Dark Covenant
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Dead Man's Creek"The Berwick Witches Series: Book One
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Comment from sharonmealler
I'd give you twelve stars if I could. I was holding my breath the whole time. I hate that it ended so soon. You are such a talented writer. I am hanging on every word. This is a wonderful story. I can't wait to see the whole book in print. I will definitely buy it.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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I'd give you twelve stars if I could. I was holding my breath the whole time. I hate that it ended so soon. You are such a talented writer. I am hanging on every word. This is a wonderful story. I can't wait to see the whole book in print. I will definitely buy it.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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LOL Thank you, my dear. This review is better than any stars. I'm so flattered and so glad you liked it.
Comment from emkoutny
This was a very exciting read. I love that Illinois has been taken over by witches. I live there, so I know it is a genuine possibility. The car chase was well done, although, as I haven't read the other chapters, I wasn't sure why they were chasing each other, but that didn't really matter. i enjoyed the fast-paced adventure.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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This was a very exciting read. I love that Illinois has been taken over by witches. I live there, so I know it is a genuine possibility. The car chase was well done, although, as I haven't read the other chapters, I wasn't sure why they were chasing each other, but that didn't really matter. i enjoyed the fast-paced adventure.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thank you, emkoutny. Read the recap, that should help. But they are chasing him to get that tube of werewolf blood that could expose them if he takes it to the state lab.
Comment from Ric Myworld
A breast accented by blonde curls and parted butt cheeks rounding-out tight jeans kind of made me the sucker, but Carlton held himself together. Great descriptions that kept me tied to my seat the whole chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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A breast accented by blonde curls and parted butt cheeks rounding-out tight jeans kind of made me the sucker, but Carlton held himself together. Great descriptions that kept me tied to my seat the whole chapter. :-)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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That's why I let him have that phone call from Ben. l knew he would have acted just like the red blooded man you are. LOL! Thanks Ric.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi amahra,
Now that was a very interestingb twist to the tale and it certainly adds a little tension to the story to give him the chance to make a getaway ... Now it would be entertaining if the blood samples got switched back again, and he walked away, but I doubt your werewolves plan on allowing that at all ...
Patrick
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Hi amahra,
Now that was a very interestingb twist to the tale and it certainly adds a little tension to the story to give him the chance to make a getaway ... Now it would be entertaining if the blood samples got switched back again, and he walked away, but I doubt your werewolves plan on allowing that at all ...
Patrick
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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I'm glad you liked it, Patrick. It means I took your advice well. You know, to ramp it up and make the wolves work to catch him. I really appreciate that advice.
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Glad to help. I liked the fact his own curiosity got him into the mess ...
BTW, the Count has just posted advice to would be werewolf foster parents ...
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I didn't get that last thing you said, Partrick: The count posted advice to would be foster parents. ???
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Look for the Count's latest letter here - a bit of fun somewhere around No. 20 on Page 1 of the story lists tonight.
Patrick
Comment from Shirley McLain
Full of action and suspense. You did a great job with this chapter. I'm ready to read the next chapter to find out what happens. Shirley
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Full of action and suspense. You did a great job with this chapter. I'm ready to read the next chapter to find out what happens. Shirley
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, Shirley. This chapter was a real struggle. Action chapters always are. But, I'm so glad you liked the action. It really means a lot to me.
Comment from justafan
WOW, very gripping scene you have created my friend. The chase was excellent. I was hoping he would not get out of the car. lol. But, now he is facing a more serious outcome in the woods.
Well done!!
Always justafan,
Missy
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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WOW, very gripping scene you have created my friend. The chase was excellent. I was hoping he would not get out of the car. lol. But, now he is facing a more serious outcome in the woods.
Well done!!
Always justafan,
Missy
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for these stars and for reading this difficult chapter. I was very nervous that I hadn't provided the action that I wanted. I so appreciate your support of my book. Blessings my friend.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I couldn't believe he headed for that
swamp road after being warned... but,
thank goodness, he caught that he was
in danger and took off... only to be
chased and then rammed - I hope he's
not caught and that he remembered to
pick up the blood samples...
