Act of Endurance
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47 total reviews
Comment from koolaid228
I truly enjoyed reading this piece, it had everything, I felt like a passenger as well,I was feeling it all, I was even getting a little sea sick, You had me looking for the Purser to ask what deck my cabin was on. great job my friend! koolaid228
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2016
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I truly enjoyed reading this piece, it had everything, I felt like a passenger as well,I was feeling it all, I was even getting a little sea sick, You had me looking for the Purser to ask what deck my cabin was on. great job my friend! koolaid228
Comment Written 25-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2016
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Glad the pits didn't compromise the effort. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements about this write.
Comment from hugje96
This is a really good effort. i find some areas a little disjointed...this may have been done purposefully to add to the hasty character is some areas but personally i would have liked to see a more united pharsing. This is just my opinion and i am no more or less...just another writer...and we all know you can't please everybody
Keep up the good work
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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This is a really good effort. i find some areas a little disjointed...this may have been done purposefully to add to the hasty character is some areas but personally i would have liked to see a more united pharsing. This is just my opinion and i am no more or less...just another writer...and we all know you can't please everybody
Keep up the good work
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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I feel like you about my review talents great for me most items I've seen are nicely arranged and excel. I feel intent is more attractive in cases. Thanking you for generous rate and inspiring thoughts.
Comment from P1
i love free verse and i can
never hear enough about the titanic
it's a thing with me hungry for information
this is well written and i enjoyed it and
it should do well in the contest
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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i love free verse and i can
never hear enough about the titanic
it's a thing with me hungry for information
this is well written and i enjoyed it and
it should do well in the contest
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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Past tense and no for contest.Piece presented not quite as pounded upon as this revision you read. But the true test is union of hearts which illustrates a common interests. Thanking you for generous rate and inspiring thoughts.
Comment from harleyangelbrat
Your poem is descriptive and expressive. It describes in detail the story of the Titanic, which has always interested me. I love the old movies of Titanic and I like the newer version even though it has an added fairy tale. You did a great job of telling the true event. I really enjoyed reading this very much. God bless you!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Your poem is descriptive and expressive. It describes in detail the story of the Titanic, which has always interested me. I love the old movies of Titanic and I like the newer version even though it has an added fairy tale. You did a great job of telling the true event. I really enjoyed reading this very much. God bless you!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Glad this work rang a bell to an interesting historical event, a truly sad occurrence, as in this work definition a challenge against God. Way too generous rate but beloved comments pleasing.
Comment from Joyce Long
What a tragedy. Your poem begins with all the fun of boarding the ship with friends and family. Then it ends with the tragedy of looking for those same people. That would be beyond words.
The fun looked forward to as they board the ship certainly is a fun time. We have taken several cruises and praise God have enjoyed the complete trip.
You certainly have a way with words as you write your poetry.
Very well done.
Joyce 10-16-15
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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What a tragedy. Your poem begins with all the fun of boarding the ship with friends and family. Then it ends with the tragedy of looking for those same people. That would be beyond words.
The fun looked forward to as they board the ship certainly is a fun time. We have taken several cruises and praise God have enjoyed the complete trip.
You certainly have a way with words as you write your poetry.
Very well done.
Joyce 10-16-15
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thanking you for generous rate and charming thoughts. I,ve been told English is my second language. I'm on the crazy madman view.
Comment from Patricia Dsouza
Your writing is remarkable and refined. I value the way you progress and flow throughout. You have remarkably brilliant skills.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Your writing is remarkable and refined. I value the way you progress and flow throughout. You have remarkably brilliant skills.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Boy. I wish I could have your vision and insights. All a fight for me. Still I loved your response. Thanking you for generous rate and insights.
Comment from quashdog
Excellent! I loved your retelling of the sinking of the Titanic is such lovely verse. It had all the elements of a great poem.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Excellent! I loved your retelling of the sinking of the Titanic is such lovely verse. It had all the elements of a great poem.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Thanking you for generous rate and inspiring thoughts.
Comment from ellie6
It must have been horrific. A stampede for the lifeboats, terrified passengers wakened from a deep sleep, This mighty unsinkable vessel proved to have feet of clay.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015
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It must have been horrific. A stampede for the lifeboats, terrified passengers wakened from a deep sleep, This mighty unsinkable vessel proved to have feet of clay.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015
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The lack of boats for escape and them not being motor driven states much. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating thoughts.
Comment from Jacob Collins
I thought that this was a nicely written piece, TPAC, you captured the excitement of boarding the ship well. I thought that your writing flowed well and I couldn't find any faults. Thanks for sharing...Jacob
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015
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I thought that this was a nicely written piece, TPAC, you captured the excitement of boarding the ship well. I thought that your writing flowed well and I couldn't find any faults. Thanks for sharing...Jacob
Comment Written 15-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015
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Unique statements indeed. No faults. How I wish it was so. Yet I thank you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from Glasstruth
This shows how life can easily disappear overnight, and that every moment is precious. You tell a good story in verse. All too real. Well crafted. Les
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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This shows how life can easily disappear overnight, and that every moment is precious. You tell a good story in verse. All too real. Well crafted. Les
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
Coming from you sir a great accomplishment indeed, I feel still too generous in rating but I have learnt much from the work I read of yours, inspiring great things in which I now give you my thanks
