The Wonder
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Comment from Alan K Pease
Free verse with occasional rhyme placed in a fashion of understanding for us to measure- alliteration and choice of words throughout - a message that man should understand.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Free verse with occasional rhyme placed in a fashion of understanding for us to measure- alliteration and choice of words throughout - a message that man should understand.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Hi Alan....-smile- yea, not yet. but theres a slow train coming. love Michael
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is a dfark and brooding post from the author. I can see references to some kind of game and I must admit that I am a little bit in the dark about it, but well done all the same.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is a dfark and brooding post from the author. I can see references to some kind of game and I must admit that I am a little bit in the dark about it, but well done all the same.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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its called I want to be God...Lucifer invented it. I thank you my friend....love Michael
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My pleasure
Comment from LIJ Red
Since I read this twice, and feel I earned the phantom lucre, I'll give a standard five, and remark that you will not awe the everyday reader. The intense splashing
has muddied the water. I think you said what you meant, but some of it eludes.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Since I read this twice, and feel I earned the phantom lucre, I'll give a standard five, and remark that you will not awe the everyday reader. The intense splashing
has muddied the water. I think you said what you meant, but some of it eludes.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Well babe Ruth drank
Comment from jlsavell
Good evening Michael,
How are you? As per your usual style, your voice at times can appear to be quite cryptic upon first reading, especially to newcomers who are not familiar with the personality of the author/poet.
Good poetry can often be misunderstood even by the seasoned readers, but once a good reader of poetry understands the delivery technique of a poet, then they understand the many nuance and poetic devices he employs to make his work sing. I am often reminded of Pablo Neruda or even Sylvia Plath when reading your work.
It is not that your styles are the same, it is because their voice too, can appear quite cryptic until you further study their work.
I never understood high ranking reviewers that give you fluff comments, state some lines in your poem and go "oh I just love it!!!" without telling you why. Bullshit..
Poetry such as this allows the reader to come close to the core of living. It engages deeply the emotions or the intellect. This poetry spills and speaks of the tragedy of an era and the universal paradigm of justice and mercy bestowed by the creator of mankind. One is which He does not qualify color or class, but strength and bravery and determination at all cost.
Great poetry engages the whole man giving fresh insights into the nature of the human experience.
It is to be understood that the catalyst for your inspiration was this incredible song, which is ages old, but Bomassama delivers it with an extreme passion and this passion was the impetus for your execution.
As for John Henry it is said John Henry is a symbol of physical strength and endurance, of exploited labor, of the dignity of a human being against the degradations of the machine age, and of racial pride and solidarity. During World War II his image was used in U.S. government propaganda as a symbol of social tolerance and diversity.
This is the crux of an important message in your work.. John Henry defied, absolutely the resolve that man is weaker than the steam-powered sledgehammer. His hard work and his endurance eventually killed him, but he dies with dignity no doubt.
and we return to Michael, the arch angel, whom under the legion of Almighty God
defies the machination of evil. The very angels which stand by and support God have absolute resolve and integrity that the steam -powered sledgehammer(Satan and his legions) is no match for the mighty sledgehammer God's hand.
Look we all know that the measurement of a poem is much more complex process than the measurement of a triangle.
Poetry is never to be judged upon first reading. Poetry is like art, you have to hang it on the wall of your mind. Appreciative lovers of poetry will return time and time again to discover something different in its similes, metaphors, meaning and imagery. Reviewers --readers of poetry should never glance over a work as they do a newspaper and discard its contents once scanned. Good poetry will deliver something new each time you read it. It is likened to going to a meuseum of fine art, you just don't pass a work by because you don't understand it or you do not understand art. You contemplate, you study, you leave and you return. If it is worth the human experience of pleasure, it will not be forgotten.
You are a great poet. You have to know this. Unfortunately, reviewers here are what they are. We are amateurs and we are egoists. We want to move on to gather change and get our work out there. This is a major flaw in the system.
Thank you for using this song i sent you. It means a lot to me. I love you dearly. Jimi
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Good evening Michael,
How are you? As per your usual style, your voice at times can appear to be quite cryptic upon first reading, especially to newcomers who are not familiar with the personality of the author/poet.
Good poetry can often be misunderstood even by the seasoned readers, but once a good reader of poetry understands the delivery technique of a poet, then they understand the many nuance and poetic devices he employs to make his work sing. I am often reminded of Pablo Neruda or even Sylvia Plath when reading your work.
It is not that your styles are the same, it is because their voice too, can appear quite cryptic until you further study their work.
I never understood high ranking reviewers that give you fluff comments, state some lines in your poem and go "oh I just love it!!!" without telling you why. Bullshit..
Poetry such as this allows the reader to come close to the core of living. It engages deeply the emotions or the intellect. This poetry spills and speaks of the tragedy of an era and the universal paradigm of justice and mercy bestowed by the creator of mankind. One is which He does not qualify color or class, but strength and bravery and determination at all cost.
Great poetry engages the whole man giving fresh insights into the nature of the human experience.
It is to be understood that the catalyst for your inspiration was this incredible song, which is ages old, but Bomassama delivers it with an extreme passion and this passion was the impetus for your execution.
