Cruel Rain
free verse34 total reviews
Comment from Writingfundimension
'... And you, Rain, throw a tantrum
with a dark and gloomy brow,
stomping, crashing, sneering,
eyes flashing...'
I think your use of the personification of rain works extremely well in this poem, Debi. It's rare to get a gentle daylong rain anymore.
Great job!
:) Bev
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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'... And you, Rain, throw a tantrum
with a dark and gloomy brow,
stomping, crashing, sneering,
eyes flashing...'
I think your use of the personification of rain works extremely well in this poem, Debi. It's rare to get a gentle daylong rain anymore.
Great job!
:) Bev
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the great review, Bev. I appreciate you mentioning the personification of the rain. Free verse is a bit of stretch for me so I appreciate the encouragement. Maybe I should now get busy on some prose. Thank you for stopping by. I appreciate it. Debi
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You're very welcome, Debi. I'd love to read some of your prose :) Bev
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow, this was tremendous. It was direct, powerful, soft, thought provoking, drenching, enlightening, filled with passion, and it suits the current torrents of rain running rampant through our country.
Worthy of the six stars by far. John
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Wow, this was tremendous. It was direct, powerful, soft, thought provoking, drenching, enlightening, filled with passion, and it suits the current torrents of rain running rampant through our country.
Worthy of the six stars by far. John
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Wow, John, I appreciate the generous six stars! You say so many nice things all I can do is smile and say THANK YOU!!!
Comment from Gloria ....
Very smartly written, w.j. I love the metaphor of the rain casting a few pennies to a beggar when a real down pour is what is needed. Then hiding behind her mother's -- the clouds -- billowy cotton skirts is haiku in presentation. I love that kind of imagery.
Poor Earth she really does take a beating at the whims of weather and mankind.
Oh boy, I'm happy to see that all turned out well in the end.
This is a beautiful poem and now I'm feeling like a drink of water which is always a good sign.
Terrific free verse!
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Very smartly written, w.j. I love the metaphor of the rain casting a few pennies to a beggar when a real down pour is what is needed. Then hiding behind her mother's -- the clouds -- billowy cotton skirts is haiku in presentation. I love that kind of imagery.
Poor Earth she really does take a beating at the whims of weather and mankind.
Oh boy, I'm happy to see that all turned out well in the end.
This is a beautiful poem and now I'm feeling like a drink of water which is always a good sign.
Terrific free verse!
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank by for the kind words, Gloria. I appreciate you mentioning the imagery, especially the pennies to the beggar and billowy skirts. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from angel123
Your poem is well written. It held my attention and it flows well. Your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts and good alliteration of words drenching, drowning and deluge.
Angel123
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Your poem is well written. It held my attention and it flows well. Your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts and good alliteration of words drenching, drowning and deluge.
Angel123
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the kind words of encouragement. I appreciate you taking time to read and review.
Comment from TAB_that's me
wow! the imagery and personification are both wonderful. excellent free verse. lots of areas with plenty of flooding. too bad we can ship the water to where it is needed.
teresa
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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wow! the imagery and personification are both wonderful. excellent free verse. lots of areas with plenty of flooding. too bad we can ship the water to where it is needed.
teresa
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the wonderful six stars and the very encouraging review. I appreciate you mentioning the personification and the imagery. Thank you!
Yes, it would be nice if we could ship the water where it is needed and away from the flooded areas.
Comment from Sis Cat
Living in drought stricken Californian while my relatives in Texas are inundated with rain, I found your poem resonated with me. Your metaphor of rain as a capricious child is appropriate and vivid. I, too, hate Rain teasing me with a few drops. I love your tone because I often thought the same things about rain. Thank you for sharing your relevant poem.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Living in drought stricken Californian while my relatives in Texas are inundated with rain, I found your poem resonated with me. Your metaphor of rain as a capricious child is appropriate and vivid. I, too, hate Rain teasing me with a few drops. I love your tone because I often thought the same things about rain. Thank you for sharing your relevant poem.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thank you for sharing your insights and the encouraging comments. Thank you for mentioning the tone. We are on water restriction where I am and those thunder clouds rolling by seem almost cruel with their taunting at times. Last week we did get a storm, but is wasn't kind. We had hail and wind and then a deluge. It created all sorts of destruction. Now we are back to dry, as if the rain never happened, but still fixing the damage. It's not nearly as bad as Texas and California though. I feel for you.
Comment from LIJ Red
I just got soaked running ten paces through a cloudburst. Rain enough! But your image-filled free verse must make the farmers in California sigh. Excellent poem.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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I just got soaked running ten paces through a cloudburst. Rain enough! But your image-filled free verse must make the farmers in California sigh. Excellent poem.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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I can visualize you running through the rain. Please send some my way! Thank you for the kind remarks. I appreciate you dropping by to rad and review.
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I meant read and review. Sometimes spellcheck is too helpful
Comment from Spitfire
What a great poem to read out loud--full of passion and fury and bitterness too. Addressing an inanimate object is an Ode except I believe it has to be praising the subject instead of admonishing it. Wonderful personification of both Earth and Rain. Fantastic is all I can say.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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What a great poem to read out loud--full of passion and fury and bitterness too. Addressing an inanimate object is an Ode except I believe it has to be praising the subject instead of admonishing it. Wonderful personification of both Earth and Rain. Fantastic is all I can say.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for the generous six stars! And the generous comments! "Fantastic" has me grinning ear to ear. Thank you for mentioning the personification. Free style is a bit out of my comfort zone so I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from l.raven
Debi, this is brilliant...I love the way the rain talks...for droughts to down pours...really very well described...and very well written...and the picture is stunning...well done you...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Debi, this is brilliant...I love the way the rain talks...for droughts to down pours...really very well described...and very well written...and the picture is stunning...well done you...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Hi Linda,
Thank you for the lovely review so full of positive comments. I appreciate the encouragement because free verse is a bit out my comfort zone. Debi
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you are so welcome...you did a great job it...so very welcome...xxoo luff
Comment from tfawcus
How well you describe the atmosphere of the dry electrical storm that teases a drought-stricken land. The metaphor of the spoilt child is a strong one. One can just imagine the petulance as the storm finally arrives to
"unleash a torrent,
a drenching, drowning deluge
full of fury and pride"
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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How well you describe the atmosphere of the dry electrical storm that teases a drought-stricken land. The metaphor of the spoilt child is a strong one. One can just imagine the petulance as the storm finally arrives to
"unleash a torrent,
a drenching, drowning deluge
full of fury and pride"
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the delightful review. The area I live has suffered drought for serval years and we are on water restrictions. Last week we had a rain storm, but it started with hail stones, then wind, and then a dumping of rain. It created a lot of damage, and a few days later it seems like we didn't have any rain at all.
I appreciate the encouraging comments about the writing. Thank you. Debi
