When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Wedding Preparations "A family's love is tested.
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Comment from I am Cat
Nichole is beautiful!
(but then, I'd expect no less) ;)
Well... I thought for a moment that he was
going to work out... and then... not so much
A wedding under $5000? Can you get her to
come here before June? My daughter is getting
married,... I've already spent $3000 on the dress!
:(
Lol
Here we go!
Cat
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Nichole is beautiful!
(but then, I'd expect no less) ;)
Well... I thought for a moment that he was
going to work out... and then... not so much
A wedding under $5000? Can you get her to
come here before June? My daughter is getting
married,... I've already spent $3000 on the dress!
:(
Lol
Here we go!
Cat
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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There's an advantage to not having a lot of money to spend on children. Nichole learned how to be frugal. Wish I could say the same for my daughter-in-law.
Comment from w.j.debi
At last a wedding is on the horizon and your daughter is including you in some of the fun of it. It sounds like you taught her well when it comes to thrift. It sounds like Jeff was at least trying to make a good impression, but you hint that will not last.
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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At last a wedding is on the horizon and your daughter is including you in some of the fun of it. It sounds like you taught her well when it comes to thrift. It sounds like Jeff was at least trying to make a good impression, but you hint that will not last.
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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I'm still trying to give him a chance to make a good impression. LOL
Comment from Tatarka2
I'm enjoying following this story. I know it's auto-biographical, and I think that makes it harder to write, because it's so much more difficult to be objective (I know, I've tried it). My suggestion for this chapter, humbly offered, as always, would be to pull it together more around a theme; it seems to wander a bit. For instance, what if you were to begin with a scene of scooping out pumpkins (yuck1) while, in your head, you're reflecting on Nichole's thrift, Jeff's lack of gainful employment that necessitates that thrift, etc. Then, maybe you could have an exchange of dialogue with Nichole and/or Jeff that would describe your relationship with them, both as it is now and how it was with Nichole before Jeff. Just some idle thoughts. . I think this is a great story, and I'm glad you're sharing it with all of us.
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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I'm enjoying following this story. I know it's auto-biographical, and I think that makes it harder to write, because it's so much more difficult to be objective (I know, I've tried it). My suggestion for this chapter, humbly offered, as always, would be to pull it together more around a theme; it seems to wander a bit. For instance, what if you were to begin with a scene of scooping out pumpkins (yuck1) while, in your head, you're reflecting on Nichole's thrift, Jeff's lack of gainful employment that necessitates that thrift, etc. Then, maybe you could have an exchange of dialogue with Nichole and/or Jeff that would describe your relationship with them, both as it is now and how it was with Nichole before Jeff. Just some idle thoughts. . I think this is a great story, and I'm glad you're sharing it with all of us.
Comment Written 14-May-2015
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Appreciate your ideas. They are good ones. More dialogue between me and Jeff. I'll keep that in mind. (My daughter will "kill" me if you knew I were writing this.)
Comment from Muffins
Strong personalities always knock heads and that seems to happen when you, your daughter and Jeff share space. Jeff doesn't sound like a loser anymore just arrogant and inpatient. " After graduating, Jeff enrolled in film school but quit after three months, convinced he knew everything." This actions says " I want it now, the hell with wanting to learn, so I can earn. If you had said, he quit after a year, that wouldn't appear so bad. Despite all of that, he clicks in Nichole's heart, so what's a mother in law to do?
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Strong personalities always knock heads and that seems to happen when you, your daughter and Jeff share space. Jeff doesn't sound like a loser anymore just arrogant and inpatient. " After graduating, Jeff enrolled in film school but quit after three months, convinced he knew everything." This actions says " I want it now, the hell with wanting to learn, so I can earn. If you had said, he quit after a year, that wouldn't appear so bad. Despite all of that, he clicks in Nichole's heart, so what's a mother in law to do?
Comment Written 14-May-2015
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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I like your take on this. Nichole too didn't want to pay the dues, but at least she was smart enough to see her own flaw.
Comment from kriver
Hi,
I enjoyed reading this chapter.
Some of it was pretty funny.
