Inside My Head
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The thoughts of a little silly Billy"I am what I am,my thoughts, my words,my poems
2 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
Well-stated views in your satirical poem. I agree entirely with what you say. Man given the opportunity to make something good out of this world has allowed it to degenerate into something evil. Excellent rhyming and great message. I spotted couple of things: verse 1 and verse 8, what's right, verse 8, it's gathered. Last line, did you mean, aren't they right or isn't that right. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
  |
Well-stated views in your satirical poem. I agree entirely with what you say. Man given the opportunity to make something good out of this world has allowed it to degenerate into something evil. Excellent rhyming and great message. I spotted couple of things: verse 1 and verse 8, what's right, verse 8, it's gathered. Last line, did you mean, aren't they right or isn't that right. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015
-
thnx for comments,i'm pleased you enjoyed my poem
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Poem flowed nicely between verses. Descriptive language helped add depth to the poem. May want to consider using a picture as that would really offset the poem. Write on.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
|
Poem flowed nicely between verses. Descriptive language helped add depth to the poem. May want to consider using a picture as that would really offset the poem. Write on.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
-
thnx for that, trying to figure out how to do the picture thing
-
FanArt is a good way. Only cost 2 member cents.
