A Fall From Grace
It's deadly at the top...46 total reviews
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dean,
The Count wishes it to be known that the Bruce Cox in this story is no relation to his secretary and biographer ...
Some of the writing sites I tried before finding this one could well have qualified for the sort of murderous determination to reach Number 1. I suspect I'm safe enough from that threat however. Last I looked I was a long way from Number 1, and I'm quite happy with that.
An amusing tale of double cross, ambition and the final ...
Patrick
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Hi Dean,
The Count wishes it to be known that the Bruce Cox in this story is no relation to his secretary and biographer ...
Some of the writing sites I tried before finding this one could well have qualified for the sort of murderous determination to reach Number 1. I suspect I'm safe enough from that threat however. Last I looked I was a long way from Number 1, and I'm quite happy with that.
An amusing tale of double cross, ambition and the final ...
Patrick
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Yeah, I know precisely what you mean, Patrick. Lord knows, I don't want to be at the top either. I'm comfortable, pretty much, wherever I happen to "land". We write, we pour our hearts, souls, thoughts and ideas into our writing. However they're received by others is completely out of our caring hands, once we click that "SUBMIT" button. I'm glad you appreciated the dark, tongue-in-cheekiness of this particular story. It's concentric to the idea as a whole.
Much obliged, my friend. ~Dean
Comment from padumachitta
Hey You...well, that was certainly entertaining! And well, perhaps it is good I live so far away I can never have coffee with any of the members...ya just never know, ya know:-)
I is a super piece of noir...and well Bruce, he sure nuff had it coming...now who's next...
padumachitta
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Hey You...well, that was certainly entertaining! And well, perhaps it is good I live so far away I can never have coffee with any of the members...ya just never know, ya know:-)
I is a super piece of noir...and well Bruce, he sure nuff had it coming...now who's next...
padumachitta
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Ha-ha, well, I suppose that's up to Grace, and Glenn, her lover/accomplice/publisher fiend...e-r-r-r, heh-he I mean friend, of course, LOL.
Thanks for checking this out for me, Padu. It's always a pleasure when you drop by and give me your unique take on my terror tales.
Much obliged! ;)
~Dean
Comment from country ranch writer
ASK THE REGULARS ON HERE WHAT THEY DO TO KEEP US FROM BECOMING REAL WRITERS, ARSENIC IN EVERY REVIEW, TELLING US LIES AFTER LIES
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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ASK THE REGULARS ON HERE WHAT THEY DO TO KEEP US FROM BECOMING REAL WRITERS, ARSENIC IN EVERY REVIEW, TELLING US LIES AFTER LIES
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Hah-ha, you wouldn't happen to be having a bad day today would you, Country, my darlin'? I do know what you mean, however. It's one of those "damned if you do, damned if you don't" situations here when it comes to reviewing another members work, especially the more popular ones. If you give them an honest review, and it's truly awful writing -- at least in your opinion -- then chances are that member will block you from reading their work. If you give fluff reviews, then it comes across as such, and people pick up on that PDQ. It's a lose-lose situation.
I try to stick with authors whose works I admire, for the most part. There is a myriad of talented individuals here -- including yourself -- who make revisiting this community of like minded individuals, along with their writing -- a pleasure.
I do appreciate your very generous rating, and I hope you enjoyed the dark humor in this story. I doubt it will win any prizes, but it was fun to write and speculate on just the same.
Thanks for reading my rather lengthy post, and I'll catch you in the funny pages.
Hugs!
~Dean
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LIFE HAS DISHED ME A LOT OF BLOWS BUT DON'T KNOW IF I CAN GET THROUGH IT BEING A WHOLE NEW CHANGE OF LIFE STYLE FOR HUBBY. AFTER HIS LEG AMPUTATION ON APRIL 1ST IT HAS BEEN A HELL OF A BATTLE JUST TO KEEP HIM WELL, MERSA ID NOTHING TO FOOL WITH HE CONTRACTED IT DURING SURGERY. HE WILL BE ON A WOUND VAC UNTIL HIS LEG IS HEALED. THEN IT WILL BE THE NEXT BIG STEP GETTING A LEG TO FIT FOR HIS PROSTETIC.
