Christine's Poems
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Comment from Day Z Chayn
What's not to fear is that you have the freedom to gaze into Life's mirror and still remember who you are. I'm looking after an aging parent with memory loss/dementia which could turn into fully-blown Alzheimer's disease some day.
The mirror ought be used here as a time machine; a form of time-travel. The mirror doesn't necessarily slow or stop time completely; rather it encapsulates your most favorite or horrific moments and then in turn enfolds them around you.
Blessings,
Shane
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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What's not to fear is that you have the freedom to gaze into Life's mirror and still remember who you are. I'm looking after an aging parent with memory loss/dementia which could turn into fully-blown Alzheimer's disease some day.
The mirror ought be used here as a time machine; a form of time-travel. The mirror doesn't necessarily slow or stop time completely; rather it encapsulates your most favorite or horrific moments and then in turn enfolds them around you.
Blessings,
Shane
Comment Written 22-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Thanks you for reading my poem and yes your comments are quite true .it must be terrible not to even know who you are with diseases such as dementia etc. the mirror is very reflective of your life's journey. I am still happy with who I am despite my ageing processes. With thanks Cheers Christine😊
Comment from pharp
Beautifully penned. I enjoyed this read from the beginning to the ending. The flow and rhyming was just perfect. Did not see any errors. This poem perfect in every way. I think I will stay out of the mirror for awhile. Thanks for sharing. Pharp
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Beautifully penned. I enjoyed this read from the beginning to the ending. The flow and rhyming was just perfect. Did not see any errors. This poem perfect in every way. I think I will stay out of the mirror for awhile. Thanks for sharing. Pharp
Comment Written 13-May-2015
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Thanks for your great feedback I wrote this one day a few years back when I was feeling old and reflected back to my youth I wonder what the future will hold out. Cheers Christine
Comment from Lesley Collier
A beautifully written poem on the process of aging in though our spirit inside remains young we see the growing signs of age in the mirror and long for the fresh young dew of youth we still fell inside us. I am sure many people can relate to this as we try to age gracefully in spite of the creeping signs of ancient memories! Nicely flowing and well rhymed!
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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A beautifully written poem on the process of aging in though our spirit inside remains young we see the growing signs of age in the mirror and long for the fresh young dew of youth we still fell inside us. I am sure many people can relate to this as we try to age gracefully in spite of the creeping signs of ancient memories! Nicely flowing and well rhymed!
Comment Written 13-May-2015
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Thank you very much for the lovely feedback I wrote this one day when I was feeling "old" and really don't enjoy getting older so I did a reflection of my life and that is how it turned out I hope I can learn from this site also Cheers Christine
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Should be a space between "mirror" and "whose". "Whose" should be "who's". Space should be between "hair" and "how". Comma should be after "red". Comma between "reclaim" and "her". Space between "lips" and has". Comma after "seek" and not before "before". Comma should be after "come" and not before "that". Comma not needed after "I". Space between "certain" and "we". Did you proofread this before posting it? All these really distract from the poem and what you are trying to say. They also indicate careless proofreading is a sign of sloppy writing to some people who may read this.
reply by the author on 13-May-2015
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Should be a space between "mirror" and "whose". "Whose" should be "who's". Space should be between "hair" and "how". Comma should be after "red". Comma between "reclaim" and "her". Space between "lips" and has". Comma after "seek" and not before "before". Comma should be after "come" and not before "that". Comma not needed after "I". Space between "certain" and "we". Did you proofread this before posting it? All these really distract from the poem and what you are trying to say. They also indicate careless proofreading is a sign of sloppy writing to some people who may read this.
Comment Written 13-May-2015
reply by the author on 13-May-2015
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Thank you for your feedback I shall revise the poem an corrects mistakes , I just write from the feel of the words and would appreciate critical appraisals of my poetry and tips as you have sent I love writing poetry but need help setting it out
Cheers Christine
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Let me know when you have and I will be glad to re-review it for you.
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Hi Brett, I have revied my original poem I had typed when I wrote this in 2009 and have found that I had actually made most ( not all of the commas and spaces etc) so that was good to find out and I will correct the others especially who's . No excuse for posting this as it was but this is my first time using this site as I have just found it tonight and will be more mindful to ensure to proof read other ones I send so once again thank you
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Welcome aboard and keep writing.
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Thanks and will do. Cheers Christine
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem gives a clear progression of age in this woman's memory. She still remembers all her stages and wonders when she won't. The fear all of us have.
I like the metaphor at the end of life being a book with pages we can turn.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 13-May-2015
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This poem gives a clear progression of age in this woman's memory. She still remembers all her stages and wonders when she won't. The fear all of us have.
I like the metaphor at the end of life being a book with pages we can turn.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 13-May-2015
reply by the author on 13-May-2015
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Thanks very much I appreciate you feedback.
