The Wandering Starfish
rhyming couplets26 total reviews
Comment from RockyBallad
I can almost feel myself underwater in a peaceful, yet cautious existence. I can't think of anything that I suggest changing or improving. Well written, and I look forward to more work from you.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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I can almost feel myself underwater in a peaceful, yet cautious existence. I can't think of anything that I suggest changing or improving. Well written, and I look forward to more work from you.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Love your review. Thanks. Elaine
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is well written in good rhyming couplets. I like the essence/presence rhyme. Thanks for sharing your fun starfish poem:)
Teresa
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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This is well written in good rhyming couplets. I like the essence/presence rhyme. Thanks for sharing your fun starfish poem:)
Teresa
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine
Comment from HAPPIOTTER
It's no wonder this poem is recognized, it is really a great poem! Very well written, your choice of words are so descriptive you take the reader under the sea, to a life of enchantment! Good writing! Blessings! Happi
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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It's no wonder this poem is recognized, it is really a great poem! Very well written, your choice of words are so descriptive you take the reader under the sea, to a life of enchantment! Good writing! Blessings! Happi
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Love your review! Elaine
Comment from Pantygynt
Why do i find this poem off beat? (And that is not a piece of adverse criticism by the way) I am fascinated by it. I have never thought of starfish as rovers but rather as fixtures, immobile on the sea bed, but then none of the starfish of my imagination looked anything like that amazing artwork.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Why do i find this poem off beat? (And that is not a piece of adverse criticism by the way) I am fascinated by it. I have never thought of starfish as rovers but rather as fixtures, immobile on the sea bed, but then none of the starfish of my imagination looked anything like that amazing artwork.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Love your review. Thanks so much. Elaine
Comment from alf collier
Hi mermaids. This is so light and bright and carefree and I couldn't help but love it after all the dark and drearies that often dominate the site. It needs a 6 so please accept a virtual, for I have wasted at least one of the ones I did have on a less enjoyable work!!!! alf
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Hi mermaids. This is so light and bright and carefree and I couldn't help but love it after all the dark and drearies that often dominate the site. It needs a 6 so please accept a virtual, for I have wasted at least one of the ones I did have on a less enjoyable work!!!! alf
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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I will take a virtual six and I am honored by your review. Thanks! Elaine
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Mermaids...
Starfish are interesting little fish.
Love your artwork. It works well with your poem.
Well penned and presented.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Hi, Mermaids...
Starfish are interesting little fish.
Love your artwork. It works well with your poem.
Well penned and presented.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thanks! Elaine
Comment from Selina Stambi
There is a surreal, childlike quality about these rhyming couplets, Mermaids - indeed about much of your poetry - that I find quite charming.
Keep writing. Enjoyed. :)
Love,
Sonali xxx
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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There is a surreal, childlike quality about these rhyming couplets, Mermaids - indeed about much of your poetry - that I find quite charming.
Keep writing. Enjoyed. :)
Love,
Sonali xxx
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thanks! Elaine
Comment from petalangela
Very pretty piece I say pretty because it makes the starfish sound so pretty normally seen my beachcombers as a dried out dull dead fish. But here she is truly as pretty as she deserves to be seen
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Very pretty piece I say pretty because it makes the starfish sound so pretty normally seen my beachcombers as a dried out dull dead fish. But here she is truly as pretty as she deserves to be seen
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thanks! Elaine
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well written. Picture adds depth to this poem. Descriptive language held reader's interest. Story line easy to follow. Write on.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Well written. Picture adds depth to this poem. Descriptive language held reader's interest. Story line easy to follow. Write on.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thanks! Elaine
Comment from penneylane
Good job! I personally find rhyming hard to do without coming off contrived...your rhymes flow with ease. I really like the sea-themed story.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Good job! I personally find rhyming hard to do without coming off contrived...your rhymes flow with ease. I really like the sea-themed story.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thanks! Elaine
