Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Chapter Catorce; Part Uno"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
More than ever, I wonder who is leaking lies about events at the Rockin' A and whatis their motive?
More great dialog. Love and Irist Hugs for this great SPAG-free transitional chapter.
Roger
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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Hi Barbara:)
More than ever, I wonder who is leaking lies about events at the Rockin' A and whatis their motive?
More great dialog. Love and Irist Hugs for this great SPAG-free transitional chapter.
Roger
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I am wondering myself what this person or persons are up too.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
This is a good story, and I have read part of it before. I like the setting and your strong female characters. And even though there isn't a compete story, the part takes your attention and makes you want to read more.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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This is a good story, and I have read part of it before. I like the setting and your strong female characters. And even though there isn't a compete story, the part takes your attention and makes you want to read more.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from angelface2
Very well written, Barbara. They smell a rat and I wonder who it could be. Soni may have put herself in danger by helping this woman and her baby. I hope not. :>D Miss Sally
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Very well written, Barbara. They smell a rat and I wonder who it could be. Soni may have put herself in danger by helping this woman and her baby. I hope not. :>D Miss Sally
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Soni doesn't always make good choices, but does what is right. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from fimarie78
This is the first post in your novel that I have read and I will be sure to read the rest. Firstly, I liked the names you have chosen for your characters and the animals. You have a nice writing style and the dialogue reads well.
Just a couple of thoughts. When Son walks towards the house, I would delete the 'with' and simply put Tatiana and the others (named or otherwise followed.
In the final sentence, I would rephrase- whoever it is, he or she is pure evil.
Just to make it sound more definite.
Best wishes
Fiona
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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This is the first post in your novel that I have read and I will be sure to read the rest. Firstly, I liked the names you have chosen for your characters and the animals. You have a nice writing style and the dialogue reads well.
Just a couple of thoughts. When Son walks towards the house, I would delete the 'with' and simply put Tatiana and the others (named or otherwise followed.
In the final sentence, I would rephrase- whoever it is, he or she is pure evil.
Just to make it sound more definite.
Best wishes
Fiona
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the kind review and suggestions.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation, having smooth flow throughout, with simple as well as impressive wording and lively imagery.
Please see this sentence if you don't mind:"...Soni, are you sure you don't want something?" [something? or anything?]
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation, having smooth flow throughout, with simple as well as impressive wording and lively imagery.
Please see this sentence if you don't mind:"...Soni, are you sure you don't want something?" [something? or anything?]
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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I agree I think anything works better. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
What a relief these two are home where they are safe to face whatever is coming next. For there sure is something coming... Some action I can feel it. And your clever storytelling has indicated that. Looking forward to more, Giddy
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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What a relief these two are home where they are safe to face whatever is coming next. For there sure is something coming... Some action I can feel it. And your clever storytelling has indicated that. Looking forward to more, Giddy
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from chasennov
Chapter 38 of the book Texas Dream Catcher Soni and Jim arrive at the ranch. "Chapter Catorce; Part Uno" I loved reading this chapter you created here. I read them like I read nine books, a chapter at a time, then try to remember what I read before I start. Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Chapter 38 of the book Texas Dream Catcher Soni and Jim arrive at the ranch. "Chapter Catorce; Part Uno" I loved reading this chapter you created here. I read them like I read nine books, a chapter at a time, then try to remember what I read before I start. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the kind review. HUGS!
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You are most welcome, Barbara.
Comment from seaglass
This is all well written. I enjoy reading when paragraphs are broken up, not to long, and flow naturally. Hinting the murderer might be a women opens new thought and possibility.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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This is all well written. I enjoy reading when paragraphs are broken up, not to long, and flow naturally. Hinting the murderer might be a women opens new thought and possibility.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Sefiros
Interesting. I think the chapter should go on at least until Soni figures out why they had to return to the house so quickly. Maybe even the identity of the leak. That would provide a much more dramatic end to the chapter. Good luck.
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Interesting. I think the chapter should go on at least until Soni figures out why they had to return to the house so quickly. Maybe even the identity of the leak. That would provide a much more dramatic end to the chapter. Good luck.
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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This is not the end of the chapter. Much of the information you are wanting will happen before chapter 14 ends, this is only about 500 words of the chapter. I post the chapter in 3 or 4 parts so they aren't too long for FS. Thank you.
Comment from Donovan
Male horse prostitution, this story has it all. And while Soni is basking in a "not 50 shades of gray" but a home depot color swatch board bubble bath, Old Jim is chomping down on a turkey sandwich. And I suspect it was not from Subway or even a butterball, but probably something they chased down and bit off it head with their teeth, these are rough hombres, considering they are the good guys. I will tell you why Midnight got the stud gig...Jim needs Viagra.
And the cartel, they will find out, they always do. Do not put Midnight's head in the bed, you will loose all your readers, save me, and I think that has been used.
The big question, who is the spy, the rat, fink, squealer...I have my idea, but if I tell you, you might say..Wow..why didn't I think of that.
Story keeps my interest....I want to know more, you write well, it's smooth to read.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Male horse prostitution, this story has it all. And while Soni is basking in a "not 50 shades of gray" but a home depot color swatch board bubble bath, Old Jim is chomping down on a turkey sandwich. And I suspect it was not from Subway or even a butterball, but probably something they chased down and bit off it head with their teeth, these are rough hombres, considering they are the good guys. I will tell you why Midnight got the stud gig...Jim needs Viagra.
And the cartel, they will find out, they always do. Do not put Midnight's head in the bed, you will loose all your readers, save me, and I think that has been used.
The big question, who is the spy, the rat, fink, squealer...I have my idea, but if I tell you, you might say..Wow..why didn't I think of that.
Story keeps my interest....I want to know more, you write well, it's smooth to read.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you, my dear. It's always a pleasure to hear from you. I have gotten a few ideas from Godfather. Maybe he was really a leader of a Mexican Drug Cartel. One never knows. LOL
