I Have A Magic Ship
Welcome aboard my lovely28 total reviews
Comment from krys123
TK;
-A marvelous and imaginative piece of poetry that is truly inventive and ingeniously creative throughout this resourceful writing.
-Very good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Superb imagery which is clear, distinct and definitively expressive and vividly descriptive throughout your writing: "If you have no money Please do not despair For this is a magic ship There'll never be a fare".
-Exceptional rhyming, where each of the rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line, therefore making the rhythm clear, fluid and smoothly written.
-Rhythmic meter was mixed in variable but spot on and the cadence, tempo and timing made the reading very clear and easy.
-I really enjoyed this metaphorically written piece of poetry where you have out did yourself with imagination and resourcefulness.
-Thank you for sharing and posting this TK and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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TK;
-A marvelous and imaginative piece of poetry that is truly inventive and ingeniously creative throughout this resourceful writing.
-Very good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Superb imagery which is clear, distinct and definitively expressive and vividly descriptive throughout your writing: "If you have no money Please do not despair For this is a magic ship There'll never be a fare".
-Exceptional rhyming, where each of the rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line, therefore making the rhythm clear, fluid and smoothly written.
-Rhythmic meter was mixed in variable but spot on and the cadence, tempo and timing made the reading very clear and easy.
-I really enjoyed this metaphorically written piece of poetry where you have out did yourself with imagination and resourcefulness.
-Thank you for sharing and posting this TK and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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Thank you so much Alex...I am glad you took the time to come aboard my Magic Ship..You are welcome to board anytime..Remember the only fare is a smile..
tk
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You are so welcome. TK
Comment from Ronni
Well, now this the neatest 'come aboard' to your 'magic ship' I have ever
been invited to! Let me say, your boarding message is quite enticing!
Who could refuse such a fabulous ship adventure, with imaginations
lure, free fare, and just let anticipations run galore! Heart grew younger
and younger longer I stayed aboard! Allowing the sea of words ripple
enchantingly through head and heard, so exhilarating. No way to ever
be board! The magic and mystery sails happily on evermore!
Thanks for the invite! Loved poem and entire presentation!
Blessings and best wishes, Ronni
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Well, now this the neatest 'come aboard' to your 'magic ship' I have ever
been invited to! Let me say, your boarding message is quite enticing!
Who could refuse such a fabulous ship adventure, with imaginations
lure, free fare, and just let anticipations run galore! Heart grew younger
and younger longer I stayed aboard! Allowing the sea of words ripple
enchantingly through head and heard, so exhilarating. No way to ever
be board! The magic and mystery sails happily on evermore!
Thanks for the invite! Loved poem and entire presentation!
Blessings and best wishes, Ronni
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Thank you so much Ronni for awarding me the great green 6 ...I am so happy that you came aboard and had such a pleasant journey..You are welcome on my ship anytime ..
tk
Comment from TAB_that's me
I'll be there tk when the ship sets sail. No problems or cares only happiness sounds great to me. Lovely, well written poem.
teresa
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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I'll be there tk when the ship sets sail. No problems or cares only happiness sounds great to me. Lovely, well written poem.
teresa
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Thank you so much for coming aboard Lady T. I hope you enjoyed the journey and you are welcome to board my magic ship anytime!!!
tk
Comment from nomi338
Book me passage right away. I shall join you and maybe never come back. to sail over the ocean, any ocean real or only imagined, I am more than ready. Do not worry all baggage will have been divested before I ever attempt to board. Only good times are ahead while troubles and worries remain behind us. Great idea, great rendering.
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Book me passage right away. I shall join you and maybe never come back. to sail over the ocean, any ocean real or only imagined, I am more than ready. Do not worry all baggage will have been divested before I ever attempt to board. Only good times are ahead while troubles and worries remain behind us. Great idea, great rendering.
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Thank you so much Sir Nomi..I am glad you came aboard and enjoyed the cruise..You are welcome aboard my ships anytime
tk
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Nicely written.