The dialogue interaction was good
and flowed well throughout the write.
The scene descriptions were very clear.
The narration of the story
easily held my interest.
Over all it is a good piece.
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Hi,
I enjoyed reading this chapter.
Some of it was pretty funny.
The dialogue interaction was good
and flowed well throughout the write.
The scene descriptions were very clear.
The narration of the story
easily held my interest.
Over all it is a good piece.
Comment Written 14-May-2015
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Thanks, Kriver. Always good to see a new reviewer. I'm glad it held your interest in spite of being part of a whole.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. Ah, the story continues. I am sad for you that what could have been a fresh start...got soured. But looks as though their life was a bit of a spin. It sounds like you tried and opened..and then.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Hi. Ah, the story continues. I am sad for you that what could have been a fresh start...got soured. But looks as though their life was a bit of a spin. It sounds like you tried and opened..and then.
padumachitta
Comment Written 14-May-2015
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Well, I'm going to take the blame. I was older and should have known better. Sigh...
Comment from abbasjoy
Well, so Jeff and Nicole are finally getting married. Hats off to him for buying the ring and trying to make an 'honest' woman of her after five years:) It's a wonder she stuck with him for that long.
I was just beginning to think that everything was hunky dory, when puff.. the magical moment just went up in smoke.
What on earth did you say, to cause such a commotion?
Can't wait to hear it from the horses mouth.
Good read.
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Well, so Jeff and Nicole are finally getting married. Hats off to him for buying the ring and trying to make an 'honest' woman of her after five years:) It's a wonder she stuck with him for that long.
I was just beginning to think that everything was hunky dory, when puff.. the magical moment just went up in smoke.
What on earth did you say, to cause such a commotion?
Can't wait to hear it from the horses mouth.
Good read.
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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So many years have passed that I now can see both sides. I acted badly too, I'm ashamed to admit.
Comment from judiverse
I was surprised that Nichole and Jeff had a big wedding. Doesn't seem like something that would appeal to him. Interesting description of their apartment. It's really something that Halloween was the day for the big event. (I know of a couple who re-married on Halloween. It didn't take that time, either.) They seemed to know some ins and outs about having things done cheaply. Jeff seems notable for his acquaintances and contacts--not that they were of much help to him. You have a great story about actors struggling to make it. judi
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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I was surprised that Nichole and Jeff had a big wedding. Doesn't seem like something that would appeal to him. Interesting description of their apartment. It's really something that Halloween was the day for the big event. (I know of a couple who re-married on Halloween. It didn't take that time, either.) They seemed to know some ins and outs about having things done cheaply. Jeff seems notable for his acquaintances and contacts--not that they were of much help to him. You have a great story about actors struggling to make it. judi
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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The wedding was fantastic, certainly memorable. Jeff did have some connections, but not with the head honchos. I guess in Hollywood, it's every person for himself.
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No wonder so many people give up on trying to achieve Hollywood stardom. judi
Comment from IndianaIrish
Great descriptions of the apartment and wedding plans, Shari. I'm surprised she didn't want a black wedding dress. Lol. You mention ion the landlady didn't want to lose them after twelve years...I thought they were there for five? I look forward to what happens next.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Great descriptions of the apartment and wedding plans, Shari. I'm surprised she didn't want a black wedding dress. Lol. You mention ion the landlady didn't want to lose them after twelve years...I thought they were there for five? I look forward to what happens next.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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I rewrote that part to make it clearer. They lived there after being married and finally, had the money to buy a condo three years ago. Real estate prices are unbelievable in the area.
Comment from Leen1
Wow! Another bumpy ride in another installment of this interesting life memoir. No matter, it has the power to hold the reader captivated and awaiting the next pages. Thank you for sharing this difficult part of your life.
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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Wow! Another bumpy ride in another installment of this interesting life memoir. No matter, it has the power to hold the reader captivated and awaiting the next pages. Thank you for sharing this difficult part of your life.
Comment Written 12-May-2015
reply by the author on 12-May-2015
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I appreciate that you mentioned the difficult part. Wait until I post the next chapter! Hubby and I came close to walking out of her life before the big event.
