I'm The One
Went back up that mountain27 total reviews
Comment from angelface2
Ah, well done TK. Well, I can hardly wait for part 3 now. This is wonderful. The picture is beautiful, also. Another part of God's beauty. The eleventh verse is particularly well said. I love it!! :>D Miss Sally
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Ah, well done TK. Well, I can hardly wait for part 3 now. This is wonderful. The picture is beautiful, also. Another part of God's beauty. The eleventh verse is particularly well said. I love it!! :>D Miss Sally
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Thank you very much Miss Sally for visiting me on the mountain..Part three is complete and will be posted hopefully later my time today
TK
Comment from country ranch writer
TRAGEDY HAS STUCK MY LIFE AND I WONDER IF I WILL EVER ADJUST TO THE FACT WE TAKE LIFE TO MUCH FOR GRANTED. MY HUSBAND ATTEST TO THIS HIS SUDDENLY OUT OF KNOW WHERE HLOOSING THE USE OF HIR RIGHT LEG DUE TO NO FEELING IN IT HAD TO BE RUSHED TO HAVE THEM AMPUTATE NO SAVING IT
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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TRAGEDY HAS STUCK MY LIFE AND I WONDER IF I WILL EVER ADJUST TO THE FACT WE TAKE LIFE TO MUCH FOR GRANTED. MY HUSBAND ATTEST TO THIS HIS SUDDENLY OUT OF KNOW WHERE HLOOSING THE USE OF HIR RIGHT LEG DUE TO NO FEELING IN IT HAD TO BE RUSHED TO HAVE THEM AMPUTATE NO SAVING IT
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Oh my CRW I and The Hawaiian Mermaid wish you and hubby the best..This 6 means even more that you have taken the time to read and comment on it while going through such a malady..Thank you so very very much
Lots of Hula Hugs from us both
TK And HW
Comment from TAB_that's me
This made me tingle inside - it was that powerful - as powerful as God who put the words inside your pen my friend!
Teresa
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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This made me tingle inside - it was that powerful - as powerful as God who put the words inside your pen my friend!
Teresa
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you so much Lady T.for awarding me the lovely 6. I am so glad you took the journey with me to the top of that mountain Part 3 is now posted Called Perhaps I Can Save MY Soul
HULA HUGS FROM THE BIG ISLAND
TK
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem well. It tells of a special time and place. I like the many examples you gave the reader to support the fact that Jesus is in fact the one.
Good job on the rhyme. I like the short length of the lines. That really adds to the flow. It makes the reader read this at a quicker pace than normal but still be able to understand. I like the ending about praying.
Good job. No changes. Thanks for sharing an uplifting testament to your faith.
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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I enjoyed your poem well. It tells of a special time and place. I like the many examples you gave the reader to support the fact that Jesus is in fact the one.
Good job on the rhyme. I like the short length of the lines. That really adds to the flow. It makes the reader read this at a quicker pace than normal but still be able to understand. I like the ending about praying.
Good job. No changes. Thanks for sharing an uplifting testament to your faith.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you so much Janny..I try and keep them short as I too get bored very quickly lol Thanks for taking the the trip with me up the mountain as well Part 3 has been posted called Perhaps I Can Save My Soul
Aloha from the Islands
tk
Comment from Treischel
Yes indeed, a great followup to your previous post. This spiritual excursion, I think the Mermaid is getting through to you. Loved the poem. Looking forward to the next.
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Yes indeed, a great followup to your previous post. This spiritual excursion, I think the Mermaid is getting through to you. Loved the poem. Looking forward to the next.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank yoU again Mr T The third segment I just posted under Perhaps I Can Save My Soul.. Hope you get a chance to read it
TK
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Lovely image for your poem.
-I like the follow up to Part I and how you incorporate the animals you saw but expand on your thoughts and feelings, as well.
-Poem flows well, uses good rhyme, and continues with a good story.
-I especially like the last two lines about the deer.
-Nice concluding verses, beginning with "I know where you've been"
-A few things to consider are:
-"When you saw that eagle," a voice said
-Take a look at where you have single apostrophes, one you don't need, and the other needs double.
-"Trust in me, my son
-"New life will have its start" (no apostrophe in its)
-Did someone really care?
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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-Lovely image for your poem.
-I like the follow up to Part I and how you incorporate the animals you saw but expand on your thoughts and feelings, as well.
-Poem flows well, uses good rhyme, and continues with a good story.
-I especially like the last two lines about the deer.
-Nice concluding verses, beginning with "I know where you've been"
-A few things to consider are:
-"When you saw that eagle," a voice said
-Take a look at where you have single apostrophes, one you don't need, and the other needs double.
-"Trust in me, my son
-"New life will have its start" (no apostrophe in its)
-Did someone really care?
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you so much for the help on this I always have apostrophe problems lol..Thank you for visiting me on the Mountain..Part 3 is posted now under the title Perhaps I Can Save My soul
Aloha from the Islands
tk
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You are very welcome for the review and I look forward to reading Part III later today, EST.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Once you get that close to God you have to return. The peace you can find in His presence is overwhelming and you just need more and more. He is always there when you call. Good Job TK. :<) Nancy
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Once you get that close to God you have to return. The peace you can find in His presence is overwhelming and you just need more and more. He is always there when you call. Good Job TK. :<) Nancy
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank yo again Nancy Part 3 has been posted under Perhaps I Can Save My Soul
tk
Comment from boxergirl
How about another six? Great job with another visit to the mountain. Loved that God was speaking to you there. Reminded me of Moses on the mountain. :-)
I am also glad that you pointed out the fact that we can find Him anywhere. Looking forears to part 3. 8-)
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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How about another six? Great job with another visit to the mountain. Loved that God was speaking to you there. Reminded me of Moses on the mountain. :-)
I am also glad that you pointed out the fact that we can find Him anywhere. Looking forears to part 3. 8-)
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you so much BG I really appreciate not only the 6 but that you took time to visit me on the Mountain.. Part 3 has been posted under "Perhaps I Can Save My Soul"
Comment from Sasha
Religious poetry like the last two you wrote are lovely and quite inspiring. I just don't like the bible thumpers that brow beat you with with endless quotes and imply if you don't believe the way you do you are destined for hell...not at all inspiring. Great work with this one and I look forward to part three.
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Religious poetry like the last two you wrote are lovely and quite inspiring. I just don't like the bible thumpers that brow beat you with with endless quotes and imply if you don't believe the way you do you are destined for hell...not at all inspiring. Great work with this one and I look forward to part three.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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My sediments exactly SG.. I am not a bit religious but can write about it.. That is a close as I want to get..BTW Part 3 is posted and it might justify my words... Called "Perhaps I Can Save My Soul"
tk
Comment from dmt1967
I like this poem a lot. They say to get nearer to God, climb the highest mountain. I was wondering if to were Scottish as 'nary' is scotch for 'nothing' I think. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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I like this poem a lot. They say to get nearer to God, climb the highest mountain. I was wondering if to were Scottish as 'nary' is scotch for 'nothing' I think. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Thanks again dmt..No I am not Scottish a bit of Irish though Close maybe but no cigar lol
