Hero's Requiem
A short story24 total reviews
Comment from flylikeaneagle
War is ugly. What's the purpose? It changes everything, memories rewinding, stress and depression. People die or live dead. Great story, Michael. Keep up your momentun of terrific stories. I keep fighting in the contests...maybe, I'll relax and just learn from you big boys.
My father, Raphael, was a chaplin to the vets. I have the father's mantel of spreading the Good News and praying for others to enjoy their life. The General wasn't enjoying his life, just pitty party. My father went home through The Lord's Prayer.
When are you starting Vision and Sound? Are they retired? Great stories, did you get these published?
See you in "my favorite gardens," contest. flylikeaneagle
War is ugly. What's the purpose? It changes everything, memories rewinding, stress and depression. People die or live dead. Great story, Michael. Keep up your momentun of terrific stories. I keep fighting in the contests...maybe, I'll relax and just learn from you big boys.
My father, Raphael, was a chaplin to the vets. I have the father's mantel of spreading the Good News and praying for others to enjoy their life. The General wasn't enjoying his life, just pitty party. My father went home through The Lord's Prayer.
When are you starting Vision and Sound? Are they retired? Great stories, did you get these published?
See you in "my favorite gardens," contest. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I think you have an interesting idea to tell major stories in a few words. I don't think though, sorry, that it works. Your stories are so short, so brief, as to not develop your characters. You go from what would be a a horrible experience that would impact most men for the first of their lives (you could turn any of these stories into a book). In the first story to "it's medal time" in the third paragraph. To much, I think, too soon. I love your imagination and creativity. I would encourage you to develop these into larger stories.
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I think you have an interesting idea to tell major stories in a few words. I don't think though, sorry, that it works. Your stories are so short, so brief, as to not develop your characters. You go from what would be a a horrible experience that would impact most men for the first of their lives (you could turn any of these stories into a book). In the first story to "it's medal time" in the third paragraph. To much, I think, too soon. I love your imagination and creativity. I would encourage you to develop these into larger stories.
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
Comment from Tootsie55
Good work mate. Thought I saw a spag near the top. If I see it later will let you know. Ha... I saw it that Americanism again "dove" the only dove I know is white and has wings duh.
Getting ready to write a poem about Tom's unfair system where two of us pay but because we run 2 computers off the same Wi Fi controlled by one router we can't both review stuff properly. Only way around it is one does a review on the Mobile but whose tried to pick up spags on a Mobile (Cell) ha!
Good work mate. Thought I saw a spag near the top. If I see it later will let you know. Ha... I saw it that Americanism again "dove" the only dove I know is white and has wings duh.
Getting ready to write a poem about Tom's unfair system where two of us pay but because we run 2 computers off the same Wi Fi controlled by one router we can't both review stuff properly. Only way around it is one does a review on the Mobile but whose tried to pick up spags on a Mobile (Cell) ha!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
Comment from Brett Matthew West
As an Army Veteran I can appreciate a good military story and this one was. Well written. Action flowed nicely and the descriptive language used held reader's interest throughout. Write on.
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As an Army Veteran I can appreciate a good military story and this one was. Well written. Action flowed nicely and the descriptive language used held reader's interest throughout. Write on.
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2015