Comment from Benny Beeharry

Excellent

You have got a point there. The pollution is not only outside, but also inside the house where so much detergent is used.
A great idea and a great of telling that truth.
Benny Beeharry

 Comment Written 13-May-2015

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reply by the author on 13-May-2015

Thank you for the five stars and comment.

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Yes polluted air is unhealthy, but pollutants strike water and soil as bad as the atmosphere. However, since I am no judge, and since the 3/5/3 is gospel truth,
excellent.

 Comment Written 13-May-2015

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reply by the author on 13-May-2015

Thank you for the five stars and comment.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is a great 3-5-3 air poem with the perfect syllable count. You speak the truth in this:) Good luck to you.
Teresa

 Comment Written 13-May-2015

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reply by the author on 13-May-2015

Thank you for the five stars and comment.

Comment from jim lawler

Excellent

You verse meets the qualifications and reads like one continious sentence; which I think is good. Some works Are jerky and flows unsmoothly and makes for incongruous I didn't see any typos and it needs no revision. Good luck and god bless. Jim.

 Comment Written 13-May-2015

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reply by the author on 13-May-2015

Thank you for the five stars and comment.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

The artwork is beautiful except for the air filled with pollution
It's not getting better each year it's get worst. just how much can our lungs take.
You did a great write.
Cookie

 Comment Written 13-May-2015

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reply by the author on 13-May-2015

Thank you for the five stars and comment.

reply by misscookie on 15-May-2015

You're very welcome, have a blessed weekend.
Cookie

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

No doubt! We are slowly killing our planet, our home. Once we do detroy the oceans, the air and the soil, then what? Are we gonna make seven year trips to colonize Mars? Why should we be allowed to screw up another planet, one far worse off than Earth?

I just don't get mankind sometimes...

Great message, good syllable count.
Good luck! ~Dean

 Comment Written 12-May-2015

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reply by the author on 13-May-2015

Thank you for the five stars and comment. This not a joking matter as you know, but in humor to what you wrote one can say if we mess this one up, we'll get another one. I knew it was serious but I didn't realize until I started reading
of how serious it is. It seems there is a dark side of progress.

reply by Dean Kuch on 13-May-2015

I believe there is a dark side to everything.
You're very welcome... ;)
~Dean

Comment from Alan K Pease

Excellent

A short but poignant statement about pollution - indoors or outdoor. Good luck in the writing prompt. You might be interested in a poem I just have posted - about what I saw in China and their pollution problems as researched afterwards.

 Comment Written 12-May-2015

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reply by the author on 12-May-2015

Thank you for the five stars and comment. I noticed when I was searching for my work that you had one about pollution. Before I worked on my 3-6-3 I found in the web information about pollution.
Outdoors and indoors, for instance, indoors have smoke, chemicals and etc. to pollute the air making a person unhealthy in time.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

This is an ok entry for this particular writing prompt dear friend!
It is slightly all over the place and doesn't really hit the mark only in my humble opinion.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck with the contest!
Blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 12-May-2015

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reply by the author on 12-May-2015

Thanks for the five stars and comment. I looked on the web found that pollutants can be in your home as well.
They can be from chemicals or a system you have in your home that throws out air.
And to summarize it, indoors or outdoors it is unhealthy to breath such air.

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Certainly a true statement and the syllable count is fine I just didn't have to take my boots off. but is it air? In part certainly, outdoors. Indoors? Of course. We couldn't breathe otherwise. That's all right then. Excellent!

 Comment Written 12-May-2015

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reply by the author on 12-May-2015

Thanks for the five stars and the comment.

Comment from Chris Tee

Excellent

I have just read another entry and this poem is also great and on per with the other. Well done with this entry and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-May-2015

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reply by the author on 12-May-2015

Thanks for the five stars and the comment.