Fire!
Fire phobia.8 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
OMG Dos, I didn't know you were in a contest...will check more often...sooooo glad I never had dreams of burning...and trust me sweet girl...there isn't a chance in hell you are ever going to see the place...so start preparing your angel wings...but take your time...you won't need them for a long time...how ya doing Dos...will call and talk at ya soon...this is very well written...love ya you...always...Uno here...LOL...xxxxoooo Linda
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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OMG Dos, I didn't know you were in a contest...will check more often...sooooo glad I never had dreams of burning...and trust me sweet girl...there isn't a chance in hell you are ever going to see the place...so start preparing your angel wings...but take your time...you won't need them for a long time...how ya doing Dos...will call and talk at ya soon...this is very well written...love ya you...always...Uno here...LOL...xxxxoooo Linda
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Uno: I didn't win the contest, wasn't even close. I knew there were a couple better than mine. I have been down in Citrus County. Went to my grandson's high school graduation. Spent some good time with my granddaughter and great-grandson, Bentley. So very tired today. It's almost 11 a.m. and still in my bathrobe sipping coffee . . . returned home to an ant invasion in my kitchen . . . I never get bored because life just keeps on giving . . .God always bless you, Linda Dos
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EKKKKK, ants...I know they get a lot of them here...Texas...the water and the rain bring the critters( all kinds) in the house...and boy have we had the rain...just had enough time to wash our dog...Emmy....she is such a good girl...will call ya later...love ya Dos...soooooooo much...Uno...xxoo
Comment from tennesseerose
WOW! What a picture you paint! Plus, I hope the fear of fire I feel does not turn into a phobia about hell...
This piece was easy to read and easy to understand the point. Hell? Better make amends if you need to, to alleviate your phobia now and therefore lose your fear of hell...I like this poem very much! Thanks.
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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WOW! What a picture you paint! Plus, I hope the fear of fire I feel does not turn into a phobia about hell...
This piece was easy to read and easy to understand the point. Hell? Better make amends if you need to, to alleviate your phobia now and therefore lose your fear of hell...I like this poem very much! Thanks.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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tennesseerose: thanks for reading and commenting. I don't have that phobia any more but as a child, in the summertime, it was prevalent. livelylinda
Comment from Tatarka2
This may well be the winner of this contest. As I read through the poem, I could feel the heat and the child's anxiety. The line "nightmares saw skin burn off" is especially powerful. I think this is a very strong entry.
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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This may well be the winner of this contest. As I read through the poem, I could feel the heat and the child's anxiety. The line "nightmares saw skin burn off" is especially powerful. I think this is a very strong entry.
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Thank you, Tatarka2.
Comment from mommerry
Your words telling exactly what about fire you fear made this a very good submission. I am sure you live an extraordinarily good life to be sure the fires of hell don't await you.
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Your words telling exactly what about fire you fear made this a very good submission. I am sure you live an extraordinarily good life to be sure the fires of hell don't await you.
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Awwwww . . . most of the time. Thank you for reading.
Comment from TPAC
Fear. A strong foe to contend with capturing and possessing us all but when you allow threats to become your blood you become poisoned A crippled friend I knew died in fire as others Fire is no joke, but our brother home -- the place hell is thrown is worst Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Fear. A strong foe to contend with capturing and possessing us all but when you allow threats to become your blood you become poisoned A crippled friend I knew died in fire as others Fire is no joke, but our brother home -- the place hell is thrown is worst Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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I thank you for reading. However, once we post poem/story, etc., the expectation is to receive a "review" of our writing which might help us improve. There is a section which defines reviews, what to comment on and how to rate them.
Comment from RYME4U
Excellent. This is well written and descriptive. This is a great entry for the "phobia" contest. I like the conclusion you make at the end but hope it isn't true.Great job
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Excellent. This is well written and descriptive. This is a great entry for the "phobia" contest. I like the conclusion you make at the end but hope it isn't true.Great job
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Thank you.
Comment from K. Lorraine
Nicely done...
A phobia that many of us have...
The story was well told and easily followed...
The ending is a phobia in itself... the fear of hell...
A good contender in the contest and best wishes.
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Nicely done...
A phobia that many of us have...
The story was well told and easily followed...
The ending is a phobia in itself... the fear of hell...
A good contender in the contest and best wishes.
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Thank you!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You handled the prompt well. The artwork with your words are a good match.
I believe 1 space between the sections would be helpful. As I was reading, I thought why would you wake up to the noise of fire trucks then follow them to watch buildings burn. I know there is a semicolon between the lines. However, they still run together IMHO.
Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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You handled the prompt well. The artwork with your words are a good match.
I believe 1 space between the sections would be helpful. As I was reading, I thought why would you wake up to the noise of fire trucks then follow them to watch buildings burn. I know there is a semicolon between the lines. However, they still run together IMHO.
Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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jannypan: thanks so much for reading and for your suggestion. I was wondering about that part, too, and will fix it. Thank you!
