If I Ever
Heart tips17 total reviews
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Lulube,
'if I ever' is all you deserve, as does everyone whose life is intertwined with someone else's heart.
There is a real haunting reassurance in your questions... as I hoped the answers would always come back to you in a beautiful and positive way... the partner that stood by you in the good as well as the vulnerable times.
The sentiment woven through your wonderful poem really touched my tender side... I see this as the true mission for relationships as a rule... the one that is and will always be there for you, no matter what... you deserve nothing less than that!
A truly beautiful poem my friend.
With our thoughts we create,
swaddled love,
James vx's
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Hi Lulube,
'if I ever' is all you deserve, as does everyone whose life is intertwined with someone else's heart.
There is a real haunting reassurance in your questions... as I hoped the answers would always come back to you in a beautiful and positive way... the partner that stood by you in the good as well as the vulnerable times.
The sentiment woven through your wonderful poem really touched my tender side... I see this as the true mission for relationships as a rule... the one that is and will always be there for you, no matter what... you deserve nothing less than that!
A truly beautiful poem my friend.
With our thoughts we create,
swaddled love,
James vx's
Comment Written 30-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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hey JJJ
glad you liked this one. I always appreciate your insightful reviews and wild and sometimes crazy comments.
love your swaddled love. great imagery there
how's the beach? I had a marg. from my blender the other night, it was damn good.
lulube thxs again
Comment from catandheath
This was beautiful and so powerful that it brought tears to my eyes. Who doesn't have, or hasn't had, a person in their life that they are so drawn to that these are the very feelings, the very yearnings, you feel for that person? If they've never experienced this kind of love, my only wish is that they will -- regardless of the good and bad that may come with it. It reminds me of a phrase I've used frequently with a person who fits that description for me: "don't let me go," I always tell him.. Not giving this a 5 and a "somo" -- giving it a "6"! Lovely.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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This was beautiful and so powerful that it brought tears to my eyes. Who doesn't have, or hasn't had, a person in their life that they are so drawn to that these are the very feelings, the very yearnings, you feel for that person? If they've never experienced this kind of love, my only wish is that they will -- regardless of the good and bad that may come with it. It reminds me of a phrase I've used frequently with a person who fits that description for me: "don't let me go," I always tell him.. Not giving this a 5 and a "somo" -- giving it a "6"! Lovely.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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lol and what a 6 star surprise you gave. thxs for that. and of course your fabulous review. You've got a real soft heart that's full of compassion. Glad you shared that with me
lulube
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Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from adewpearl
Good use of repetition and parallel construction with the different "If I ever" scenarios
good alliteration in phrases like words whispered and tender touching
good use of enjambment
effective use of questions
soulful and moving expression of emotion throughout
Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Good use of repetition and parallel construction with the different "If I ever" scenarios
good alliteration in phrases like words whispered and tender touching
good use of enjambment
effective use of questions
soulful and moving expression of emotion throughout
Brooke
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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thxs Brooke for your breakdown, as always I appreciate iut.
lulube
Comment from lakeport
If I ever, indeed that's a very heartfelt and longing expressed poem, very nice flow.
I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. Hugs! lakeport....
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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If I ever, indeed that's a very heartfelt and longing expressed poem, very nice flow.
I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. Hugs! lakeport....
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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thxs so much lakey. always appreciate your reads and reviews
lulube
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you are very welcome, Hugs! Lakeport.
Comment from boxergirl
Good job, Lulube, with your free verse poem. Good use of enjambment as one thought trickles right into another with the question "If I ever...". The speaker clearly wanting reassurance from her loved one that even though things aren't always perfect that he will still be the one who's there. Artwork compliments the mood of the poem.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Good job, Lulube, with your free verse poem. Good use of enjambment as one thought trickles right into another with the question "If I ever...". The speaker clearly wanting reassurance from her loved one that even though things aren't always perfect that he will still be the one who's there. Artwork compliments the mood of the poem.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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thxs boxey for this great review. You always get the drift of my poetry. It's funny how some only see so far into your words.
lulube
Comment from Dawny53
Very well written, for me, I felt a kind of hidden guilt, I know my interpretation may be way off.. but I see a love that may want to wander, or feels it is not getting enough love in return and may want to test the waters a bit.. at any rate, I enjoyed, and I'm glad I stopped to read..
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Very well written, for me, I felt a kind of hidden guilt, I know my interpretation may be way off.. but I see a love that may want to wander, or feels it is not getting enough love in return and may want to test the waters a bit.. at any rate, I enjoyed, and I'm glad I stopped to read..
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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lol it's definitely not for sure knowing kind of love.
I'm glad you stopped by too!!
lulube
Comment from misscookie
The artwork you choose to go with your poem
it a perfect match for the sky is pale grey blue just like the words in every line. This is a very heart breaking poem to read.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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The artwork you choose to go with your poem
it a perfect match for the sky is pale grey blue just like the words in every line. This is a very heart breaking poem to read.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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thxs cookie for stopping by and for your honest review and comments. The photo as well as all others used, are my own
lulube
Comment from alexisleech
I love this, and I'm only sorry that it's not Sunday, so I can bestow the rating it actually deserves. In every relationship there comes a time when walking away is really a plea to be stopped and turned around by someone you love. Your words say all that and more.
Alexis x
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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I love this, and I'm only sorry that it's not Sunday, so I can bestow the rating it actually deserves. In every relationship there comes a time when walking away is really a plea to be stopped and turned around by someone you love. Your words say all that and more.
Alexis x
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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thxs so much for your great review and don't worry about sundays any more cause I put on a deserving poem with only 5 stars left
and a SOMO right at the start of the review.
SOMO - some of my own
(stars)
lulube
Comment from Smoothiecool
your word allow the reader to see and feel the need for someone to care for you
good imagery to portray message
good enjambment to allow flow of sentences
good alliteration in subtle, smoothly spoken
good use of "N" "L" "M" "P" consonance
good use of "O" "E" "I" assonance
flows well easy to understand
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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your word allow the reader to see and feel the need for someone to care for you
good imagery to portray message
good enjambment to allow flow of sentences
good alliteration in subtle, smoothly spoken
good use of "N" "L" "M" "P" consonance
good use of "O" "E" "I" assonance
flows well easy to understand
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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N,L,M,P - Never Lost My Personality
O.E.I - Opens Every Interest
thxs smoothie for your great breakdown reviews. I'll get the right meanings one day. I get wrong a bit.
lulube
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your most welcome my friend
N L M P.... Never leave my page
O E I...Other evening interests
cheers >>>SC <:> Faye
Comment from Andrewajgblue
This was a great poem, I enjoyed it very much, very descriptive writing, giving great imagery, You really felt the heartfelt message in this, and there was some great alliteration, you have done a great job with this, the presentation was excellent,
Andrew
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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This was a great poem, I enjoyed it very much, very descriptive writing, giving great imagery, You really felt the heartfelt message in this, and there was some great alliteration, you have done a great job with this, the presentation was excellent,
Andrew
Comment Written 28-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Hey Andrew,
Glad you liked it and so glad you stopped by. WOW 6 stars, I'm honored for this rating.
thxs for this review
lulube
