Beautiful Death
Viewing comments for Chapter 10000 "Sue loved Owen "from birth I have longed for death
4 total reviews
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate. I am a long way behind in reviewing and replying, but I'll catch up. I wish I had a six for this chapter, it is great! So sad, but great. You writing is coming along well my friend, keep at it. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
  |
G'day mate. I am a long way behind in reviewing and replying, but I'll catch up. I wish I had a six for this chapter, it is great! So sad, but great. You writing is coming along well my friend, keep at it. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
-
Thanks again.
Comment from meggie13
The romance between Sue and Owen came to a stop when the family found out about them. How sad was that! They were happy together ; it was just puppy love. It is well written and I give you credit for working in a sad atmosphere since you were so young.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
|
The romance between Sue and Owen came to a stop when the family found out about them. How sad was that! They were happy together ; it was just puppy love. It is well written and I give you credit for working in a sad atmosphere since you were so young.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
-
Thank you.
Comment from Janet7053
CBAT, Keep in mind any suggestions I make are to be taken as just that; suggestions.
Her clothing and actions spoke of money. This engages our imaginations as to just how she might have looked or what she may have been wearing. Nicely penned.
You are right on point as to the dilemma of love blossoming in a home for the mentally challenged. My friend is experiencing that with her daughter at a facility.
This story is very interesting to many who deal with Special Needs Individuals. You show the right degree of empathy and understanding to Owen as he misses her so. I may have missed it, but what was his disability exactly?
Special needs not need
grateful not grate-full
easy going not go easy
"...the person wit it had diminished intelligence." Good description, but fix the typo.
"Owen Had been a patient in this place for years." another typo.
Best wishes in all your writing endeavors.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
|
CBAT, Keep in mind any suggestions I make are to be taken as just that; suggestions.
Her clothing and actions spoke of money. This engages our imaginations as to just how she might have looked or what she may have been wearing. Nicely penned.
You are right on point as to the dilemma of love blossoming in a home for the mentally challenged. My friend is experiencing that with her daughter at a facility.
This story is very interesting to many who deal with Special Needs Individuals. You show the right degree of empathy and understanding to Owen as he misses her so. I may have missed it, but what was his disability exactly?
Special needs not need
grateful not grate-full
easy going not go easy
"...the person wit it had diminished intelligence." Good description, but fix the typo.
"Owen Had been a patient in this place for years." another typo.
Best wishes in all your writing endeavors.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
-
Janet; Thank you for your help.
And kind words.
Comment from stephybs
This is such an uplifting yet also heartbreaker piece. I know only to well how these things really happen. You have told this very well. Excellently written.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
 |
This is such an uplifting yet also heartbreaker piece. I know only to well how these things really happen. You have told this very well. Excellently written.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
-
Thank you.
