Hero's Requiem
A short story24 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
wow different versions of the same happening.
Nicely told and even better ending.
No problems seen.
Was this a contest entry? don't remember seeing it.
Different for you but I like to see how many sides you have. Lost count
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wow different versions of the same happening.
Nicely told and even better ending.
No problems seen.
Was this a contest entry? don't remember seeing it.
Different for you but I like to see how many sides you have. Lost count
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Bravo! And I like the ending, too. We don't need to know, since they're both messed up. The wounded soldier could have told what he saw, but he let the lie live while he lost everything. I lovvve the opening scene where the future general and his pal are both such cowards!
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Bravo! And I like the ending, too. We don't need to know, since they're both messed up. The wounded soldier could have told what he saw, but he let the lie live while he lost everything. I lovvve the opening scene where the future general and his pal are both such cowards!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
Comment from Tatarka2
I think this is one of your very best. Although you know I love your poetry, this (very different) piece makes the reader think. I've read it through 3 separate times now, and I get something different with each reading. That has to be good writing, thus the 6. I hope you do very well in this contest. One person's hero just might be another person's villain - or, circumstances may change a hero into a villain, or vice versa. Nicely done.
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I think this is one of your very best. Although you know I love your poetry, this (very different) piece makes the reader think. I've read it through 3 separate times now, and I get something different with each reading. That has to be good writing, thus the 6. I hope you do very well in this contest. One person's hero just might be another person's villain - or, circumstances may change a hero into a villain, or vice versa. Nicely done.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
Comment from justafan
You have a way about your writing MC that always leaves one wanting more! I found this work and the questions it poses very relevant in that we see too much death, too much war. That aside, I loved the twist.
Always,
Justafan
Melissa
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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You have a way about your writing MC that always leaves one wanting more! I found this work and the questions it poses very relevant in that we see too much death, too much war. That aside, I loved the twist.
Always,
Justafan
Melissa
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Thanks so much. I wanted to take the "story in a hundred words" idea up a notch. So, a book in about 500 words. I'm so pleased you liked this. I'm thinking of maybe sponsoring a contest like this. Say, five 100 word chapters or something like that. :) mikey
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cool idea Mikey :)
Comment from Megalips
Interesting series of perspectives there, and we needed to know about 'pineapple' for that to make sense, so good of you to mention. It does bring to mind some of the bullshit that America was fed during Vietnam...I'm not sure if that was your intention. That war was a long time ago, now...you just don't run into a lot of people who really remember those days.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Interesting series of perspectives there, and we needed to know about 'pineapple' for that to make sense, so good of you to mention. It does bring to mind some of the bullshit that America was fed during Vietnam...I'm not sure if that was your intention. That war was a long time ago, now...you just don't run into a lot of people who really remember those days.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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I must admit that Vietnam is always in the back of my mind, but this was just an any war situation. Cool that you can read my mind. GEEZ! You make those that remember those times sound ANCIENT!! Hahaha. The truth hurts. :)) mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
I think you have done exactly what you set out to do. This is really a book. The process of filing in the blanks is superbly left to the reader. Thought provoking to the max. Congrats. This is almost a new form. Love it.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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I think you have done exactly what you set out to do. This is really a book. The process of filing in the blanks is superbly left to the reader. Thought provoking to the max. Congrats. This is almost a new form. Love it.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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I'm so pleased you got this right on the money. It is an attempt to write a bare minimum book. Thank you so much. mikey
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Mickey,
This was a very thought provoking piece of work. I like the open-endedness of the 'ending'.
There is a big problem apparently these days with survivor's guilt, or is it?
I don't know what separates a coward from a hero. The soldier who would throw himself on the grenade to save his comrades but leave a wife and child fatherless - is he a hero? The one who doesn't but returns to his family and leads a full productive life - is he a coward?
Nothing is black and white these days. The tale you tell is very well written, and you have managed to stay impartial in the events. The tone is spot on too.
A really good piece. I was originally going to give this a 5 rating but I have read it a few times now and I keep thinking about it. It really is philosophical flash fiction at its best. Hence, I changed my rating!
Minus the trademark wackiness and humour too.
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GMG
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Hi Mickey,
This was a very thought provoking piece of work. I like the open-endedness of the 'ending'.
There is a big problem apparently these days with survivor's guilt, or is it?
I don't know what separates a coward from a hero. The soldier who would throw himself on the grenade to save his comrades but leave a wife and child fatherless - is he a hero? The one who doesn't but returns to his family and leads a full productive life - is he a coward?
Nothing is black and white these days. The tale you tell is very well written, and you have managed to stay impartial in the events. The tone is spot on too.
A really good piece. I was originally going to give this a 5 rating but I have read it a few times now and I keep thinking about it. It really is philosophical flash fiction at its best. Hence, I changed my rating!
Minus the trademark wackiness and humour too.
G
GMG
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
Comment from LIJ Red
The old ex sailor in the nursing home said if he'd known what came next he
would not have run and climbed so desperately when the destroyer was torpedoed
in the Pacific. That artwork was on something that I saw over and over , but I can't remember what...don't see anything to rate less than five here.
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The old ex sailor in the nursing home said if he'd known what came next he
would not have run and climbed so desperately when the destroyer was torpedoed
in the Pacific. That artwork was on something that I saw over and over , but I can't remember what...don't see anything to rate less than five here.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
Comment from robina1978
Excellent photo that complements your story. I think it is Flash fiction alright. It is about a group of soldiers that got a grenade thrown at them. One rescued another. One lost his legs, which his girlfriend did not like. an excellent story.
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Excellent photo that complements your story. I think it is Flash fiction alright. It is about a group of soldiers that got a grenade thrown at them. One rescued another. One lost his legs, which his girlfriend did not like. an excellent story.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
Comment from Sasha
Absolutely great work with this one. You really present this from completely different POV that most of us would never think of. Sad, but well written. I enjoyed this one very much.
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Absolutely great work with this one. You really present this from completely different POV that most of us would never think of. Sad, but well written. I enjoyed this one very much.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
