Good-bye, Charlie
You'll never believe what lurks beneath the streets.19 total reviews
Comment from Louise G 23
Excellent story! Congratulations on the win.
I loved your story, I had a great laugh - it was completely unexpected and extremely creative. I love Charlie, I had a great picture of him in my head as I read the story.
I have to admit I am feeling a little guilty about flushing a couple of dead goldfish down the toilet. I definitely will be more considerate next time and give them the burial they deserve.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Excellent story! Congratulations on the win.
I loved your story, I had a great laugh - it was completely unexpected and extremely creative. I love Charlie, I had a great picture of him in my head as I read the story.
I have to admit I am feeling a little guilty about flushing a couple of dead goldfish down the toilet. I definitely will be more considerate next time and give them the burial they deserve.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the great review, Louise. I will confess to shome fishacide myself in the past. Perhaps Charlie was born out of guilt, and thank you for the congrats. I was just having fun with Charlie, had no idea other people probably needed a laugh, too.
Comment from patcelaw
Congrats on winning the prompt. I never flushed a goldfish down the drain. but one I did flush a pesky mouse down the drain. The mouse was in the house for about 3 weeks and I could not catch him in a trap, so finally got some poison. Got him, Bye-bye mouse. Patricia
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Congrats on winning the prompt. I never flushed a goldfish down the drain. but one I did flush a pesky mouse down the drain. The mouse was in the house for about 3 weeks and I could not catch him in a trap, so finally got some poison. Got him, Bye-bye mouse. Patricia
Comment Written 26-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the review and the comments, Patricia. Now you've gone and given me an idea for a sequel!
Comment from c_lucas
A gold fish on drugs is a very good image. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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A gold fish on drugs is a very good image. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much for the review and comments. Let's not forget, he was also irradiated and inhaled explosives. Poor guy!
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You're welcome, Davisr. Charlie
Comment from Pancho Kid
You should take more notice of your neighbours!
This was a funny story,and I'm chuckling as I write. The last line is cool, and reflects back well on the rest of the poem. Not much of a review, because I can see nothing to concern my red pen here. Well done and thanks...laughs are good for me!
Pancho Kid
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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You should take more notice of your neighbours!
This was a funny story,and I'm chuckling as I write. The last line is cool, and reflects back well on the rest of the poem. Not much of a review, because I can see nothing to concern my red pen here. Well done and thanks...laughs are good for me!
Pancho Kid
Comment Written 26-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much for the great 6 star gift. Charlie would be honored, that is if her weren't off campaigning. You are most kind, Pancho Kid!
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No problem....I've been chuckling all day at the notion of a goldfish that can 'stalk' out of a room.
Pancho Kid
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Thanks for the vote of confidence!
Rhonda
Comment from adewpearl
good attention grabbing opening as you describe that final sighting of Charlie LOL
good gallows humor
clever introduction of the terrorists and how they fit into the plot
oh my, I'm dying of laughter when Charlie and those radioactive materials all mix
fantastic closing as Charlie heads off to Congress - congratulations on a great contest win :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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good attention grabbing opening as you describe that final sighting of Charlie LOL
good gallows humor
clever introduction of the terrorists and how they fit into the plot
oh my, I'm dying of laughter when Charlie and those radioactive materials all mix
fantastic closing as Charlie heads off to Congress - congratulations on a great contest win :-) Brooke
Comment Written 25-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much, Brooke, what a wonderful and thorough review! I had a lot of fun with old Charlie!
Comment from fimarie78
Congratulations. A very well deserved win.
I liked your choice of vocabulary. In particular, ignoble and the phrase 'curiosity circumventing caution'.
Hilarious, especially when the fish puts the bowl over 'your' head.
best wishes, Fiona
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Congratulations. A very well deserved win.
I liked your choice of vocabulary. In particular, ignoble and the phrase 'curiosity circumventing caution'.
Hilarious, especially when the fish puts the bowl over 'your' head.
best wishes, Fiona
Comment Written 25-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for the review and the words of encouragement, Fiona. Charlie may make a run for President after his win in Congress!
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is so cute. Personifying a goldfish. Ha! You got imagination girl. I like that. It was a fun read, and running for congress is quite a goal for Charlie. No sense wasting time on a lower position when you can walk and talk and have survived the toilet escape. Good job. I will go and see how this contest is doing. I wish you luck. Drew xx
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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This is so cute. Personifying a goldfish. Ha! You got imagination girl. I like that. It was a fun read, and running for congress is quite a goal for Charlie. No sense wasting time on a lower position when you can walk and talk and have survived the toilet escape. Good job. I will go and see how this contest is doing. I wish you luck. Drew xx
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much, Drew! You are quite encouraging. The more I think about Charlie, the more I think I'm going to have to write a sequel. There is a Presidential election coming up soon...
