The Letter
A woman needs to write an eviction letter23 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
Nice picture that complements your story perfectly. I can't judge Flash fiction but it impresses like that. The woman's brothers want her to write an eviction letter, only because they need money to buy some land. But the old lady concerned has always been so nice. She writes the letter-walks to the letter box-tears it apart. Then she hears her deceased husband's voice, reminding her of the basement apartment. Very original. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Nice picture that complements your story perfectly. I can't judge Flash fiction but it impresses like that. The woman's brothers want her to write an eviction letter, only because they need money to buy some land. But the old lady concerned has always been so nice. She writes the letter-walks to the letter box-tears it apart. Then she hears her deceased husband's voice, reminding her of the basement apartment. Very original. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Ginnygray
Such a compassionate story and such a wonderful heart to provide a solution for an elderly woman who would find relocating difficult without assistance! My heart was filled with empathy for you as I read this story, and oh, how relieved I was that you, with your compassionate, nurturing heart solved this problem instead of your brothers! Great story, made your point, and was gratified to have a happy ending to what would have torn me up inside!! Great!!
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Such a compassionate story and such a wonderful heart to provide a solution for an elderly woman who would find relocating difficult without assistance! My heart was filled with empathy for you as I read this story, and oh, how relieved I was that you, with your compassionate, nurturing heart solved this problem instead of your brothers! Great story, made your point, and was gratified to have a happy ending to what would have torn me up inside!! Great!!
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Thank you very much for your high rating. Your words are motivating.
Thank you again.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Lil, I think this is simply a beautiful story and clever too. I love the short to the point excellent stories best. Your characters feel real and the story line is believable. Bravo on your first story! xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Hello Lil, I think this is simply a beautiful story and clever too. I love the short to the point excellent stories best. Your characters feel real and the story line is believable. Bravo on your first story! xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Thank you!! I enjoyed writing this. I am also happy you enjoyed it too.
Write on.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Gunnar...
Super story. Loved it from start to finish. Wish I had a sixer left for you. Love the ending. Proof, there are still a few good peeps in the world. (*<*)
If the contest is still going on, good luck. Great entry.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Hi, Gunnar...
Super story. Loved it from start to finish. Wish I had a sixer left for you. Love the ending. Proof, there are still a few good peeps in the world. (*<*)
If the contest is still going on, good luck. Great entry.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 07-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thank you for your grat review. Happy you enjoyed it!
Thanks again.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Loved the story and it was full of tension and action which kept me reading. I am making this a happy ending with Mrs. Stevens coming to live in the apartment. You did a great job. I didn't find any spag. Shirley
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Loved the story and it was full of tension and action which kept me reading. I am making this a happy ending with Mrs. Stevens coming to live in the apartment. You did a great job. I didn't find any spag. Shirley
Comment Written 07-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thank you for your kind words. I am happy you enjoyed it!
Comment from Curly Girly
I enjoyed reading this sad story because it has a happy end. It is sad how people get ripped-off in these Ponzi schemes. Usually, it is widows who are targeted with scams. My late mother almost fell for one.
This story will be a strong contender in the contest, Gunner Lil. Nicole
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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I enjoyed reading this sad story because it has a happy end. It is sad how people get ripped-off in these Ponzi schemes. Usually, it is widows who are targeted with scams. My late mother almost fell for one.
This story will be a strong contender in the contest, Gunner Lil. Nicole
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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Thank you for the kind words. Happy you enjoyed it. A win would be nice.
Thanks again. Write on.
Comment from Rikki66
OOH RA. This story hits home on so many levels. I must say for your sake I hope the wimpy brothers are indeed fictional.
The story like all well crafted pieces make you want more, the husbands reaction, Mrs. Stevens acceptance or refusal of the move.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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OOH RA. This story hits home on so many levels. I must say for your sake I hope the wimpy brothers are indeed fictional.
The story like all well crafted pieces make you want more, the husbands reaction, Mrs. Stevens acceptance or refusal of the move.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you for your kind comments. Good overcomes evil.
Write on!
Comment from alexisleech
I was with you all the way in this beautifully written story. I had to do it myself a couple of years back, but only because we hadn't received a penny in rent for seven months, and we had a 'buy to let' mortgage.
I notice you're having some formatting problems like many other new members. It might be worth repasting using the 'Advanced editor' button instead of the basic--just a thought. This is an excellent entry, so it would be great to see it in the format we're all used to.
The ending is great, although I had to read it a couple of times before grasping it's actual meaning. To make it absolutely clear, the words 'rent out' might be a good addition. Something like;
"You know the mother-in-law apartment in our basement... Do you fancy the idea of us renting it out?"
Good luck in the competition, and welcome to Fan Story.
Alexis x
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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I was with you all the way in this beautifully written story. I had to do it myself a couple of years back, but only because we hadn't received a penny in rent for seven months, and we had a 'buy to let' mortgage.
I notice you're having some formatting problems like many other new members. It might be worth repasting using the 'Advanced editor' button instead of the basic--just a thought. This is an excellent entry, so it would be great to see it in the format we're all used to.
The ending is great, although I had to read it a couple of times before grasping it's actual meaning. To make it absolutely clear, the words 'rent out' might be a good addition. Something like;
"You know the mother-in-law apartment in our basement... Do you fancy the idea of us renting it out?"
Good luck in the competition, and welcome to Fan Story.
Alexis x
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Thank you for the kind words and suggestions.
Write on.
Comment from Fridayauthor
Very nicely written, obviously with much feeling. The piece build up to the conclusion in an orderly way that makes the reading smooth.
There are some paragraph glitches in the first part....
Excellent posting.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Very nicely written, obviously with much feeling. The piece build up to the conclusion in an orderly way that makes the reading smooth.
There are some paragraph glitches in the first part....
Excellent posting.
Thank you.
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Thank you for your kind comments!!
Comment from scd41
I enjoyed reading the story though I felt sad for Mrs Stevens and you for different reasons. Mrs Stevens, despite being such a nice tenant for years, was about to be thrown out having meagre means. And you had the unenviable task to bell the cat - to write that quit letter to her. Well-written Flash story.
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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I enjoyed reading the story though I felt sad for Mrs Stevens and you for different reasons. Mrs Stevens, despite being such a nice tenant for years, was about to be thrown out having meagre means. And you had the unenviable task to bell the cat - to write that quit letter to her. Well-written Flash story.
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Thank you for your kind comments. Happy you enjoyed.
