Act of Endurance
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Comment from William Ross
Nicely written free verse on an old widow and here daily and nightly ruteen . Nicely done on this, thanks for the share and have a great day.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
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Nicely written free verse on an old widow and here daily and nightly ruteen . Nicely done on this, thanks for the share and have a great day.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
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Glad aspects of this write was found pleasing and held some interest. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Nika2016
Love it! You tell the story of her life in few words, but so many images! She sits in shadow like a boulder...rests by the window each night looking out...but never say..at what...the world awakens with her hands in soil and the neighborhood loves her...Great poem..TPAC...
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
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Love it! You tell the story of her life in few words, but so many images! She sits in shadow like a boulder...rests by the window each night looking out...but never say..at what...the world awakens with her hands in soil and the neighborhood loves her...Great poem..TPAC...
Comment Written 26-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
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Please this write was found somewhat smooth in its given conveyance. Glad aspects of its content attracted interest. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating views about this work.
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a very peculiar poem that attracted me because of its uniqueness. I know nothing about poetry, so can you tell me if this is a specific poetic form?
I felt very sorry for your character and her loneliness. You made her seem very real.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
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This is a very peculiar poem that attracted me because of its uniqueness. I know nothing about poetry, so can you tell me if this is a specific poetic form?
I felt very sorry for your character and her loneliness. You made her seem very real.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
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This is my quest at Fan Story are these notes poems. Like you these pieces hold a doubt about their poetic structure: yet they seem appealing to readers. Glad you were captured in its presented aims that they reached the reader. Thanking you for generous rate and touching sentiments.
Comment from Dean Kuch
A very...interesting composition, TPAC, as you take us through the lonely life and times of one elderly widowed woman who is introduced quite simply as, Mary Christie.
One cannot help but feel some sympathy for the old gal.
Well expressed...
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
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A very...interesting composition, TPAC, as you take us through the lonely life and times of one elderly widowed woman who is introduced quite simply as, Mary Christie.
One cannot help but feel some sympathy for the old gal.
Well expressed...
Comment Written 26-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
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The story reaching the reader was my challenge, a wall to confront and demolished with retained friendships to care. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
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You're very welcome, TPAC.
~Dean
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
You have really presented this in an inventive and engaging form - refreshing since everyone else seems to be so focused on rules. I thoroughly enjoyed this as you walk the reader through the empty days of loneliness in such a genuine and heartfelt way one can't help but fall in love with the poor lady. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
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You have really presented this in an inventive and engaging form - refreshing since everyone else seems to be so focused on rules. I thoroughly enjoyed this as you walk the reader through the empty days of loneliness in such a genuine and heartfelt way one can't help but fall in love with the poor lady. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
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I guess my next pits exploration is my rules breakage, at least enjoying learning and hopefully impeoving my future presentations. Glad beyond those flaws this work found some interest: even able to capture response emotions. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed views.
Comment from flip86
I see and feel the loneliness in each line posed by the author in this piece being alone in her solitary room. Each word is carefully selected to describe how she deals being alone each day and her garden is her solace and getaway. She (is) known through a window frame. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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I see and feel the loneliness in each line posed by the author in this piece being alone in her solitary room. Each word is carefully selected to describe how she deals being alone each day and her garden is her solace and getaway. She (is) known through a window frame. Nicely done.
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
Thanks everyone seems to grab from different directions when they give comments on works I guess why two comments, although confusing, are better than one
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Which one? I'm lost. Please specify and sorry for the confusion although I don't know which one and on what.
Comment from Janet7053
Present tense verbs permeate the poem, thus be careful to remain in that tense.
Did you mean {toils} in the second line?
she only to appear, in the frame, upstairs
as she sits alone in silence
curtains fly up
she just sits without stopping her rock
she is known through a window frame
You may be using a technique that resorts to rudimentary simple speak leaving many s off of the verbs. If so, I apologize. Disregard my comments.
This has a soulful appeal and I liked it very much.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Present tense verbs permeate the poem, thus be careful to remain in that tense.
Did you mean {toils} in the second line?
she only to appear, in the frame, upstairs
as she sits alone in silence
curtains fly up
she just sits without stopping her rock
she is known through a window frame
You may be using a technique that resorts to rudimentary simple speak leaving many s off of the verbs. If so, I apologize. Disregard my comments.
This has a soulful appeal and I liked it very much.
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
No can't say your thoughts are wrong I'm feeling, listening and waithing for that special ting Thanks for creative adjustments insights these things I do appreciate
Comment from benoenose
Solitude creeping in but the thinking of the movie within the poem sets the poet still maintains a technological backing. That guides and sustains even when human could never console.
Science has taken the pride over solitude that sets aside loneliness. Recommended for all those love to be alone.
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Solitude creeping in but the thinking of the movie within the poem sets the poet still maintains a technological backing. That guides and sustains even when human could never console.
Science has taken the pride over solitude that sets aside loneliness. Recommended for all those love to be alone.
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
Thank you for your sincerity You are the first to state you would recommend this note Beautiful response and encouraging It help my day efforts
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi...
You relay the emotion quite well. The lonely life from day to day -- going through the motions. Great imagery and presentation.
Well penned and presented.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
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reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Hi...
You relay the emotion quite well. The lonely life from day to day -- going through the motions. Great imagery and presentation.
Well penned and presented.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
Cheers to you too, thanking you for kind words I will hold dear. I do wonder if this all has some merit outside a few yes
