Remove The Blindfold
Some guys! (a humorous rant poem)20 total reviews
Comment from DALLAS01
What a great presentation. The blending of poetry, artwork and video is awesome.
so get your head out of your ass! Become a decent guy.
So funny. Coudn't stop laughing.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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What a great presentation. The blending of poetry, artwork and video is awesome.
so get your head out of your ass! Become a decent guy.
So funny. Coudn't stop laughing.
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Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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LOL. Well, THIS is late! WOW. I have to try humour more often - thanks so much!
Comment from GWinterwin
Wow a good one sweetie, good word flow and rhyming. Good job of telling this jerk that he isn't such a great catch. Some guys are just like that no doubt.
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Wow a good one sweetie, good word flow and rhyming. Good job of telling this jerk that he isn't such a great catch. Some guys are just like that no doubt.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is well penned and a very engaging read. The rhyme and meter flow nicely throughout making for an enjoyable excursion into the life of this woman objectified by the lust of another. Nicely done and I thank you for sharing it.
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This is well penned and a very engaging read. The rhyme and meter flow nicely throughout making for an enjoyable excursion into the life of this woman objectified by the lust of another. Nicely done and I thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
Comment from Debra White
Hah! You made me chuckle with this this morning, Dawn :)
Good ranting with attitude - love it!
Fabulous meter - great alliteration in the 'peacock' line and nice use of enjambment in the final stanza also.
Thanks for entertaining me :)
Love, Debra
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Hah! You made me chuckle with this this morning, Dawn :)
Good ranting with attitude - love it!
Fabulous meter - great alliteration in the 'peacock' line and nice use of enjambment in the final stanza also.
Thanks for entertaining me :)
Love, Debra
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
Comment from I am Cat
Some girls do it too, from what I hear...
Let me guess.... you've busted his knee caps now and put him in a locker somewhere and he won't be found until his rotting corpse is found .... wait... I think I"ve been reading Dean's stuff too long!
Nevermind! lol
I enjoyed this lilting rhyme, it's almost like a really good beer song!
I can hear it in an Irish Pub or something... and then she smacks him in the end!
I loved the great cadence and I wanted to smack him too, well done!
Cat
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Some girls do it too, from what I hear...
Let me guess.... you've busted his knee caps now and put him in a locker somewhere and he won't be found until his rotting corpse is found .... wait... I think I"ve been reading Dean's stuff too long!
Nevermind! lol
I enjoyed this lilting rhyme, it's almost like a really good beer song!
I can hear it in an Irish Pub or something... and then she smacks him in the end!
I loved the great cadence and I wanted to smack him too, well done!
Cat
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
Comment from angel123
Your poem is emotional and well written. I enjoyed reading it and it held my attention. Your artwork choice is amazing and your poem flows and rhymes well.
Angel123
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Your poem is emotional and well written. I enjoyed reading it and it held my attention. Your artwork choice is amazing and your poem flows and rhymes well.
Angel123
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
Comment from boxergirl
Haha!! There's the attitude I like to see. Great poetic rant which flows melodically down the page. I like the video as well. 8-)
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Haha!! There's the attitude I like to see. Great poetic rant which flows melodically down the page. I like the video as well. 8-)
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I LOVE THIS!!
I hope I never make you mad at me! hahaha..
I love the rhyme and sound of your poem.
.......your damn attitude....... (hahaha,- I know the feeling.)
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I LOVE THIS!!
I hope I never make you mad at me! hahaha..
I love the rhyme and sound of your poem.
.......your damn attitude....... (hahaha,- I know the feeling.)
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dawn,
Is it? All good fun? What's the old saying? Fool me once, shame on you; fool me twice, shame on me ... This poem certainly points the finger firmly at the macho-arrogance of some young men.
Patrick
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Hi Dawn,
Is it? All good fun? What's the old saying? Fool me once, shame on you; fool me twice, shame on me ... This poem certainly points the finger firmly at the macho-arrogance of some young men.
Patrick
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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I'm grinning ear-to-ear. (You catch me out repeatedly. That saying is one of my favourites...) Thank you, my friend. :0)
Comment from Sasha
This is absolutely delightful and made me laugh out loud. Marvelous put you in your place attitude that far too many men need. I have never liked that song, but it was perfect for this and I actually enjoyed the video. Great work with this one.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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This is absolutely delightful and made me laugh out loud. Marvelous put you in your place attitude that far too many men need. I have never liked that song, but it was perfect for this and I actually enjoyed the video. Great work with this one.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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HAHAHAHAHA!!! I am SO glad you liked this one. *BIG grin*
