Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Amazing start but then you start pulling nails from heart Throwing anger bits but loosing original rip I love the poem and its aim intent, but revision could make thing blossom Thanking you for sharing

 Comment Written 08-May-2015

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Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This poem has that country song quality of moaning and heartbreak. It captures some of that hurt one gets when the trust is gone, the tryst is on, and the idea dawns that you two are through (I ought to write that down).

 Comment Written 08-May-2015

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Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

What an eerie mocking tone the repetition gives! There is such sadness in the hollow sham of a one-sided marriage, where love is not returned. The comfort of a beckoning bottle is a complete but short-lived answer that can soon become a love affair as tragic as the first. What an extremely powerful poem.

 Comment Written 08-May-2015

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Comment from bayforesthimankush

Excellent

This poem is about love for one who may have other lover too. The two faces of one lover; one for him and one for other. This way love is lost and love is gained when together.

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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Comment from kriver

Excellent

Hi,
This write has good expressive lyrics.
The piece seems to flow well.
It seems to have a good
even rhythmic cadence
that fits it well.
The rhyming pattern is smooth.
Over all it is very good.

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This is excellent. I like the sassy tone of it and the double repetition is done very well in each stanza. You have expressed yourself well here. Great job!

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

I like the last stanza of this piece. It gives your love a chance at redemption and the opportunity to learn from the experience in such a way as to be able to come back. This piece captured my heart. Not many do. thanks for that. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi...

Excellent take on how love goes wrong but not strong enough to give up, though it's futile to hang on.

Love your repetitive lines. They fit very well. Strong entry. Good luck.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

I believe it was Sidney Sheldon who wrote the book, The Mirror Has Two Faces.. I like the quote. This is a great poem, and fits the writing prompts quite well
I wish you nothing but great luck in the contest.
This reads like a great country song.. .
I have the feeling you've written many before this
:)
Cat

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 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

really well done. This is brilliant, and a very strong contender in this contest. This is a tale of forbidden love, with the lady already married. It was doomed to fail. I love the repeating lines, they finish each stanza perfectly. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra

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 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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