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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
An amazing journey indeed-wind is one of nature's formidable arsenal.
In this case it seems to have provided benefits as well.
The poem is presented well, in what I see as autumn colours, and the words inject life into the process through imagery and description.
The rhyming is well done and the image supports the story , or vice versa.
The 8-6 meter is maintained throughout.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2015
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An amazing journey indeed-wind is one of nature's formidable arsenal.
In this case it seems to have provided benefits as well.
The poem is presented well, in what I see as autumn colours, and the words inject life into the process through imagery and description.
The rhyming is well done and the image supports the story , or vice versa.
The 8-6 meter is maintained throughout.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2015
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Thank you Shirley for a very astute review.
Comment from RGstar
Despite the winds and leaves, it is nice to be at one with nature.
I would give anything to live somewhere such.
Nice poetic write, my friend.Good use of the language.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Despite the winds and leaves, it is nice to be at one with nature.
I would give anything to live somewhere such.
Nice poetic write, my friend.Good use of the language.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you RG. I loved living in Colorado.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your experience in Colorado with the Chinook winds, along with the photograph of the house you had built, which was battered by them. I enjoyed your alternating rhymes and meter to intensify the description of the Chinooks. I liked your "rake" simile and your musings about the leaves being transported to Kansas. What a gift not to have to rake them yourself! Hugs and happy holiday Sunday- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you for sharing your experience in Colorado with the Chinook winds, along with the photograph of the house you had built, which was battered by them. I enjoyed your alternating rhymes and meter to intensify the description of the Chinooks. I liked your "rake" simile and your musings about the leaves being transported to Kansas. What a gift not to have to rake them yourself! Hugs and happy holiday Sunday- Joan
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you Joan . Happy Holiday to you too.
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
This one just blew me away hehehe Great flow Mr T. and a story well told as well. Living here in Hawaii we are 1,800 ft in elevation and get those winds coming off the volcanoes cones quite often...Two weeks ago at the summit of Mauna Loa the winds were recorded at 110 +... One thing we don't have is many leaves blowing but you do seen now and then a flying coconut lol
tk
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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This one just blew me away hehehe Great flow Mr T. and a story well told as well. Living here in Hawaii we are 1,800 ft in elevation and get those winds coming off the volcanoes cones quite often...Two weeks ago at the summit of Mauna Loa the winds were recorded at 110 +... One thing we don't have is many leaves blowing but you do seen now and then a flying coconut lol
tk
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you Sir T. Wow, flying coconut, DUCK!
Comment from rod007
Thankfully the winds here in southern Ontario are not as vicious, Tom. I liked these lines a lot:
" Among the clouds they flip and float,
Fluttering to and fro,
On thermal winds, so high, remote,
The paths the eagles know."
Yeah, the paths the eagles know. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thankfully the winds here in southern Ontario are not as vicious, Tom. I liked these lines a lot:
" Among the clouds they flip and float,
Fluttering to and fro,
On thermal winds, so high, remote,
The paths the eagles know."
Yeah, the paths the eagles know. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you rod.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Tom - you bring it alive with your imagery. Loved your flowing lines and great rhyme which adds to the poems expressive nature. Great job on this one.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Dear Tom - you bring it alive with your imagery. Loved your flowing lines and great rhyme which adds to the poems expressive nature. Great job on this one.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you Maureen for the wonderful review and compliment.
Comment from Pantygynt
You've been quiet for some time but this was worth waiting for. So true, so true. I don't know whether it's my English accent but I can't get Colorado in S4, L4 to scan comfortably. It's a minor thing but it just won't sit right. The whole idea behind the poem is great and I love it.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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You've been quiet for some time but this was worth waiting for. So true, so true. I don't know whether it's my English accent but I can't get Colorado in S4, L4 to scan comfortably. It's a minor thing but it just won't sit right. The whole idea behind the poem is great and I love it.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Yes, i struggled with that too. Thanks for the wonderful review. It took a lot of my time up, judging over 200 poems in the Kansas contest.
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Sounds a bit of a marathon 200 poems!
