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Comment from Free_Roxanne
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I can follow your poem quite well, and feel it move. I enjoy your writing and will continue to follow. you. Thanks.
Free_Roxanne

 Comment Written 01-May-2015


reply by the author on 01-May-2015
    Thank you Free_Roxanne.
Comment from Joan E.
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A real trip--ha, ha, ha! Your parody of Silverstein's ode to a sidewalk made me laugh at the "nasty place". Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
    Thank you Joan. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Pantygynt
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This is a fine parody. i wouldn't say it lampoons the original but rather that it complements it from a different viewpoint as times have changed and garbage soils the sreets and the countryside. What is the matter with folk these days? I particularly like the expression "root-pushed cracks", and the juxtaposition of "basic basis", which I can only describe as alliteration with knobs on. I wrote a parody on Tennyson's Charge of the Light Brigade in response to the monthly challenge in the poetry group to which I belong. This has tempted me to post it here.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
    Thank you Pantygynt. Oh that would be delightful. Please do.
Comment from RockyBallad
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Very well done! I read it all three times because I found it awe-inspiring that a lot of thought could be derived from a broken sidewalk. Some people find inspiration in the most unlikely of places - and then to create a parody! Just great! :-) The structure was well done.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
    Thank you.
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
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Like how you always have some natural setting in your prose..Well most anyway. This was a perfect example of such..'Great work as always Mr T
TK

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
    Thank you Sir T.
Comment from rod007
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This parody worked well in following the format and rhythm of the original poem. But you have to be careful, Tom. Avoid the nooks and crannies where danger lurks or other toes will follow the fate of that broken toe! Well done, Tom.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
    Thank you rod. Haha, you be till watch out.
Comment from TAB_that's me
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Your parody poem is wonderful. Great story of your 'trip' - lol - hope it didn't really happen. Great rhyme and meter. A pleasure to read.

teresa

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
    Thank you Teresa. Nope, just a poem.