As for John Henry it is said John Henry is a symbol of physical strength and endurance, of exploited labor, of the dignity of a human being against the degradations of the machine age, and of racial pride and solidarity. During World War II his image was used in U.S. government propaganda as a symbol of social tolerance and diversity.
This is the crux of an important message in your work.. John Henry defied, absolutely the resolve that man is weaker than the steam-powered sledgehammer. His hard work and his endurance eventually killed him, but he dies with dignity no doubt.
and we return to Michael, the arch angel, whom under the legion of Almighty God
defies the machination of evil. The very angels which stand by and support God have absolute resolve and integrity that the steam -powered sledgehammer(Satan and his legions) is no match for the mighty sledgehammer God's hand.
Look we all know that the measurement of a poem is much more complex process than the measurement of a triangle.
Poetry is never to be judged upon first reading. Poetry is like art, you have to hang it on the wall of your mind. Appreciative lovers of poetry will return time and time again to discover something different in its similes, metaphors, meaning and imagery. Reviewers --readers of poetry should never glance over a work as they do a newspaper and discard its contents once scanned. Good poetry will deliver something new each time you read it. It is likened to going to a meuseum of fine art, you just don't pass a work by because you don't understand it or you do not understand art. You contemplate, you study, you leave and you return. If it is worth the human experience of pleasure, it will not be forgotten.
You are a great poet. You have to know this. Unfortunately, reviewers here are what they are. We are amateurs and we are egoists. We want to move on to gather change and get our work out there. This is a major flaw in the system.
Thank you for using this song i sent you. It means a lot to me. I love you dearly. Jimi
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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And I you.....though we are spart ....we were and always will be......thank you for this jimi ....I'm growing tired of this place......I've given them life they could feel ....without a moral of tespect. Bless you sweet woman michael
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Do not be disheartened. You have many who love you.. Poetry is your salvation, your catharsis for discouragement, your vehicle to inspire, and the bridge which coaxes you own when troubled waters wants to drown your soul. Poetry is for you and for anyone who cares to partake of a sweet, kind and loving soul. But never lose sight of the fact, that regardless of what the world thinks it sees, you and only you know how you feel.
do not forget the ultimate despair of Beethoven, if he had given up because the world was not ready for his magnificent compositions, we would be impoverished without his beauty.
Comment from bizzygirl
I had a hard time folowing this. I'd suggest some spell check. I wondered if it were on purpose but cannot come up with anything. The concept is the archangel and John Henry, which is a twist ,works well together. The first stanza does not make sense nor flow with the rest of the poem
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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I had a hard time folowing this. I'd suggest some spell check. I wondered if it were on purpose but cannot come up with anything. The concept is the archangel and John Henry, which is a twist ,works well together. The first stanza does not make sense nor flow with the rest of the poem
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Yes completely on purpose read a spelling bee happy....bug
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Reconciled...
Well, this was interesting inasmuch as I couldn't follow along very well. For the most part, it seemed like a string of words that didn't get the intent across.
Since I'm a country girl, I know nothing about your John Henry sledgehammer swing.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Hi, Reconciled...
Well, this was interesting inasmuch as I couldn't follow along very well. For the most part, it seemed like a string of words that didn't get the intent across.
Since I'm a country girl, I know nothing about your John Henry sledgehammer swing.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Then skip me next time jax....bug
Comment from madhatter1977
Hi, Michael, there are too many typos here. I love the song you chose which is good and rocking! You need to change here to hear in the last 2 verses. It also sounds like you're venting spleen? Let me know if you do and I'll be happy to change the rating. Best wishes, Pete
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Hi, Michael, there are too many typos here. I love the song you chose which is good and rocking! You need to change here to hear in the last 2 verses. It also sounds like you're venting spleen? Let me know if you do and I'll be happy to change the rating. Best wishes, Pete
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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It's how roll Pete....don't count on it
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Okay, I hope you're doing well, my friend.
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Swell
Comment from dmt1967
This poem touched me. I felt like I was part of the bigger picture and not an insignificant ant on the landscape of the Earth, I enjoyed reading this poem. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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This poem touched me. I felt like I was part of the bigger picture and not an insignificant ant on the landscape of the Earth, I enjoyed reading this poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Thank you for real....half the shit I read on here ain't worth one star
Comment from amahra
Very interesting poem. A bit complex but not hard to follow. Loved the art work that seemed really appropriate for this writing. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Very interesting poem. A bit complex but not hard to follow. Loved the art work that seemed really appropriate for this writing. Great job.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Thanks much ....smile
Comment from livelylinda
Michael: you are a difficult one to read . . . hell, I can't even understand myself sometimes and I spend a lot of time in my head. Hope all is well with you and that you are not swing that sledge hammer at anyone! LOL Soft Thunder, no Lightning.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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Michael: you are a difficult one to read . . . hell, I can't even understand myself sometimes and I spend a lot of time in my head. Hope all is well with you and that you are not swing that sledge hammer at anyone! LOL Soft Thunder, no Lightning.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2015
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John Henry did want he had to ....naturally God born.....there are um corcumstances created by satan and his minion.....are you so sure it's not our job to to stop them...,,you see Linda I wonder out loud without satisfaction as of yet.....I love you lady.... I never created this.....but he has made it ours.....what he loves and me now,,,,,forgive me michael
