Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

I think folks might be taking this a bit too seriously, Bill. Of course, many don't see the dark humor in a great many things, like life itself.

I felt it's a fascinating script -- a little sci-fi, a little horror. Like two aliens dissecting a human being without so much as an after thought. A lot like we did with frogs in biology class in school. They wanna know what makes us "tick". And hell, who knows, maybe we taste good to 'em?

Different, odd, bizarre -- yeah, sure, it's all of those things...but I liked it. :} ~Dean

 Comment Written 02-May-2015

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reply by the author on 02-May-2015

Thanks, Dean, for giving if a look. Just playing around with some script writing. Bill

reply by Dean Kuch on 02-May-2015

I kinda thought as much... :}

Comment from kriver

Excellent

Hi Bill,
I don't know anything about script writing
So I can say in that area what is god or bad.
However the writing is fine.
Good character development
Good scene descriptions
Over all it is a good piece
Semper Fi

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Thank you, k, for giving this a look. I was mostly in 10th Marines for 20 years. SF

Comment from Megalips

Excellent

This is like "ET" meets Freddie Cruger. I'm not quite sure what I'm supposed to see or perceive, but I'm getting the impression these are aliens. Is the title a play on words?

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

I was just playing around with a short script format. I was thinking of two items that go together that I could make into names. Hammer and anvil. Thank you for giving it a look. Bill

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Physically adult, mental children, speaking a language that translates awkwardly into English. Aliens? Hunters? For the
good instruction and gross images, excellent.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Thank you, LIJ, for giving this a look. Bill

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Dear Bill, this is a fascinating script, there's nothing I can relate to, and review it as objectively as I can, but I have read nothing similar. Two men talking like robots, doing inexplicable things to a corpse! But I think it must be something brilliant, but I'd like to read more, I think this is the first item of yours that I've reviewed! so well done, and my apologies for being a simpleton, blessings my friend, Roy.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Thank you, Roy, for looking at this. It's experimental and not to be taken seriously. Bill

reply by royowen on 29-Apr-2015

I thought it might Bill

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Was kind of hoping this was more developed than it is. Action flows smoothly. Story line easy to follow. Descriptive language was well written for scene written. Write on.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Just messing around. Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from david28

Good

An intriguing piece of work not least for the language used. This a strong opening piece creating a sense of sci-fi horror. I'm not sure what downstage side of the body's face perhaps the descitpion could be reworded.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Downstage is towards the audience.