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BEEN HOME NINE DAYS AND IT SEEMS LIKE FOR EVER.TWO HOSPITALS AND A REHAB IN BETWEEN SUCKED THE LIFE OUT OF ME CARING FOR HIM 24/7- I AM SO EXHAUSTED
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I don't doubt it a bit, my friend. Take it easy, if you're able, and get some much needed rest. It sounds like you could sure use some!
Hugs!
<3 <3
~Dean :)
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hey come hubby sit for me he he
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Ha! He'd probably want to kill me within the first fifteen minutes of me being there, darlin'...
Comment from Just2Write
Oh my, Dean - I could actually visualize some of the writers on this site, fitting nicely into the scene of your 'fictitious' site's characters. Scary stuff, my friend. The parrot was a nice touch. My Amazon parrot, Tom thought so too. Not many people write much about them. He wanted to know what song the parrot was singing. I think I would have liked that too - might have added a bit of irony to the tale - who knows?
I've known of rivalries here on FS that could very well have blown into something like your story. Those battles were years ago - A gun was threatened in one of the feuds, so perhaps a murder was what solved them. Anyway, I believe it's mostly peaceful here these days.
Just a couple of things to mention:
if he was successful[,] Grace (Comma before that proper name.)
easily as one would a well-worn rug from an aged dog. (loved this line)
Great double entendre with the name of the story and the content.
Rose
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Oh my, Dean - I could actually visualize some of the writers on this site, fitting nicely into the scene of your 'fictitious' site's characters. Scary stuff, my friend. The parrot was a nice touch. My Amazon parrot, Tom thought so too. Not many people write much about them. He wanted to know what song the parrot was singing. I think I would have liked that too - might have added a bit of irony to the tale - who knows?
I've known of rivalries here on FS that could very well have blown into something like your story. Those battles were years ago - A gun was threatened in one of the feuds, so perhaps a murder was what solved them. Anyway, I believe it's mostly peaceful here these days.
Just a couple of things to mention:
if he was successful[,] Grace (Comma before that proper name.)
easily as one would a well-worn rug from an aged dog. (loved this line)
Great double entendre with the name of the story and the content.
Rose
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Thanks, Rose. I probably won't win any prizes for this one, but it was fun to write, just the same. I'm so pleased to know that you enjoyed reading it, and I appreciate very much your efforts in doing so and offering your helpful advice on the story. I'm also grateful for your exceptional, generous six star rating. I fully realize we get so few to award our fellow writers here, and I feel very fortunate when I'm lucky enough to receive one myself.
If you would, please read the part about the parrot's song near the end. I gave the song a "voice", based upon your suggestions. Let me know what you think...
Thanks again for reading. I realize it is rather lengthy. :}
~Dean
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A parrot with taste... A different twist - Full of doom and gloom. I was thinking more like a song - like
Bad Boys, Bad boys, what-cha gonna do? What-cha gonna do when they come for you?" My guy Tom likes to sing along, but structured music often fails him. LOL. Rose.
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I have a Quaker Parrot named Isabelle (we call her Izzy for short) who loves to mimic piano music. I try to play piano, but I'm no Mozart, not by a long shot! Still, it was she who inspired the parrot in my story, and she's pretty good at doing the Funeral March...of course, heh-heh. She'll go (imagine this in Parrot's speak), Bwa-ba-da-a-a bwa-a-a...Bwa-ba-da-da-a-a-a... each and every time I play it, which is quite a bit, LOL.
Thanks again!
Hugs... ~Dean ;)
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, they don't get better than this, and if they do it's overkill. It's one of those story lines that been around since the beginning of times, and one that never grows old. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Well, they don't get better than this, and if they do it's overkill. It's one of those story lines that been around since the beginning of times, and one that never grows old. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Thanks so much for taking time out to read and review this rather lengthy post, Ric. Your comments and support are greatly appreciated as always.
