Mr. Questions
All dialogue story45 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
I love the child's voice - so realistic and so authentic and entertaining :-)
I love Max's questions and the mom's answers and the message this delightful and thoughtful message this conversation delivers :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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I love the child's voice - so realistic and so authentic and entertaining :-)
I love Max's questions and the mom's answers and the message this delightful and thoughtful message this conversation delivers :-) Brooke
Comment Written 14-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Thamks, Brooke, for your kind review and comments for my short story. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hey, Kar
You're just the best writer with these kid's stories! I love them. You so well capture the essence of the child's voice. Your ability to weave in the perfect words and phrasing allows the reader to visualize both the mother, wide eyed at times, and the innocent child just pushing those buttons without even realizing he is.
I loved these lines the best: "Ohhhh, that's easy. It's cuz that's how God made me!" He smeared the white mustache on the hem of his Cubs T-shirt. "God made you the bestest cleaner-upper in the whole wide world, Mom. Wanna help?"
So well done, ProseWoman!
RR
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Hey, Kar
You're just the best writer with these kid's stories! I love them. You so well capture the essence of the child's voice. Your ability to weave in the perfect words and phrasing allows the reader to visualize both the mother, wide eyed at times, and the innocent child just pushing those buttons without even realizing he is.
I loved these lines the best: "Ohhhh, that's easy. It's cuz that's how God made me!" He smeared the white mustache on the hem of his Cubs T-shirt. "God made you the bestest cleaner-upper in the whole wide world, Mom. Wanna help?"
So well done, ProseWoman!
RR
Comment Written 11-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your wonderful review and generous rating for my short story, Ray. I'm so pleased you enjoyed the story and thank you for your kind words and encouragement.
Smiles,
Kar :-)
Comment from Bill Schott
Great moment with Mr. Questions. Our son asked all kinds of questions, and still does. Why do you have a hump on your back, lady? Why are you so much darker than me, mister? Why does my mom say you're goofy? I like your dialog and characterizations. Happy day.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Great moment with Mr. Questions. Our son asked all kinds of questions, and still does. Why do you have a hump on your back, lady? Why are you so much darker than me, mister? Why does my mom say you're goofy? I like your dialog and characterizations. Happy day.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Bill, for taking the time to read my story and for your great review. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and I appreciate your kind comments. I love the questions your son asked! Thank you.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from Sis Cat
I am so thrilled you kept that unfinished file. I may want to peruse my own.
You wrote a fun and engaging conversation that held my attention. Did this really happen or did you make it up?
I liked how Max turned around his mother's pat answer when asked why he is such a messy kid:
"Ohhhh, that's easy. It's cuz that's how God made me!"
Thank you for making me smile.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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I am so thrilled you kept that unfinished file. I may want to peruse my own.
You wrote a fun and engaging conversation that held my attention. Did this really happen or did you make it up?
I liked how Max turned around his mother's pat answer when asked why he is such a messy kid:
"Ohhhh, that's easy. It's cuz that's how God made me!"
Thank you for making me smile.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Sis Cat, for your great review and comments for my short story. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thank you.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from lancellot
It's a cute little scene, with an overactive kid and indeterminate age. This is appealing because of it's light hearted tone and good vibes. Sometimes we need to read things that are simple and just feel good. A reminder of easier times. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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It's a cute little scene, with an overactive kid and indeterminate age. This is appealing because of it's light hearted tone and good vibes. Sometimes we need to read things that are simple and just feel good. A reminder of easier times. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Lancellot, for your great review and comments for my short story. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Glad you liked the simple story and I did mention in the story the kid is five?
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from Amethyst Shining
I enjoyed this piece! Your flow was constant and the wording and language really sets this piece up. You can feel the characters and are able to sit in their world for a moment. The mother's love and adoration of her son is clear as is his for his mother. You captured the inquisitive mind of a child very well and a mother's everlasting patience and appreciation in a fun way. A great snapshot and nostalgic reminder of the bond between a parent and a child growing up. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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I enjoyed this piece! Your flow was constant and the wording and language really sets this piece up. You can feel the characters and are able to sit in their world for a moment. The mother's love and adoration of her son is clear as is his for his mother. You captured the inquisitive mind of a child very well and a mother's everlasting patience and appreciation in a fun way. A great snapshot and nostalgic reminder of the bond between a parent and a child growing up. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Amethyst Shing, for your great review and comments for my short story. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thank you for your very kind words and encouragement.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from livelylinda
Indianairish: having raised three kids, watched three grandkids grow and now have a 3 year old great-grandson, I remember and know all those questions. The mistake we sometimes make is answering from an adult mind instead of keeping it simple and on a level they can understand. Sometimes their questions are funny, sometimes serious and sometimes they leave us with our mouths hanging open! A cute story which I enjoyed reading. I see no reason to change it or to improve it. livelylinda
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Indianairish: having raised three kids, watched three grandkids grow and now have a 3 year old great-grandson, I remember and know all those questions. The mistake we sometimes make is answering from an adult mind instead of keeping it simple and on a level they can understand. Sometimes their questions are funny, sometimes serious and sometimes they leave us with our mouths hanging open! A cute story which I enjoyed reading. I see no reason to change it or to improve it. livelylinda
Comment Written 11-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Linda, for your great review and comments for my short story. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thank you for your kind words.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from mfowler
This is very entertaining, Karyn. You use kid speak very effectively to give Max an authentic voice. His continual questions are so reminiscent of my own children when young and I know this will resonate very well with most people who've been there, done that. The questions are delightful and the mother handles them well. The baby question was well done; funny as.
The arc of conversation comes full circle when he decides God made him messy and Mum into a slave. Very funny and enjoyable, I must say.
One spag:
dandylion..denadelion
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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This is very entertaining, Karyn. You use kid speak very effectively to give Max an authentic voice. His continual questions are so reminiscent of my own children when young and I know this will resonate very well with most people who've been there, done that. The questions are delightful and the mother handles them well. The baby question was well done; funny as.
The arc of conversation comes full circle when he decides God made him messy and Mum into a slave. Very funny and enjoyable, I must say.
One spag:
dandylion..denadelion
Comment Written 11-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Mark, for your great review and comments for my short story. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you liked the kids peak, and thank you for your kind words and encouragement. We spell the flower dandelion, but I wanted to make it sound more like a kid would say it-- dandy lion.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Eric1
Hi Karyn, haven't heard from you in a while, this is a wonderfully presented story, you have set the scene beautifully with the inquisitive five year old asking every question under the sun,it has a lovely ending, thank you for sharing my friend.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Hi Karyn, haven't heard from you in a while, this is a wonderfully presented story, you have set the scene beautifully with the inquisitive five year old asking every question under the sun,it has a lovely ending, thank you for sharing my friend.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Eric, for your great review and comments for my short story. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thank you so much for your kind words.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from yespabee
Wonderful indeed. Kept me busy till end. I liked the action darted through correct usage of the words in the story. Like for example, "How's come dandylion puffs blow away like the 'chutes airplane jumpers use?" and "from the moment his feet jumped out of bed until his mind shut down to sleep.". Lovely kept me engrossed. Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Wonderful indeed. Kept me busy till end. I liked the action darted through correct usage of the words in the story. Like for example, "How's come dandylion puffs blow away like the 'chutes airplane jumpers use?" and "from the moment his feet jumped out of bed until his mind shut down to sleep.". Lovely kept me engrossed. Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2015
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Please forgive me with this late reply to your wonderful review, yespabee. I'm so honored by your kind words and generous rating for my short story. Thank you for taking the time to read and write this great review. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and thank you for your kind words and encouragement.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
