Pollutants
The cause of the changes in the environment.42 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
haiku
-follows the -5-7-5 format
-it's focused on a brief moment in time
-has provocative image
- it can be read in one breath
-sense of sudden enlightenment
-writen in a present tense
-excellent simplicity
-convined 2 images or ideas divided by a justaposition
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
haiku
-follows the -5-7-5 format
-it's focused on a brief moment in time
-has provocative image
- it can be read in one breath
-sense of sudden enlightenment
-writen in a present tense
-excellent simplicity
-convined 2 images or ideas divided by a justaposition
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thanks for the five stars and the comment. This was the only image on FanArtReview that was close to what I wanted. I didn't want to down industry because they aren't the only places that pollutes the air.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This meets the contest criteria as to form and syllable count and it addresses a subject of current interest. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
This meets the contest criteria as to form and syllable count and it addresses a subject of current interest. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thanks for the five stars and comment.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Short, sweet, and right to an easy to follow story line that touches on a very big problem being faced today. Well done. Picture illustrates this message well. Write on.
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
Short, sweet, and right to an easy to follow story line that touches on a very big problem being faced today. Well done. Picture illustrates this message well. Write on.
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thank you for the five stars and comment.
Comment from Praise000
Good day,
You have managed to say a lot in a few words
and three lines.
"Pollutants...Indoors or outdoors
Unhealthy..." All the best. Praise000
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
Good day,
You have managed to say a lot in a few words
and three lines.
"Pollutants...Indoors or outdoors
Unhealthy..." All the best. Praise000
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thank you for the five stars and comment. I had another way to go but I read that not only is in the air outside be on the inside as well.
Comment from CR Delport
It is so sad how we humans contaminate and pollute this beautiful planet of ours. I fear for my children's children. They might suffer the consequences of our arrogance. This is well done.
Take care.
Christelle.
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
It is so sad how we humans contaminate and pollute this beautiful planet of ours. I fear for my children's children. They might suffer the consequences of our arrogance. This is well done.
Take care.
Christelle.
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thank you for the five stars and comment.
Comment from kriver
Hi
This is a good contest entry.
Good imagery with the picture.
The word choice is good.
It is directly to the point.
The statement's point is
obvious to the reader.
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
Hi
This is a good contest entry.
Good imagery with the picture.
The word choice is good.
It is directly to the point.
The statement's point is
obvious to the reader.
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thank you for the five stars and comment.
Comment from cbat
Your poem is strikingly true, if it were not it would be funny.
You get straight to the truth.
Also this hopefully draws attention to the problem.
Great words!
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
Your poem is strikingly true, if it were not it would be funny.
You get straight to the truth.
Also this hopefully draws attention to the problem.
Great words!
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thanks for the five stars and comment.
Comment from royowen
A really good socially aware 3/5/3 air entry in this poetry contest. There's really not much can be done with such a short discipline, but this is quite good, nice artwork too! Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
A really good socially aware 3/5/3 air entry in this poetry contest. There's really not much can be done with such a short discipline, but this is quite good, nice artwork too! Well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thank you for your five stars and comment.
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My pleasure.
Comment from rspoet
You've written a fine 3-5-3 poem
The syllable count is spot on
It addresses the topic well
Sends a great message
Great photograph to poem match
Good luck in the contest
Excellent
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
You've written a fine 3-5-3 poem
The syllable count is spot on
It addresses the topic well
Sends a great message
Great photograph to poem match
Good luck in the contest
Excellent
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thank your for the five stars and comment.
Comment from pharp
Profound statements can be made with very words, and you penned this 3-5-3 poem syllable count spot on. Excellent job, message received. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
Profound statements can be made with very words, and you penned this 3-5-3 poem syllable count spot on. Excellent job, message received. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Thank you for the five stars and comment.