Cruel Rain
free verse34 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
You have written a jewel here in this poem. The imagery is just wonderful as you discribed the earth's need and the storm's stubborness very vividly. It does seem to be that way.
Well done WJ, Nancy
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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You have written a jewel here in this poem. The imagery is just wonderful as you discribed the earth's need and the storm's stubborness very vividly. It does seem to be that way.
Well done WJ, Nancy
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging review, Nancy!
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi, it is refreshing to read about rain,cool and invigorating, whether capricious or childish.it is life and it is hope.
The writing stars with a beautiful personification of rain that makes it more tender and beautiful we forget the violence when it finally comes in biggie load.
Very well put sentences and nice to read poetry because of it freshness.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Hi, it is refreshing to read about rain,cool and invigorating, whether capricious or childish.it is life and it is hope.
The writing stars with a beautiful personification of rain that makes it more tender and beautiful we forget the violence when it finally comes in biggie load.
Very well put sentences and nice to read poetry because of it freshness.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Rain is a wonderful thing and does give us hope. I hope we get some soon. Thank you for the kind words about the writing. Debi
Comment from livelylinda
w.j.debi: humanizing the rain is a brilliant move in this poem. Your descriptions make it sound like the pouty brat as you describe it. Original, cleverly written free verse poem; brilliant! This poem is easily six-star-worthy but I have only virtual today. livelylinda
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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w.j.debi: humanizing the rain is a brilliant move in this poem. Your descriptions make it sound like the pouty brat as you describe it. Original, cleverly written free verse poem; brilliant! This poem is easily six-star-worthy but I have only virtual today. livelylinda
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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I am grateful for the vitual six stars and especially the very kind comments. Free verse is a bit out my comfort zone so I do appreciate the encouragement. Thank you! Debi
Comment from Ekim777
A powerful personification of life giving rain. Why does our poet demean it. Doesn't the downpour soften the good earth's rugged landscape? Some see it differently. Did not the great Bard hail mercy as falling like the gentle rain upon the earth beneath?" How we do project ourselves. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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A powerful personification of life giving rain. Why does our poet demean it. Doesn't the downpour soften the good earth's rugged landscape? Some see it differently. Did not the great Bard hail mercy as falling like the gentle rain upon the earth beneath?" How we do project ourselves. -Ekim777
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you for a different perspective and a wonderful review. With the drought and water restrictions we have, the one rain storm we finally got last week seemed a bit cruel. It started with hail, then wind and then quite a deluge. It caused a lot of damage including some flooding. Now a few days later it hardly seems like there was any rain. I wish it would favor us with a gentle rainfall so we could see a merciful lady. I'll keep your thoughts I mind and my hopes up. Thank you for stopping by to read and give your insightful review.
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Your opinion is very valid!
Comment from petalangela
Brilliant poetry stunning picture painting with words and so very very tur
I was born in Africa where droughts are many and water can be scarce
This work highlighted the plight of the earth to perfection
Perfection deserves six stars
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Brilliant poetry stunning picture painting with words and so very very tur
I was born in Africa where droughts are many and water can be scarce
This work highlighted the plight of the earth to perfection
Perfection deserves six stars
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Wow, such wonderful comments! I appreciate the shiny six stars as well. Thank you so much! Debi
Comment from Dean Kuch
Nicely done, Debi. It is a bit arrogant of rain to make Mother Earth suffer the way it does at times. But earth is at rain's mercies, and rain is all too aware of her fragile condition. Dry, arid drought, coupled with the Great Depression, nearly turned this country into a perpetual dustbowl in the late 1920's - early '30s. But earth, and our nation, survived. Flash forest fires devour thousands of acres of life-giving trees each year in drought ravaged areas of southern California. The rain forests are heating up due to global warming, and rain forests lush greenery provides our earth with a great amount of our oxygen.
When they die, we die...
