Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Board Of Education"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Bmwhsd...
AMEN!
When the powers that be, did away with the 'board of education,' in entered 'it's all about me,' and 'you can't touch me.' Now look at the mess we're because consequence was not taught to this present generation.
Great work!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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Hi, Bmwhsd...
AMEN!
When the powers that be, did away with the 'board of education,' in entered 'it's all about me,' and 'you can't touch me.' Now look at the mess we're because consequence was not taught to this present generation.
Great work!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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Comment from rjuselius
this is another compelling piece of poetic art dear fez! education is so important in society that without it you may fall in the trap for non-workers.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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this is another compelling piece of poetic art dear fez! education is so important in society that without it you may fall in the trap for non-workers.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
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Comment from Dean Kuch
I couldn't agree with you more, my poetic friend. A little bit of well intentioned discipline never did anyone any harm. A good bit of tongue-in-cheek humor in this excellent poem as well. You must have been quite the handful, heh-heh. I can't say as I blame you one bit. I was the same way myself as a young lad. It's fun sometimes to look back and recall all the whacky, silly things we've done in our youth.
Excellent rhyming, very well composed. I sincerely enjoyed reading this.
~Dean
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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I couldn't agree with you more, my poetic friend. A little bit of well intentioned discipline never did anyone any harm. A good bit of tongue-in-cheek humor in this excellent poem as well. You must have been quite the handful, heh-heh. I can't say as I blame you one bit. I was the same way myself as a young lad. It's fun sometimes to look back and recall all the whacky, silly things we've done in our youth.
Excellent rhyming, very well composed. I sincerely enjoyed reading this.
~Dean
Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
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Comment from amahra
Very nice bio poem. I think a board of ed could suit quite a few kids today.
The ticket that he wrote me said I was ninety-three.[I don't get this line.]
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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Very nice bio poem. I think a board of ed could suit quite a few kids today.
The ticket that he wrote me said I was ninety-three.[I don't get this line.]
Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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Comment from Nosha17
Yes, I agree, discipline didn't ever do anyone any harm. Great humour, you must have been quite a handful, but Dad knew just how to control you! It us fun to look back and see the outrageous stuff we did, I'm not sure I ever did 93 though! Excellent rhyming and enjoyable story line. Faye
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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Yes, I agree, discipline didn't ever do anyone any harm. Great humour, you must have been quite a handful, but Dad knew just how to control you! It us fun to look back and see the outrageous stuff we did, I'm not sure I ever did 93 though! Excellent rhyming and enjoyable story line. Faye
Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015
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Thank you for your comments. And, YES he did know just how to control me. Appreciate you reading and reviewing this.
Comment from tfawcus
Hilarious! I remember a fearsome old master in my boarding school who kept a pair of wooden butter pats in his office. 'Pats' was not a very good descriptor when he had cause to apply them. The rhythm of your poem is perfect. I can hear it set to music as I read it.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2015
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Hilarious! I remember a fearsome old master in my boarding school who kept a pair of wooden butter pats in his office. 'Pats' was not a very good descriptor when he had cause to apply them. The rhythm of your poem is perfect. I can hear it set to music as I read it.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2015
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Comment from Dom G Robles
This poem is a narrative, a story that reveals the activities of an individual when he was a boy until adulthood. He describes his Dad from early childhood who was eying his activities and point to him his transgressions on a bulletin board. He had memories of all those things his Dad did to him. Towards the end, the writer was nostalgic. Connecting some activities with what his father was then teaching him, he felt sad.. But the love that he had for his dad was still there, overwhelming. I love the story, and I read it with feelings. There was a pain I felt in the end.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2015
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This poem is a narrative, a story that reveals the activities of an individual when he was a boy until adulthood. He describes his Dad from early childhood who was eying his activities and point to him his transgressions on a bulletin board. He had memories of all those things his Dad did to him. Towards the end, the writer was nostalgic. Connecting some activities with what his father was then teaching him, he felt sad.. But the love that he had for his dad was still there, overwhelming. I love the story, and I read it with feelings. There was a pain I felt in the end.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2015
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And they are very fond memories indeed. My Dad and I were completely unseparable and I would not trade my childhood with him for anything else in the world. Thank you for your comments. Appreciate them.
Comment from Pantygynt
Your "board of education" is no longer practised in Britain but I grew up in the days when it was and I don't think it's application did me much harm. I actually had knowledge beaten into me on one occasion. They say you can't do that but I'll remember the latin phrase 'caeruliis bracis' means 'blue trousers' as long as I live, because I didn't know it on the day I should have known it! This is obviously a song lyric although it is entered under 'general poetry'. I think that choruses get in the way where poems are concerned, unless they are very short, and these are not. The chorus should declaim the theme and the verses the plot which they both do admirably but I personally feel this would benefit from some editing. A would be to cut out the central part of your chorus, retaining the first two and last two lines as a four line chorus repeated after each verse, until at the end using the whole thing as a final verse. If it were mine I think that is what I would do, but that is totally subjective and I certainly would not be removing a star for the sake of it. Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2015
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Your "board of education" is no longer practised in Britain but I grew up in the days when it was and I don't think it's application did me much harm. I actually had knowledge beaten into me on one occasion. They say you can't do that but I'll remember the latin phrase 'caeruliis bracis' means 'blue trousers' as long as I live, because I didn't know it on the day I should have known it! This is obviously a song lyric although it is entered under 'general poetry'. I think that choruses get in the way where poems are concerned, unless they are very short, and these are not. The chorus should declaim the theme and the verses the plot which they both do admirably but I personally feel this would benefit from some editing. A would be to cut out the central part of your chorus, retaining the first two and last two lines as a four line chorus repeated after each verse, until at the end using the whole thing as a final verse. If it were mine I think that is what I would do, but that is totally subjective and I certainly would not be removing a star for the sake of it. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2015
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Comment from scd41
Some children are bored of education and scared of Board of Education. Nevertheless, responsible parents make sure that their children get educated despite much opposition from the children. The pain for kids in learning and the challenges in teaching them by their parents is worth it for the lifelong benefit it gives. Your poem has been well written on the subject. Some lines have been repeated that reduce their significance.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2015
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Some children are bored of education and scared of Board of Education. Nevertheless, responsible parents make sure that their children get educated despite much opposition from the children. The pain for kids in learning and the challenges in teaching them by their parents is worth it for the lifelong benefit it gives. Your poem has been well written on the subject. Some lines have been repeated that reduce their significance.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2015
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Thanks for your comments. This is actually a song lyric more than a poem. That was why I wrote it that way. Would eliminating the refrain make this poem read better do you think?
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Yes bmwhsd, I think so.
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Changed. Do you think it reads better now?
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Yes, it is much better now.
Comment from patcelaw
That board had to be used on many disobedient children, and most when grown look back and thank God for the lessons learned. Blessings Patricia
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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That board had to be used on many disobedient children, and most when grown look back and thank God for the lessons learned. Blessings Patricia
Comment Written 07-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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