Minnesota Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "Robbing Paul to Pay Peter"Poems About and Around Minnesota
12 total reviews
Comment from daycee1
That was a wonderful poem! It had me hooked the entire time, and was full of amazing qualities, keep on going and good job!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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That was a wonderful poem! It had me hooked the entire time, and was full of amazing qualities, keep on going and good job!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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Thank you daycee1.
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Your welcome!
Comment from Wabigoon
Treischel--
This is, I must say, an heroic effort. To employ a complex form like this way beyond me -- must have taken you...months to write this or does it come fairly easily when you have it all in mind?
In any event, congratulations. Glad, I guess, the capital's further north, wish Wisconsin's, where I live, was. Sometimes feel like we need that mythical state of Superior up here Madison's so far away, just about another country.
Wabigoon
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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Treischel--
This is, I must say, an heroic effort. To employ a complex form like this way beyond me -- must have taken you...months to write this or does it come fairly easily when you have it all in mind?
In any event, congratulations. Glad, I guess, the capital's further north, wish Wisconsin's, where I live, was. Sometimes feel like we need that mythical state of Superior up here Madison's so far away, just about another country.
Wabigoon
Comment Written 29-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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Thank Wabigoon, you must be a Garison Keilor fan. So close a name to Wobegone. I took about a week, which is a long time for me.
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Treishel--
A, somewhat unfortunate connection -- Wobegone -- Wabigoon. Wabigoon is a big lake, size of Namakan or Kabetogama up about 175 kilometers into Ontario nearly straight north of Ft. Francis. Wabigoon means something on the order of Lake with White Flowers -- water lilies. No connection to Garrison. Happy for your poem.
Thanks
Wabigoon
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Ah, my apologies then. I am certainly familiar with Namekagon and Kabetogama.
Comment from thomdble
What a remarkable feat you have performed with both the sonnets and the historical research and story. I am Minnesota born and raised so this was very fascinating to me. Clever, 'pay Paul and/or Peter' usage. This is a very well done work and I thank you, as a Minnesotan and a reader of fine works.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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What a remarkable feat you have performed with both the sonnets and the historical research and story. I am Minnesota born and raised so this was very fascinating to me. Clever, 'pay Paul and/or Peter' usage. This is a very well done work and I thank you, as a Minnesotan and a reader of fine works.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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Thank you, fellow Minnesota. I am assembling a book of Minnesota poems. Besides the several I've already written, i plan to do more Indian war battles (already did Shetek), then : the Mill City, early Minn. explorers, the Hamm's brothers, Fort Snelling, JJ Hill, the Cathedral, 1987 World Series, Carnegie, Lumbermen, the City of the Lakes, St. Paul's chain of lake, Duluth, Lake Surperior.
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My great grandmother homesteaded in Graceville, a Catholic community sponsored by Bishop Ireland in the 1880's. You may find his story interesting.
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Yes, I'll tell his story under the Cathedral story. I know he was very interesting. In fact, my wife and I were members there. Our names are up in the signed parchment inside the new cross on the roof.
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My great grandmother homesteaded in Graceville, a Catholic community sponsored by Bishop Ireland in the 1880's. You may find his story interesting.
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Thank you, ill research that
Comment from Selina Stambi
Oh, my goodness, Tom.
This is erudition of the highest order, and a historical feast in perfect iambic metre.
Scansion yielded no flaws in construction ... a couple of feminine endings revealed themselves.:)
Clever and informative. An unusual topic for a crown of sonnets, but not unfitting.
Wonderfully well done.
Sonali
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Oh, my goodness, Tom.
This is erudition of the highest order, and a historical feast in perfect iambic metre.
Scansion yielded no flaws in construction ... a couple of feminine endings revealed themselves.:)
Clever and informative. An unusual topic for a crown of sonnets, but not unfitting.
Wonderfully well done.
Sonali
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Thank you Sonali. I probably should have mentioned the feminine lines in my notes, but the were long enough already. I like this format for telling long tales.
Comment from rod007
This is a truly amazing poem of the history of Minnesota with a good historical explanation that enables us to understand the complexities of the corruption, chicanery and power play that was prevalent then and unfortunately now too. It must have involved a lot of hard work to compose this. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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This is a truly amazing poem of the history of Minnesota with a good historical explanation that enables us to understand the complexities of the corruption, chicanery and power play that was prevalent then and unfortunately now too. It must have involved a lot of hard work to compose this. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Thank you Rod. Yes, it was hard work. I think it turned out well though, especially based on those stars you gave me.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Liked your explanation notes. Guess Paul still gets paid by Peter after all is said and done. Not a big fan of the frozen tundra but still a nice little tale. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Liked your explanation notes. Guess Paul still gets paid by Peter after all is said and done. Not a big fan of the frozen tundra but still a nice little tale. Keep writing.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Thank you bmwhsd.
Comment from Jacob Collins
I thought that you told me this piece well and thank you for offering an explanation below to help make things a little clearer. A nicely written piece which hooked me from the first line. I couldn't find any faults...Jacob
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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I thought that you told me this piece well and thank you for offering an explanation below to help make things a little clearer. A nicely written piece which hooked me from the first line. I couldn't find any faults...Jacob
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Thank you very much, Jacob.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Very creative! I love how you took an actual historical event and made it into a poem. What might make this come alive more is to use dialogue. That will bring the people involved into the story more. Great job.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Very creative! I love how you took an actual historical event and made it into a poem. What might make this come alive more is to use dialogue. That will bring the people involved into the story more. Great job.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Thank you very much Michael. Good input. I'll mull that over.
Comment from ravenblack
Excellent telling of Minnosota history. Ironic that you chose a crown of heroic sonnets as there are no heroes here. Politicians, greed and vice- funny how some things never change. It reminds me of Ted Stevens, one time Alaska governor and his bridge to nowhere. Excellent and a six if I had one to give.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Excellent telling of Minnosota history. Ironic that you chose a crown of heroic sonnets as there are no heroes here. Politicians, greed and vice- funny how some things never change. It reminds me of Ted Stevens, one time Alaska governor and his bridge to nowhere. Excellent and a six if I had one to give.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Hah! That is an irony, isn't it. Did you catch the other irony that o mentioned in the author's notes?
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I'll have to go back and read them. No offense, but I often skip author notes.
Comment from GabbyLew
Thanks for the author notes at the end. I thought the poem could stand on its own without the notes, but it was fun to read the historical accounting as well. Your structure is distinct and consistent, and the rhythm and rhyme scheme made for a very steady read. This must have taken a lot of work so great job!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Thanks for the author notes at the end. I thought the poem could stand on its own without the notes, but it was fun to read the historical accounting as well. Your structure is distinct and consistent, and the rhythm and rhyme scheme made for a very steady read. This must have taken a lot of work so great job!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Thank you Gabbylew. Yes, it is a lot of work. Those stars are fabulous.