Good writing, and much food for thought.~Dean
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Nicely done, Debi. It is a bit arrogant of rain to make Mother Earth suffer the way it does at times. But earth is at rain's mercies, and rain is all too aware of her fragile condition. Dry, arid drought, coupled with the Great Depression, nearly turned this country into a perpetual dustbowl in the late 1920's - early '30s. But earth, and our nation, survived. Flash forest fires devour thousands of acres of life-giving trees each year in drought ravaged areas of southern California. The rain forests are heating up due to global warming, and rain forests lush greenery provides our earth with a great amount of our oxygen.
When they die, we die...
Good writing, and much food for thought.~Dean
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the insightful review, Dean. Poor Mother Earth does seem like she goes through a lot to take care of us. I did read an article a couple years ago where a scientist had a theory that if we would just give the earth one day per week of rest from airplanes, the hole in the ozone would heal itself. Of course, that will never happen. It cuts into too many profits to even be considered.
I appreciate the encouraging comments about the writing. Thank you. Debi
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It was a pleasure as always, Debi.
Comment from Delahay
This is somewhat of a timely poem. Texas has suffered a drought for many years but lately has been beset by floods. I guess we really should be careful what we wish for. I imagine the people in Texas are thinking about too much of a good thing.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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This is somewhat of a timely poem. Texas has suffered a drought for many years but lately has been beset by floods. I guess we really should be careful what we wish for. I imagine the people in Texas are thinking about too much of a good thing.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the insightful comments. Yes, poor Texas is really getting hit hard with rain for the moment. Too much dry, now too much wet.
Comment from BellaSpirit
I really liked this free verse. It's plea to nature begs for the reward of the cleansing rain to renew the earth. If only we could convince nature to cooperate with us...
In the first verse, last line I wonder if the word 'you' should be 'your'? It's probably just a typo.
This is natural talent when it reads with ease and is not forced. Very creative!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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I really liked this free verse. It's plea to nature begs for the reward of the cleansing rain to renew the earth. If only we could convince nature to cooperate with us...
In the first verse, last line I wonder if the word 'you' should be 'your'? It's probably just a typo.
This is natural talent when it reads with ease and is not forced. Very creative!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you for catching the typo. No one else mentioned it and I appreciate the heads up.
I am pleased that you like this poem and appreciate your insightful comments on the topic. If only nature would cooperate. We really need some rain.
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You are so welcome. I am terrible about missing little things in my own writing and sometimes I think I'm half asleep so who knows what I jot down...LOL I am looking forward to reading more of your work.
Comment from tennesseerose
WOW! You poem says it all about rain! Reminds me of our weather here for the past few days...only we can't put it into words like you do. Your poem flows so well that we know, without re-reading, exactly what is being talked about. I like the comparison to "a capricious, pouty child", referred to again in the line, "And you rain, throw a tantrum." Wow! I like this so much and think you do good writing! I would change nothing.
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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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WOW! You poem says it all about rain! Reminds me of our weather here for the past few days...only we can't put it into words like you do. Your poem flows so well that we know, without re-reading, exactly what is being talked about. I like the comparison to "a capricious, pouty child", referred to again in the line, "And you rain, throw a tantrum." Wow! I like this so much and think you do good writing! I would change nothing.
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Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging words. What should I improve?
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It's perfect, no improvements needed.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Debi...
_ Wow! This is so 'six star' awesome.
_ I love your distinct, crisp verbiage.
_ The imagery your words produce is fantastic.
_ Super line when Rain throws a tantrum.
_ Excellent, dynamic read, my friend.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Hi, Debi...
_ Wow! This is so 'six star' awesome.
_ I love your distinct, crisp verbiage.
_ The imagery your words produce is fantastic.
_ Super line when Rain throws a tantrum.
_ Excellent, dynamic read, my friend.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the incredible review, Jax! And also for the shiny six stars!
You say so many nice things, I am overwhelmed. I am pleased you liked this. Free verse is a bit out my comfort zone so it was a leap for me and I am happy to hear you found it "dynamic". Thank you for mentioning the tantrum. I wondered if it would work. I think I will be smiling all night. Thank you for the encouragement. Debi
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Well earned.
It was an excellent job.(*<*)
