Walking Through My Mind
Control of the mind is tranquility24 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A nicely written poem about quiet reflection, so important in our daily lives.
-You reflect on many emotions in the poem.
-You also comment on how to deal with them.
-Some good examples are:
* "Some thoughts I fight, some I cringe from in fright, where are the boundaries, where I can escape by flight."
* "Who loves you, who can you trust, a level of self-worth is a must."
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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-A nicely written poem about quiet reflection, so important in our daily lives.
-You reflect on many emotions in the poem.
-You also comment on how to deal with them.
-Some good examples are:
* "Some thoughts I fight, some I cringe from in fright, where are the boundaries, where I can escape by flight."
* "Who loves you, who can you trust, a level of self-worth is a must."
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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You are welcome.
Comment from CMac2
A great reflection of self. Our inner worlds send us into such turmoil at times. It is indeed nice to have peace of mind and thought, shelter from the pebbles in the wind storm. Great descriptive thoughts. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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A great reflection of self. Our inner worlds send us into such turmoil at times. It is indeed nice to have peace of mind and thought, shelter from the pebbles in the wind storm. Great descriptive thoughts. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thank you
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an e xcellent write, elpoetry, you did an excellent job contemplating the realities of the mind, which can turn reality into fiction. I enjoyed reading it..
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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this is an e xcellent write, elpoetry, you did an excellent job contemplating the realities of the mind, which can turn reality into fiction. I enjoyed reading it..
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Thank you
Comment from TPAC
Creative in work structuring poet take strong charge, very well composed poet illuminates reader, reflecting out from within interests at heart
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Creative in work structuring poet take strong charge, very well composed poet illuminates reader, reflecting out from within interests at heart
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Comment from TAB_that's me
A walk through my mind is often very scary:) I know what you are saying about pebbles, psychic knife (loved that one). Nice prose poem.
teresa
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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A walk through my mind is often very scary:) I know what you are saying about pebbles, psychic knife (loved that one). Nice prose poem.
teresa
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Thank you. I used the knife reference as similar to the "Gordian Knot."
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Unique styling. Picture would definitely help illustrate this poem much better. Easy to follow story line. Action flows well. Write on.
reply by the author on 10-May-2015
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Unique styling. Picture would definitely help illustrate this poem much better. Easy to follow story line. Action flows well. Write on.
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 10-May-2015
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Thank you. I am working in coordinating pictures with stories.
I am going to contact Fan Story to accomplish this. I am going to try to use photos other than what they provide.
Comment from Erys
Nice piece! And I wish I could control my mind better ... but I can't. Yes, reality is a dangerous area ... I agree. And because I can not throw stones in thoughts, I throw thoughts in thoughts, wondering why things never go as they should.
All the best!
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Nice piece! And I wish I could control my mind better ... but I can't. Yes, reality is a dangerous area ... I agree. And because I can not throw stones in thoughts, I throw thoughts in thoughts, wondering why things never go as they should.
All the best!
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Thank you
Comment from Nosha17
There are many trials of life that we have to contend with and for this we need courage, faith and strength. I liked the imagery and rhyming in your poem, but wondered what you thought of my suggestion for the first verse.
Having a nice image and presenting it like this, I hope you feel as I do, will enhance your poem:
When I am walking through my mind,
I'm never certain what I'll find.
All my dreams I try to log,
But disappear, as in a fog.
Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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There are many trials of life that we have to contend with and for this we need courage, faith and strength. I liked the imagery and rhyming in your poem, but wondered what you thought of my suggestion for the first verse.
Having a nice image and presenting it like this, I hope you feel as I do, will enhance your poem:
When I am walking through my mind,
I'm never certain what I'll find.
All my dreams I try to log,
But disappear, as in a fog.
Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Excellent. Thank you.
I edited, using your words. I did add a "they" disappear as in a fog.
Constructive is the best, it makes the average better than the rest.
Comment from robina1978
I enjoyed walking through your mind. It is such an original subject. You meet loads of feelings on your way. At the end, awoken, you want to die. You need to increase your self-esteem, so you can trust. I consider this a free verse poem.
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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I enjoyed walking through your mind. It is such an original subject. You meet loads of feelings on your way. At the end, awoken, you want to die. You need to increase your self-esteem, so you can trust. I consider this a free verse poem.
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Thank you
Comment from Marn
Flows well and tellls a tale we can all relate to.Got me thinking and I guess thats what the poem is about.Happy sad mad thoughts.The power of the mind.Well done
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Flows well and tellls a tale we can all relate to.Got me thinking and I guess thats what the poem is about.Happy sad mad thoughts.The power of the mind.Well done
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Thank you
