Comment from Janet7053

Excellent

Difficult to read as I adhere to God's teachings on the matter. I have a sensitive spirit and am not offended by your writings. I do desire that each of us have insight and understanding.

You have a typo...tid bits is what you meant.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015

Thanks Janet: I hope to present only one theme via this novel and that is Jesus preached to love one and all and that includes all those who do not confirm to the definition of rights and wrongs of the world. Just look at what ISIS, a Islamic group is doing to the non Islamic people in Iraq and Syria. They are doing what they think is in Holy Koran- kill the non believers. I believe Christ would love all including the Gays and others. A Priest believing in that as the most important message will want changes made in the Church's rejection of such individuals or leave the organization itself and yet not leave the Lord. I hope you are not offended. Thanks again.

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Good

"lord" in your background should be "Lord". Other such errors as well especially in the first couple paragraphs. May want to look at this again.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015

Thanks for the feed back. I am bit puzzled and shocked with these errors. What I have on my MS Word document and what I have uploaded, have different grammatical outcome. There are some weird characters showing up also in the submitted work. The errors you and other reviewers pointed out should not be there and I must correct them. That is the elementary grammar and I just can't imagine how I made them. It is frightening because I have been writing fiction and professional works for the past twenty five years. I thank you again for the review.

Comment from Wabigoon

Excellent

Niyuta--
This, it seems to me is an important exchange. The themes here are important -- who and what should be in the Church or out.

Maybe due to language, translation problems you have lots of "mistakes." Here are a few of them:

"and enjoy the evening as (it) unfolds."

"they reached (to) their" out

"expressed their (complements.)" Compliments

"usual (tit) bits about the job" tid-bits

Etc., etc. There are more here than I can copy. I see this as a language problem probably. May I suggest you get somebody to proof read your work with a better acquaintance with English?

Again, I think this is an important topic and should not be hampered by questions of language.

Thanks
Wabigoon

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015

Thanks for the kind and encouraging rating. I am honestly puzzled by the errors. They are elementary grammatical errors. I am worried about losing writing skills. I have been writing professional reports such as Government Audit Reports, Response to Governmental Request For Proposals (RFP) etc. for the past 25 years, and did not do these errors. I am worried about losing the abilities to write and edit effectively. Hope it is not something that happens with age. I am at that time of my life cycle when brain functions get affected as aging happens. Thanks again.

reply by Wabigoon on 25-Apr-2015

Niyuta--
It is a long piece. It is one that would be hard to proofread by one's self. I just posted a story here and called it, get this, "Rop Van Winkle," instead of "Rip Van Winkle." Right up in huge letters at the top of the page! So, hey, if we suffer linguistic dementia, I do too!

Good luck! Get a second proof reader.
Wabigoon

reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015

Thanks for the encouraging words but I am running into making spelling errors which should not happen for the ordinary words. I am going to do just that; let someone else to edit it.

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015

Sorry I missed your review and just realized I did not read all. I am going to edit it extensively. Appreciate your comments very much.