This was an exciting, action-packed chapter,
Amahra ... and merits a six.
Charlton, his face[,] now[,] devoid of expression, - suggest you lose those two commas, Amahra.
Then(,) as if someone had pinched - add comma
He had a head start, but could he keep it--hold on to it until he was clear of this God forsaken place--clear to see street lights, houses, live animals, people again[.](?) - question mark.
I noticed you spelt "arse" (buttocks) - as "ass" (donkey)
His breathing was heavy[,](;) beads of sweat poured from his forehead, and the blue veins at his temple were pulsating as he watched the red Dodge inch closer to him. - this needs a semi-colon after "heavy"
But, then suddenly - might I suggest you simply start with..
Then suddenly, from beyond the blackness
Great writing.
Margaret
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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I couldn't believe he headed for that
swamp road after being warned... but,
thank goodness, he caught that he was
in danger and took off... only to be
chased and then rammed - I hope he's
not caught and that he remembered to
pick up the blood samples...
This was an exciting, action-packed chapter,
Amahra ... and merits a six.
Charlton, his face[,] now[,] devoid of expression, - suggest you lose those two commas, Amahra.
Then(,) as if someone had pinched - add comma
He had a head start, but could he keep it--hold on to it until he was clear of this God forsaken place--clear to see street lights, houses, live animals, people again[.](?) - question mark.
I noticed you spelt "arse" (buttocks) - as "ass" (donkey)
His breathing was heavy[,](;) beads of sweat poured from his forehead, and the blue veins at his temple were pulsating as he watched the red Dodge inch closer to him. - this needs a semi-colon after "heavy"
But, then suddenly - might I suggest you simply start with..
Then suddenly, from beyond the blackness
Great writing.
Margaret
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Thank you Margaret for your support of my new book and for catching these spags. I really appreciated your support of this book. Blessings, my dear.
Comment from robina1978
I admire your skill to post for a book. Thanks for the introduction. Charles is supposed to bring a blood sample to Dr Laurac in the state lab. Someone tried to convince him to take shorter way. He does not do this, and gets pushed of the road.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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I admire your skill to post for a book. Thanks for the introduction. Charles is supposed to bring a blood sample to Dr Laurac in the state lab. Someone tried to convince him to take shorter way. He does not do this, and gets pushed of the road.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Smile, not quite: Dr. Lorac is friendly with the witches and werewolves and she substituted her blood for the boy's flood so the hospital lab wouldn't discover the boy's inhuman blood and put two and two together. Not trusting his own eyes, Charles decides to take the sample to the state lab. Dr. Lorac sets him up for an ambush, but the friend, Ben, who called put a monkey wrench in the whole thing. Okay? Go back and read two or three recaps of previous chapters; maybe that will help bring you up. Thanks, robina. I look forward to your next review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very exciting chapter. Just the right pacing and amount of progress for Charlton. Well done! What do they want with him? It's been so long since the last chapter I'm not able to remember who Lorac and Charlton are, and why Lorac sent him to the wolves.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Very exciting chapter. Just the right pacing and amount of progress for Charlton. Well done! What do they want with him? It's been so long since the last chapter I'm not able to remember who Lorac and Charlton are, and why Lorac sent him to the wolves.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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It was all in the last chapter I posted last Monday. It's in every recap of the previous chapters.
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Oh, I missed that one... thanks!
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That will teach me to read the synopsis of previous chapters. I remember now.. .the blood sample! :)
Comment from c_lucas
There are times when a gun loaded with silver bullets could come in handy. This is very well written with very good imagery, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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There are times when a gun loaded with silver bullets could come in handy. This is very well written with very good imagery, making for a good read.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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No Charlie, can't kill my werewolves. LOL. Thank you my friend.
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You're welcome, Amahra. Charlie