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You should. It would be so neat, I'm sure. With that kind of imagination, you can go places the ordinary Joe can't go. LOL
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And probably shouldn't! Thanks for the encouragement!
Comment from RodG
I really enjoyed this tongue-in-cheek (that's a notch ABOVE satire in my book) story about Charlie the goldfish. Loved the way you set the scene by describing the other residents and their need to flush also. He's much changed (could he talk before?) and certainly is justified in his gripes.
A delightful read this afternoon.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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I really enjoyed this tongue-in-cheek (that's a notch ABOVE satire in my book) story about Charlie the goldfish. Loved the way you set the scene by describing the other residents and their need to flush also. He's much changed (could he talk before?) and certainly is justified in his gripes.
A delightful read this afternoon.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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I am honored that you have reviewed my story, and promoted it to, "tongue in cheek"!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hello, Boils & ghouls, and welcome to tonight's twisted terror treat. Boy, have I got a fishy tail for you, ah-h-h-heh-heh-heh. For this frightful fishy feast we're going to cook up a batch of terror-fried fishes. This is the one catch that our story's hero wishes would have gotten away. His is a fish with nobler ambitions. I call it...
"Good-bye, Charlie"
You see how easy it would have been to introduce this tail...er, heh-heh, I mean tale in my "Dr. Terry Fying's Crumbling Crypt 2" contest, Author 'X'? Ah, so few entries, so little time...
I know very little about methamphetamine, TNT, or tritiated water. But what little I know about tritiated water, I know it contains the radioactive isotope hydrogen, and has a half-life of about 12 years. It's not dangerous externally -- its beta particles are unable to penetrate the skin -- but it is a radiation hazard when inhaled, ingested via food or water, or absorbed through the skin through ingestion. That being said, I'd wager that Charlie was one very pissed-off little goldfish!
Now I hear he's running for Congress. Well (I know, deep subject, right?), I for one will vote for the little bugger. After all, he can't do any worse than our current administration has done, right? LOL..
This was a very funny and imaginative story, and I really enjoyed reading it.
You have definitely got my vote in this contest. I've read all the other entries and saved the best for last...yours!
Well done...~Dean
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Hello, Boils & ghouls, and welcome to tonight's twisted terror treat. Boy, have I got a fishy tail for you, ah-h-h-heh-heh-heh. For this frightful fishy feast we're going to cook up a batch of terror-fried fishes. This is the one catch that our story's hero wishes would have gotten away. His is a fish with nobler ambitions. I call it...
"Good-bye, Charlie"
You see how easy it would have been to introduce this tail...er, heh-heh, I mean tale in my "Dr. Terry Fying's Crumbling Crypt 2" contest, Author 'X'? Ah, so few entries, so little time...
I know very little about methamphetamine, TNT, or tritiated water. But what little I know about tritiated water, I know it contains the radioactive isotope hydrogen, and has a half-life of about 12 years. It's not dangerous externally -- its beta particles are unable to penetrate the skin -- but it is a radiation hazard when inhaled, ingested via food or water, or absorbed through the skin through ingestion. That being said, I'd wager that Charlie was one very pissed-off little goldfish!
Now I hear he's running for Congress. Well (I know, deep subject, right?), I for one will vote for the little bugger. After all, he can't do any worse than our current administration has done, right? LOL..
This was a very funny and imaginative story, and I really enjoyed reading it.
You have definitely got my vote in this contest. I've read all the other entries and saved the best for last...yours!
Well done...~Dean
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Dean, and Charlie the, might be serial drowner, thanks you! PS, I like you goldfish better.
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Hey, I hope my vote helps you out. It was a great story! ;)
~DK
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL! I think that some of the junk that is flushed away, could easily be doing that to flushed away fish, let alone the other cuddly creatures down there, like the water rats in our sewers! I will make sure I look down the loo in future before I sit on it!! Good luck in the contest, I loved this one. xsx sandra
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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LOL! I think that some of the junk that is flushed away, could easily be doing that to flushed away fish, let alone the other cuddly creatures down there, like the water rats in our sewers! I will make sure I look down the loo in future before I sit on it!! Good luck in the contest, I loved this one. xsx sandra
Comment Written 24-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much, and yeah, watch out what you sit on. Who knows what's in there?