Flow and meter are spot on and make it easy to read.
Rhyme and rhythm are excellent and the magical storytelling is unique.
Very good piece
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Nicely written.
Flow and meter are spot on and make it easy to read.
Rhyme and rhythm are excellent and the magical storytelling is unique.
Very good piece
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Thank you so much Lady B..I am glad you came aboard and enjoyed the cruise..You are welcome aboard my ships anytime
tk
Comment from angelface2
Oh, TK, I do so love this. The picture is perfect! You have a wonderful imagination and I love Mary's place!!! Your rhythm and rhymes are all so good in this poem. I have one suggestion.. It is only me maybe, but I think the line.. This all will be tested.. feels to me like a tongue twister. It seems to read better saying, this will all be tested.. But it is your poem. Do what you think best. This deserves a 6 and I am glad I now have more to give! :>D Miss Sally
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Oh, TK, I do so love this. The picture is perfect! You have a wonderful imagination and I love Mary's place!!! Your rhythm and rhymes are all so good in this poem. I have one suggestion.. It is only me maybe, but I think the line.. This all will be tested.. feels to me like a tongue twister. It seems to read better saying, this will all be tested.. But it is your poem. Do what you think best. This deserves a 6 and I am glad I now have more to give! :>D Miss Sally
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Thank you so much Lady Sally and you are so right on with the change..I see what you mean..Thank you so much for that. Makeing change now
Aloha and Hula hugs from the Big Island of Hawaii!!
tk
Comment from kiwijenny
Only thing requested
That you be young at heart
This all will be tested
Before we can depart
I wonder what this test entails....I hope I pass I'm very immature
God bless
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Only thing requested
That you be young at heart
This all will be tested
Before we can depart
I wonder what this test entails....I hope I pass I'm very immature
God bless
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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He he so am I that's why I wrote that way..Thanks for taking the time to come aboard Miss Jenny
tk
Comment from pharp
Excellent job my friend, I have been to Mary Place enjoyed it, now I am ready to board this magic ship. Beautifully penned. As always I enjoy reading your poems. You are very talented. Thanks for sharing. P harp
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Excellent job my friend, I have been to Mary Place enjoyed it, now I am ready to board this magic ship. Beautifully penned. As always I enjoy reading your poems. You are very talented. Thanks for sharing. P harp
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Thank you so very much Pharp...I am glad you crossed the bridge to Mary's Place with as well as boarding my Magic Ship You are welcome to either one anytime you like !!
tk
Comment from Jackarrie
I really enjoyed reading your poem, It is obvious you let your imagination flow freely to produce this well-written poem. I would love to step aboard for a trip.
Not sure what you mean by visiting Mary's Place.
Mary
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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I really enjoyed reading your poem, It is obvious you let your imagination flow freely to produce this well-written poem. I would love to step aboard for a trip.
Not sure what you mean by visiting Mary's Place.
Mary
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Thank yoy very much Jacarrie..I posted a prose called Mary's Place a few days ago...Take a look and you will know just what Mary's Place is all about
hugs
tk
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I will, I am catching up on a lot as I have not been on FS for a month. Mary
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hey, TK...
You're giving 'Mary's Place' a workout! (*<*)
Stowing your baggage reminded me of the song by Chris Ledoux - Five Dollar Fine For Whining. If you haven't heard it, check it out on YouTube. Even if you don't like country, this is a cool song.
Enjoyed your poem. Super artwork as well. Have a great day... Aloha, my friend!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Hey, TK...
You're giving 'Mary's Place' a workout! (*<*)
Stowing your baggage reminded me of the song by Chris Ledoux - Five Dollar Fine For Whining. If you haven't heard it, check it out on YouTube. Even if you don't like country, this is a cool song.
Enjoyed your poem. Super artwork as well. Have a great day... Aloha, my friend!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Thank you much Jax I wil check it out as I am just a country bumpkin...I am glad you came aboard and enjoyed the cruise..You are welcome aboard my ships anytime
tk
