les
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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An eagle is such a proud bird. You picked a good creature you'd like to be. Freedom is in the skies. Something we'll never know. Great flow throughout. Reads smoothly. Good luck with the contest. Les
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and good luck wishes, Les! :)
Comment from donalola
This is good. I like the "verbal images" you used. Well rhymed. It has a style of its own, like the Eagle.
I would love to have wings and join you in the clouds!
Well done
Donalola
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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This is good. I like the "verbal images" you used. Well rhymed. It has a style of its own, like the Eagle.
I would love to have wings and join you in the clouds!
Well done
Donalola
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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I will meet you up there! Thank you so much for your lovely review! :) xx
Comment from l.raven
I am with you...I would love to fly...and would love to fly with an Eagle...they are amazing...I love your poem...and beautiful picture...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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I am with you...I would love to fly...and would love to fly with an Eagle...they are amazing...I love your poem...and beautiful picture...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Wouldn't it be nice, Linda, if only!! Thank you so much, my friend, for your lovely review. :)
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you are always so welcome Sandra...you have a wonderful evening...love Linda xxoo and yes it would be wonderful...
Comment from livelylinda
Author: this took my breath away! Your beautiful poem had me soaring in the clouds with you as eagles. I could see it and feel it and the sense of freedom was grand. Your rhyme and rhythm is perfect so this piece flows for a delightful read. Good contender in this contest. livelylinda
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Author: this took my breath away! Your beautiful poem had me soaring in the clouds with you as eagles. I could see it and feel it and the sense of freedom was grand. Your rhyme and rhythm is perfect so this piece flows for a delightful read. Good contender in this contest. livelylinda
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, livelylinda! :)
Comment from JourneyHolm
Nice! I enjoyed the poetic rhyme and imagery presented in this poem. Although I thought the third stanza was a little weak, I felt that it was a solid poem overall. I really enjoyed it. It would be so cool to fly! Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Nice! I enjoyed the poetic rhyme and imagery presented in this poem. Although I thought the third stanza was a little weak, I felt that it was a solid poem overall. I really enjoyed it. It would be so cool to fly! Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your lovely review! :)
Comment from petalangela
Such a beautiful lilting poem. A real real treat to read. Flowing easily I to place the words were descriptive and beautiful. I will meet yiu there for I wish to be the wind.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Such a beautiful lilting poem. A real real treat to read. Flowing easily I to place the words were descriptive and beautiful. I will meet yiu there for I wish to be the wind.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Brilliant, I will fly with you! Thank you so much, petalangela. :) xx
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mystery writer, I love the eagle and what it represents, great imagery presented in your words. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, I love the eagle and what it represents, great imagery presented in your words. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and good luck wishes!! :)
Comment from Debbie Noland
My favorite thing about this poem is its varied imagery. In that, you capture all the aspects of what it must be like to be an eagle. Good rhyme and meter as well. In Line 4 I would suggest a comma between "rush" and "to" in order to separate those infinitive phrases.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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My favorite thing about this poem is its varied imagery. In that, you capture all the aspects of what it must be like to be an eagle. Good rhyme and meter as well. In Line 4 I would suggest a comma between "rush" and "to" in order to separate those infinitive phrases.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, Debbie, I have added the comma, thank you for that! :)
Comment from TomyKan
Beautifully written, with good rhythm, rhyme and flow. It captured me at the start and held my attention to the end. Emotions and yearnings expressed well. Very appropriate photo. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Beautifully written, with good rhythm, rhyme and flow. It captured me at the start and held my attention to the end. Emotions and yearnings expressed well. Very appropriate photo. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, TomyKan! :) xx