~Dean
Comment from ravenblack
So, it is you on those other sites who goes by the moniker " Almond Joy". A great story that sadly seems believable with some of the shenanigans that go around on sites. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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So, it is you on those other sites who goes by the moniker " Almond Joy". A great story that sadly seems believable with some of the shenanigans that go around on sites. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Damn it, Ed! I was hoping no one would be able to figure that out, me portraying a femme fatale on those "other" writing sites. Oh well, my cover's blown now... :)
Thanks very much for your time spent reading and reviewing. Much obliged. ~Dean
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Dean,
I have to admit I guessed the ending, but that didn't take away from the enjoyment of the read. I guess competition can get fierce - or should I say fatal, lol.
Your protagonist was really desperate for success, considering he passed up such a hot woman. But, of course, her sarcastic personality quickly dissolved any initial attraction he might have had.
Keep writing, Dean. I mean that sincerely 'cause I'd rather you write than act out your fantasies, hee hee.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Hi Dean,
I have to admit I guessed the ending, but that didn't take away from the enjoyment of the read. I guess competition can get fierce - or should I say fatal, lol.
Your protagonist was really desperate for success, considering he passed up such a hot woman. But, of course, her sarcastic personality quickly dissolved any initial attraction he might have had.
Keep writing, Dean. I mean that sincerely 'cause I'd rather you write than act out your fantasies, hee hee.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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I'll endeavor to try, Lou. Although, as far as you know, I may have already acted out some of my fantasies. Hard to tell, for sure...
Mich obliged. ~Dean
Comment from Treischel
We'll it certainly does give you pause for thought, doesn't it? I did suspect the switch, but not all the associated theatrics that were involved. The use of the publisher as an irresistible hook was very clever. An here I am drinking my coffee.
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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We'll it certainly does give you pause for thought, doesn't it? I did suspect the switch, but not all the associated theatrics that were involved. The use of the publisher as an irresistible hook was very clever. An here I am drinking my coffee.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Heh, me too, Tom.
Thanks very much for having a run at this one. It's appreciated. ~Dean
Comment from NicciFaye
Dean...I swear this seems sooooo close to home...lol....the plot and background was pretty crazy. The crazyness people do in order to be famous or at the top in the lead. Great story. Bruce was certain he got her just to find out the only person got was Bruce!
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Dean...I swear this seems sooooo close to home...lol....the plot and background was pretty crazy. The crazyness people do in order to be famous or at the top in the lead. Great story. Bruce was certain he got her just to find out the only person got was Bruce!
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Yeah, well, it might be just a little close to home, Nicci, LOL.
Hey, thanks a million for the six stars, and for taking time out to read such a lengthy story. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
~Dean
Comment from Sis Cat
Well, I got to give you a six. This is exceptional horror writing that parodies FanStory rivalry in a worst case scenario way. The moment Bruce slipped Grace a mickie I knew it will come back to bite him. Nevertheless, I enjoyed the journey to a killer (pun intended) ending. Sharp dialogue, rivalry, and jealousy pulled me into your story that makes fun of jealousy among writers. Your story is highly cinematic because I can see the characters. The length also invited me to dig deeper into the characters. Your story shows great craftsmanship.
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Well, I got to give you a six. This is exceptional horror writing that parodies FanStory rivalry in a worst case scenario way. The moment Bruce slipped Grace a mickie I knew it will come back to bite him. Nevertheless, I enjoyed the journey to a killer (pun intended) ending. Sharp dialogue, rivalry, and jealousy pulled me into your story that makes fun of jealousy among writers. Your story is highly cinematic because I can see the characters. The length also invited me to dig deeper into the characters. Your story shows great craftsmanship.
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Thanks very much Sis cat, and I'm very glad to know the rich character development I hoped would come through in this story really worked for you. It is exactly the reason I focused on just the two players, mainly. Glenn did make a very brief appearance near the end. I wanted readers to focus on the intimacy between the two, so I'm glad it worked...for you, anyhow, LOL.
Thank you for your generous rating of six stars, and your kind and thoughtful comments. I sincerely appreciate it!
~Dean :)
